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Reviews for The Rise of the Drackens

By : StarLightMassacre

From Sullen-Faythe on December 20, 2012
Its stories like this that remind me why I love this site. Its totally worth all the trouble I go threw with my phone to read ever single chapter. Keep up the good work and take care of your self. I wish all writers could write as well as you and were able to take our fav characters and reinvent them but still keep their main personality alive like you do.
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From ZeoRegrediens on December 18, 2012
Gah. I have so much love for this fic, it's incredible. :D

Lots of fluffiness in this chapter - loved it. And Braiden's relationship with Harry: awww.
And I can't wait for Harry to use his outfits on his Mates soon.
I just wanted to say really quickly that whether you get the chance to update before Christmas or not, your updates are always great. Nice and long and always interesting. I can't see this story getting stagnant any time soon.
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From ANON - Rob on December 18, 2012
As a straight guy who's never read any fan fiction before, your story was quite a discovery. I started reading Harry Potter when I was 6 and so many years later is awesome to disover so many more stories based on a series I already know and love. I can't say I was too excited about the rather gay pairings at first, but the way you write has someone enabled me to enjoy it despite my own sexual preferences. Having read 40 chapters in 2 days, I can hardly deny I quite enjoy your story...

I originally wanted to read all of the story thus far, but I just wanted wanted to express my enthusiasm already! There have been a couple of pet peeves, however, which I'd like to point out as well. Of course I don't expect you to fully agree with me, but that's what reviews are for, right? :)

Obviously there are the occasional typo's that are bound to occur when writing this much, but if I ever get to a second read-through, I'll make sure to make a small list of them. If you don't mind a Dutchy correcting you in your native language, that is! My English is not flawless either, after all.

Something that has bothered me story wise were the changes to a male submissive's body: with everything going on, I honestly wouldn't have minded if you'd cramped in a basic set of female reproductive organs as well. It would just have made a little bit more sense than backdoor impregnation, at least to me. Saying all wizards could get pregnant pretty mich fixed this, but at the same time it felt a little bit like an excuse to have Harry openly be pregnant. The open mindedness regarding homosexuality and having multiple sexual partners required some getting used to (while I share the basic live and live principle, it's not really standard in our muggle society), but I suppose it allowed for more interesting story telling than having everyone hide in the cupboard all the time,

One last point of critique: I honestly don't understand the bottle feeding. Men are more than capable of producing milk when given the right hormones, so Drackens releasing those hormones during pregnancy and shortly after would have seemed more logical to me. (This somehow stuck with me after you wrote in a note that Harry wouldn't grow boobies. /Disappointment)

Overall: I realise countless of people have probably said this already, but please keep writing stuff! Thanks for introducing me to fanfiction, I'm sure I'll find some great stories to waste my time on. I mean; it's half past 2 AM and I'm writing this piece of prose, for crying out loud... Even Rowling herself never got me to do that.
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From ANON - Lara_Lynx on December 17, 2012
A really great birthdaygift for me, thank you very much! Its great and I hope you can post a new chapter before christmas, that would be so good, but don't get in any trouble over this...

Love you and your story!
Greetings from germany!
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From ANON - DustyTears on December 17, 2012
Oh my flying muffin fleece jesus pants. Your story is sooo amazing!!! I get so many . . . . feelings reading this I just can't even begin to tell you how many praises I have for you! It's sexy, sweet, adorable, orgasmic, fantastic, mystical, oh and did I say sexy? Cause it is super sexy approved! I love your story so much I actually reviewed which I haven't felt the need to do for any story in a long time! I hope you have an awesome christmas!!!! Live Long And Prosper!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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From ANON - S on December 16, 2012
Wow, this story is really good and well written. Normally, I quit reading stories once we start hitting the 20ish or so chapter. This story just kept me captive and I'm still looking forward to the next chapter.
Keep up the good work!
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From Zx14ninja on December 16, 2012
I'll be honest, this review has nothing to do with the new chapter, sorry. I was rereading some of the chapters and noticed you talked about marraige a few time and I was wondering if same sex marraige was legal in all of Britin as it was sorta implyed in the chapter Madness in the supermaket scene or if that is just going to be a Wizarding world only thing? I know here in the US it really depends on what state you live in, but I'm unfamiliar with British politics.

I did like the new chapter (Go Harry!) and can't wait for the next update.

