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Reviews for Slyth's Snakepit

By : Tanya
  • From POOHBEAR74 on October 28, 2009
    I am so happy this is back up and on going because i love it so far.
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  • From DeathDancer on October 13, 2009
    Work on your grammar, and your characterization. Both are severely lacking.

    Your dialogue is tolerable. Not quite believable, but at the same time, not utterly unbelievable. Tweak it a bit, and it will be just fine.

    You need to flesh out your writing. These bare bones of mostly dialogue, with hardly any narration, is pitiable.

    Your concept is nice, but the writing style doesn't do it justice. You sound like a child who is writing their first attempt at any form of fiction. I say that not to be mean, but to give my opinion of the writing style. It needs a great deal of work to make it better.

    Death.
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  • From BlueTribalRose on October 04, 2009
    I really like how this story has played out and can't wait to see where you take it. Really short chapters so haven't gotten into the plot much.. hehe.. but thats ok from what I have read so far it has much promise. keep it up. Hope for an update soon... I'll be watching for one.
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  • From ANON - graviora on September 30, 2009
    Author has changed?? First story was great then, after the AN, become horrible like it's writing 8 or 9 years old kid
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  • From ladyedgecombe on September 29, 2009
    So now Harry goes back to Hogwarts a changed man. What will dumbledore say?
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  • From ANON - S.S on September 29, 2009
    It was alright it just goes on about how harry feels personally i don't like that but whatever floats your boat. Very short aswell i would like to see more interaction between snape and harry
    update soon
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  • From Elphaba on September 29, 2009
    Oh I so can't wait for them to find out! good Chapter
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  • From ANON - S.S on September 18, 2009
    Good chapter very short. It was good to have a look from Dumbeldore's point of view and were he stands and his manipulations with Harry. Can't wait for more update soon xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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  • From ANON - Anon on September 17, 2009
    wow he is one bitter man i hope snape saves him in time .....
    well love it and cant wait till the next update :)
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  • From Elphaba on September 17, 2009
    Oh My that was an interesting chapter
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  • From Elphaba on September 17, 2009
    Good chappie!
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  • From Baxter on September 16, 2009
    i luv ur story please update soon :)
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  • From ANON - azura on September 06, 2009

    looks interesting so far, though you might want to include some more lines that aren't dialoge..
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  • From ladyedgecombe on September 04, 2009
    I guess since Lucius is really Harry's head of family, he could arrange a marriage contract and circumvent Dumbledore's minipulations somewhat. I love that he IS at his aunt and uncle's house, just not the one Dumbledore thinks he should be at. I really like this story.
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  • From ladyedgecombe on September 03, 2009
    Excellent!! Wonder how they are going to handle Dumbles?
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