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Reviews for The Rise of the Drackens

By : StarLightMassacre

From Outlawgal on January 10, 2014
I'm sorry your break was ruined but thanks for posting the chapter it was a pleasant surprise. I a proud of Nasta being the top dominate and taking charge. Harry (I know is the sub but) was out of control. Its like he doesn't want Leolin to live (which I know is stretching it thin) demanding everything when he knows everything is being done to keep Leolin alive and to heal him. I also can't wait to see Harry ream and destroy the media he is not the little boy they think he is anymore.
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From ANON - Bamarose on January 10, 2014
I cried again poor Harry and Nasta and Blaise...and Draco and Max too lol and poor Leolin! I really hope there arn't to many more chapters like this cause this waiting thing is driving me insane! I can't wait to see the Daily Prophet get whats coming to them stupid nosy bastards...anyways can't wait till next time!
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From ANON - Cosmicwanderer on January 10, 2014
I was just wondering about Blaise. I know that people were debating whether or not he was a girl as well as his race. But I think it clearly says in the Harry potter books that Blaise is a 'black boy'. He is also played by a black actor. I noticed that in a lot of stories people always say he's white with shocking blue eyes, or green eyes or something other. I thought this was a bit strange because the other characters are normally always canon with their features. I guess what I'm asking is why you personally portrayed him as something he isn't in the books? I'm always curious to hear people's reasonings behind it.
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From ANON - Nrps on January 10, 2014
I meant missed not kissed. His children missed him.
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From ANON - Nrps on January 10, 2014
I have read this story from the beginning up until this point. Let me start by saying I loved the development and the writing of the first few chapters. Everything has been great so far up until Harry being upset with Remus. Even though you explained the reason I still felt it was a bit hypocritical and unfair on Harry's part. I know you won't agree with me but that's just my opinion.
There were a few things before the Remus and Harry thing that I felt were a. bit unfair as well; for example Harry's mates enabling his 'snapping' and telling him nothing is ever his fault. Sure everything wasn't but a few things seemed that way to me and I'm sure others as well. Also sanex "knowing better" than to come close to him is a bit harsh. Any sane person would have been concerned and probably followed as well, in situations ls where there is panic most people don't think first and act later, a concerned person would check on someone it's not like drakens attack him everyday so he just runs out of instinct.

Secondly I would like to comment on the treatment of Ashleigh or Ashley w/e it is. Most mother in laws do not like their daughter in laws or I this case a son in law, but they do however love the kids. She doesn't have to like Harry or even pay attention to him, her loving the children should be enough. It happens in everyday life, people are not required to like their children's spouse. It's very childish and petulant of the lot of them to treat her that way based on her feelings or her lack there of towards him. It just shows how childish he and his mates essentially are. Max shouldn't have to pick sides at least she tried to pretend to like him, god knows my grandmother openly expresses her dislike of my mother, and I'm sure that's not the only instance. Have you seen the movie 'monster in-law?"

Also the thing about max's uncle knowing better; what if he had left Harry and he killed his nieces? Would the parents of the children then be entitled to kill him? Because they say they'll kill him for tackling Harry but had he not there would have probably been lives lost. They are all enablers, the lot of them. I don't feel like they should punish Harry but everytime something happens he is always the victim and everyone else is a bad guy even when Harry is the aggressor.

Lastly I feel in the last installment everyone has been very inconsiderate towards max and this again comes back to childish petulance. He is human, a family member died and one almost did. Needing your own space is not a bad thing (as I recall Blaise did the same thing for something as insignificant compared to max's situation as studying) though he should be a dominant you are still portraying people with feelings and with those come these kinds of decisions. Yes his children kissed him and he should of at least came to see them but he was upset and hurting. When he did show up, instead of being grown ups everyone became very petty and started to gang up on him. People make mistakes.