Have a good holiday
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From ANON - Patricia on December 16, 2012
I love your story. I'm sick and I just read chapters 63 and 64 and reading them made me feel better than my medication. I laughed, drooled, and laughed some more. I don't like Smith either. I wish you an early happy Yule, or Merry Christmas, or whatever your religious holiday is. I would be so happy if you updated before Christmas but I in no way wish to rush you or even make you feel rushed. Take care as well. Blessed be.
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From ANON - Dani on December 15, 2012
I honestly don't know how you wrote all 64 of these chapters in just a year and a half! I absolutely adore this story and I'm sorry for only reviewing once I finished reading it all but I couldn't stop myself from clicking the next chapter button. I think it's taken me 2 weeks to get through it all, what with final exams and such, but it has been worth every second.
I think Nasta is my favorite character because he's so silent and strong and protective and takes such good care of his mates as top dominant. I'm also really enjoying seeing Draco come out of his shell and I can't imagine how he'll be when he has some biological children of his own. I'm hoping for a blond-hair, green-eyed beauty and I wouldn't be opposed to it being a little girl with a really sweet name.
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From ANON - Kit on December 15, 2012
I took me almost four days to read the whole thing and catch up. This story has sucked me in and I can't wait to read more. It has also inspired me to finally work on my fanfic that has been sitting on the shelf for over three years now. I am loving all your characters as well, I think Nasta has got to be one of my favorites. I was so excited when I got to the chapter when Harry chose him as a mate. And that he is top dominant makes me giggle like the fangirl I am.
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From ANON - richon on December 15, 2012
love your story , can't stop thinking about what happen to harry ?? will he be pregnate soon?? craving for more ... see you soon
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From bloodshound on December 15, 2012
well, that was stupid that hostess slut. considering who har and his lovers are, all they need to do is mention how very bad the service etc was and that place will be pretty much black listed. i'd be upset to if some whorish bint was both hitting on my man and dumping wine on me.
the drunken sex orgy thing was hilarious. I hope they didn't do themselves to much damage. >> still, no one can say they didn't enjoy their night out. ^^ what they remember of it. :P
interesting, i wonder if the boys will take them up on the suck up freebie meal.

bout time someone out side the family circle got to met the kids.

i wonder what had har so green for the game? still, they one so 'go, go, gryffindor!' ;p

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From Jan on December 14, 2012
Gods, I just love Ginny & Harry together, they are hilarious, and sarcastic, their brilliant!

Please update chapter 65 soon.
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From ANON - Andrea Readwolf on December 13, 2012
Ha! That's a great way to tease and torment your FB followers. ^_^ Loved seeing Harry back in the air, and I agree--it would be lovely to see him flying with his own wings. Looking forward to Harry's next heat--although I know he's not too enthused about it. I think it would be interesting to see how the rest of the family handles it. And I'm looking forward to Malfoy twins--can't remember if you said how many for sure Harry's next clutch would be, but I still have a lovely image of of two darling strawberry-blondes, more blonde then ginger, a real prince and princess of the Malfoy family. They'd be regal little hellions, too! Ha!
Thank you for keeping on with this delightful story. I understand RL has been dealing you some real challenge cards. I appreciate you being able to find the time and the inspiration to continue this story, especially since I've learned to love the extended cast dearly so (not that you made it difficult at all to love them all!).
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From ANON - K on December 13, 2012
I think men cry as much as women and I don't find it girly. I found it girly is where and what he cried over. Public humiliation? He has suffered much worse than that without a tear in his eye because it really isn't something he would cry about, this is Harry, he's a strong character, crying over people laughing seems very small and petty which it is and a stained shirt. He cries over people's deaths over what he think it's his fault but public humiliation? Harry? No, he's gone through much worse to cry over something as small and miniscule as public humiliation if he ever did face such public humiliation he'd get angry which usually happens. So it makes me cringe when he cried over it.

Draco has been a Slytherin player and from first year since he rode his first broom with Neville's remeberall, Harry had admitted that he was a really good flyer so how and why Blaise got picked as a quidditch captain is beyond me. Even J K Rowling has admitted that. But I guess I shouldn't have been surprised the fic has always been biased to Blaise anyway. And I've seen other reviews realising that too.

Love this chapter but even if you're the writer, please don't be blind to your own character flaws.
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