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Reviews for A Mother\'s Switch

By : Thracer
  • From Zephyr on November 27, 2014
    Nice lessons! Next time she should star by pointing him her erogenous spots. Yes, she's getting a kick at pleasuring him, but if she wants to train him up as a lover, Lily should teach her her body no? Other than that, it's a nice story with an actual plot and a nice build up. I say keep up the good work. :)
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  • From robert77833 on November 26, 2014
    I think maybe focusing more on Lily's feelings while pleasuring Harry, as well as his own would have maybe made this more erotic, you kind of just said what was going on a bit more than you did in the chapter 2 lemon.

    I'd like to see Harry come to Lily and ask for a lesson.

    Perhaps something to do with what girls like to wear, Lily could model outfits for him? Maybe Lily could wear something teasing, and then tell Harry that she'll introduce him to all her outfits if he does something for her.

    Or perhaps just the general concept of her being more willing to reward Harry or do what he wants after he does things she approves of, I guess with handjob/oral currently or progressing to a titjob.
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  • From robert77833 on November 13, 2014
    I really hope you update soon!

    Interested to see where you plan on taking this as the end of ch 3 indicates an upcoming lemon but the A/N contradicts that.
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  • From robert77833 on October 02, 2014
    I like the way you're taking this, it seems believable, though I'd like to see more lemons (and it only makes sense to me that now that Harry has been exposed to sex and enjoyed it, he would angle for more). Maybe you could work it into your lessons as a reward or something? Update more please!
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  • From jamescun on April 19, 2014
    have harry force james to watch harry fuck his wife
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  • From robert77833 on March 26, 2014
    i hope you plan on updating this some more!
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  • From ANON - bill560682 on January 13, 2014
    now the only things i see wrong in chapter 2 are james says he was married for 11 years but harry is just getting ready to start 3rd year so has just turned 13 plus 9 full months before birth means they should have been married at least 14 years. also it was said james and lily had daughters but only one was mentioned by name as if there was only one daughter. other then these minor things this chapter was great.
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  • From ANON - Emily on November 06, 2013
    Please continue it. It was awesome :)
    Can you make harry's cock way bigger then his dad. Also i think she sud walk in on him coming out of the shower :)
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  • From ANON - bill560682 on November 05, 2013
    i think this is great and you should keep the story going.
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  • From GertrudeFlint on November 04, 2013
    First of all, congratulations on choosing to write Harry/Lily: a really interesting rare pairing with not nearly enough stories. Reading your story might encourage others to try writing more of these two characters together.

    I like how you've decided to make them a pretty happy couple, enjoying each other's bodies without a heap of angst and guilt. And they seem to be equals in bed too, with Harry being quite active and assertive, not just following Lily's instructions. (I know you say he's in third year, but to me he comes across as at least 20, an adult; there's nothing in his appearance, actions, or dialog that definitely says young teen.) If you decide to keep writing past the first chapter, I hope you bring in some more references to the wizarding world, a broader picture to connect them to the canon characters and context.

    I'm sure you'll get some pointers to other Harry/Lily fics. I'd like to draw your attention to something a bit different: mother/son in the next generation. Currently at two chapters of Ginny with her 13-year-old son, James. The site is fanfiction dot net, author's name is Times of Bliss, title is "The Potter Family - Ginny and James Sirius", story ID 9652049.
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  • From robert77833 on November 04, 2013
    hey check out Hinamari Kidou Master's stuff on fanfiction and chapter 4 of Dragen's Pottercest fic on hpfanficarchive for similar stuff.

    Write more of your own too though!
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