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Reviews for The Quickening

By : Desert_Sea
  • From ANON - lovey_reader on January 09, 2016
    Ummm.... there's no such thing as too much naughty?! But if you ever get to the point where it IS too much and it becomes a chore to read, then I will be the first to tell you. You haven't disappointed me yet, and I really don't think you will.
    I liked how she misses him after only a few days. That made me smile. Awww. I didn't smile however at the cliff hanger. That's okay. It just excites me for the next chapter. I can't wait to see who it is. I do hope it's Lucius or maybe even Draco.....Hmmmm....
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  • From OracleObscured on January 09, 2016
    Mmm, I love a good cliff-hanger. Especially cliff-hangers that reek of wet fish.
    You know when you're watching a horror movie, and they make it super quiet so they can scare you with a sharp burst of sound? That's how felt as Hermione contemplated her life on the tower. (Uh oh, it's getting too quiet. Something bad's gonna happen.)
    I take it Lucius is the one who took her. I'm eager to see what the hell he plans to do with her. (Surely he doesn't just want a quick face lift. How much prettier can one man get?)
    The opening lines this chapter were great. I loved the time stamp.

    "It would be a misnomer anyway, the Professor of Sex was right here at Hogwarts." This just made me laugh.

    Crucible - Okay, I had to look this up. I knew the other definitions, but not "ceramic or metal containers in which metals or other materials may be melted or subjected to very high temperatures." I need a crucible. For butter.

    "...he was like a dog." The sniffing part cracked me up. Like what's the worst thing you could do with potion ingredients? Let's do a sniff-test.

    Expeditious. What a delicious word. (Okay you used expeditiously but that didn't rhyme for my purposes.)

    "...burst to attention like popping corn." When you appropriate a word you go all out. (You know you used popping twice in the same paragraph.) But I liked this variation. Popcorn nipples are great. (And go well with butter. See? I need a crucible.)


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  • From ANON - ObviouslyLost on January 08, 2016
    I've been reading your stories since about a week ago... and just realized there were new chapters on this one. Way to leave. cliffhanger, omg! Brilliant writing, though. I agree with. previous commentor that even I would read 200 chapters. :)
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  • From bitchandmoan on January 08, 2016
    I particularly liked your comparison of Hermione's nipple to a kernel of popcorn. The imagery of the clouds in the sky above the astronomy tower was also striking. It was elegant, descriptive but brief.
    The extracorporeal projection was a nice treat, I'd sort of missed those interactions. My favorite projection is still the one where Severus writes Hermione the letter, but I also like when she gets him off at the head table during breakfast because it was nice to see him really lose control for once.
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  • From Skybee on January 06, 2016
    I love your fic, once they got together everything was amazing!
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  • From OracleObscured on January 06, 2016
    I had to save reading this for later in the day so I'd have something to look forward to after editing all day. So worth it.

    The strobe light scene was awesome. The writing was vivid and the images were hot. Brilliant.

    "eyebrow semaphore" Oh my god. Yes. This is definitely one of my top three favorite lines from you. Perfection.

    "Each time the light flashed on, her sensual movements leapt out at him like some sort of erotic clockwork doll." And "luminous stop frame animation" I liked these both for their vividness. I could easily picture everything that was happening, and I particularly liked clockwork doll. That was excellent.

    "...water droplets suddenly appeared to be falling in slow motion. Like levitating crystalline beads, they were deeply mesmerising and with the heat, steam and roar, created a multi-sensory disconnect that was both disconcerting and exhilarating." I enjoyed this whole thing, but I loved "appeared to be falling in slow motion," and "levitating crystalline beads." I don't know how you could have described this more accurately.

    "Rocking back on her haunches she pumped him with her fist until he cried out, his spurts of come turning into slow motion projectiles that spattered her cheeks, mouth and the tiles behind her. His head pitched back against the wall as he pulled her up."
    First I just love the idea of him coming on her and watching the spatter progress in the strobe. Also I like the word haunches. And I know you used pitched just to make my clit sing. Yesssss.

    "Lap" This isn't the first time you've described Alan Rickman's speech pattern in way that made me want to come, but I thought I'd remember to mention it this time.

    The whole part with his wand was lovely/brilliant. I so wanted to be Hermione. I also liked the playful competitiveness between them. It was both sweet and exactly how I would imagine them to be.

    Okay, I have to go edit my chapter again. I'm about to go cross-eyed. I'm looking forward to your coming fish-slap.
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  • From Severus1snape on January 06, 2016
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  • From Remarkable on January 05, 2016
    Hiya! I am still reading, trying to catch up. Wow, you updated so quickly it's taking me quite awhile to devour and love on each and every chapter! But I wanted to drop a line and let you know this is one of the most interesting stories I've read in a long while. I've recc'd it to some folks, so hopefully you'll have more readers/reviewers. You're truly a natural if you're not doing much editing or beta'ing - and bonus - you make me have to look up a few words, and I consider myself well read/educated! You're from England, I take it? I always envy the British writers for knowing the cultural language piece, and the ins and outs of slang in your country. I tend to write too many "Americanisms" but, oh well. I'm an American and never had a long-term beta, so some of it is to be expected, as long as I try to filter it out. Anyway! What an interesting turn of events! Did she heal Harry on her own? I'll have to check it out in the next chapter. I wish I had time to sit and read all the way through, but alas this is a busy month for me, so I'll catch up as I am able. Hugs!
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  • From Evestra on January 05, 2016
    I am absolutely loving this story.nice plot, great smut and my favourite pairing. What more could I want. Looking forward to the next chapter.
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  • From ANON - lovey_reader on January 04, 2016
    Awww...he said Snapes! I love this story. It's so naughty but has just enough sweetness that makes you go awwwww.
    I didn't see the sex book coming. I thought they were going to give the curse to Lucius or get back at him or something. But I liked where you went instead. I cant wait for the next chapter.
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  • From OracleObscured on January 04, 2016
    This was so freakin cute. I love the idea of them writing a sex book, sort of the Masters and Johnson of the wizarding world. All this cuddliness is going to make that fish slap even smellier.


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  • From ANON - LeWyKi on January 03, 2016
    ohhh, and there I had just thought it was all going far too smoothly, for the last two chapters. Just then that annoying 'outside world' intrudes. Still, you give a new meaning to fast and thanks so very much for these latest chapters :-)
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  • From ANON - Sal05 on January 03, 2016
    A threesome with Lucius, that would be awesome! Just saying lol. Great work again, I had the talent/ skill to write as fast as you and make the plot make sense too. I'm just amazed by you. Keep it up! * cheers! *
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  • From bitchandmoan on January 03, 2016
    Man, that mirror sex was hot! I liked the position, it shows off Severus's hidden strength. I'm interested to see what his thoughts are on what Lucius said to him in the bookstore. I wish you the best at work tomorrow!
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  • From OracleObscured on January 03, 2016
    Seriously? You updated again before I could review the chapter I read last night? Well, now you have to take them both in one big gang-bang review.

    Chapter 21 was a pleasing combination of humor and sweetness. I'm sure you're getting ready for another fish-slap, but I like the valleys of your storytelling as much as the peaks. There's more sex in the valleys (but the peaks move the story along).

    Favorites in this chapter:

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