Honestly I had to fight my better instinct to close this fanfic and read no further, not because Leolin was sick. I could hardly read through the childishness in this chapter. You started off very well but recently the quality has greatly dwindled. I'm not trying to flame you I just wanted to express my opinion.
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From ANON - Hannah on January 08, 2014
PLEASE DON'T KILL LEO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! He holds a special place in my heart. The thought of loosing a child is horrific. I don't think that Harry would be able to handle such a loss, I know I wouldn't. Leo reminds me of myself in some ways. He has certain needs that need to be met to insure his survival & I do too. I have a severe case of bipolar depression and anxiety. While my medication necessities & his low immune system are different situations he still needs special help like me. I want to see him survive & not give up on life. If you want to think of this in another manner, Harry would have a hard time testifying while he is still destroyed by the loss of his son. Please keep Leo alive.
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From ANON - aly on January 08, 2014
I love this and can't wait for more but i am sooo scared for Leolin since he was like one of my faves. Waiting obsessively for your next chapter.
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From Zimmius22 on January 07, 2014
I gotta say I love this fic tons! I normally followed the chapters after they came out but, I took a break for a while and just came back. I've just read all the chapters concerning Leolin and after the last chapter I was totally floored. I really hope you don't wind up killing him he is so very unique to the story. I'm waiting for the next chapter and just hopping something good happens, but with the title for the next one it just leaves feelings of dread. Desperately hoping for a good thing next chapter!
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From Me4Eva on January 07, 2014
As a rule I do not cry. I just don't. But when I read about Leolin and his possible death I couldn't help it. Love this fanfic and hope Leolin survives.
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From Clover_33 on January 06, 2014
This is the first time I've ever reviewed a fic but I couldn't help myself. I absolutely love this fic it's brilliant and amazing and everything I wish I could write. These last chapters have had me crying so hard my family became extremely concerned. You've truly mastered the art of evoking strong emotions in your readers and there aren't an overly large number of authors on here that have done that for me. I don't know if I'll be able to influence you at all but I am begging you on my knees if necessary to not kill Leolin. I don't think your characters deserve that but I guess it's up to you and I'll have to live with it. I don't know how to tell you how much I love this story. Thank You so much for posting this! I luv u soo much right now! Sorry if that's weird some people take that badly. And I'm rambling soooo....
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From ANON - SierraFitz on January 04, 2014
I have been reading this story off and on for about a year and a half, and last week I decided to look it up again and read from the beginning. This story has pretty much been what I do in my free time, I have been constantly reading and thinking about it at work, just wanting to get home to read. This story seems so real and the emotions are so real and raw. I love this story and am so sad for Leolin, I feel like I might bawl for days if that little boy doesn't make it through because he is so strong.
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From ANON - LingLing2482 on January 03, 2014
Omfg. I started reading this story when there were only seventy two chapters. And I literally JUST made an account on this website just so that I could review this story. First, this story is brilliantly written! I love the plot, set up, long chapters, and character development. I look forward to every chapter posted. Second, I just read the most recent chapter, poison, and it had my holding back years of my own for poor little Leolin! (~_~) I honestly am praying for Harry to unlock some of his uncontrolled magic that he used to prevent the miscarriage he almost had at the party from fighting Amelle and heal Leolin. That aside,keep up the good work! (^.^)
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From ANON - Rose on January 03, 2014
I have been reading your story for what feels like ever, and I love everything about it, your characater's are strong and amazingly well done!! Everything just flows together so perfectly! And I love how you write Harry, not every one delves in to him as much is feels you do and I find the story is just so floid that I can't help but re-read it every now and then between updates!!!

Thank you so much for shareing such a huge part of your awesome imagination with me(and well every one else that reads this!) I can never stop at just one chapter!
It has trully been an hounor taking this journy with you, and I hope you are well in good spirts!

Thank you again
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From ANON - Poisons Love on January 02, 2014
I cried so much during this chapter its lovely and heart wrenching please update soon. Also I was wondering if you could give a description of what Harry's mates look like at the end of the next chapter because I recently read Rise of the Drackens: Scaled Bits and in it you said Nasta was pale and I always pictured him with more of a bronze skin tone. Thanks for making this story .
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From ANON - nikki on January 02, 2014
Please, please, please, don't kill Leolin, I positively adore this story but I don't knoI'll be able to continue reading if you kill him. You created this adorable and loveable character, and just the thought of him dying brought me to tears, hell, I'm crying right now,so please, don't kill Leolin.
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