Reviews for Dark Witch

BY : Nescafe

  • From saxman66 on October 18, 2018

    Interesting update. With the bit about the Weasely's if the goblins have removed all the spells on them, including tracking spells won't this make clear to Dumbledore that something has happened as he will no longer be able to locate them?


    Also with the life-debt would this include the younger children who are very young at this point – Ron being about Hari's age and Ginny a year younger so it seems strange that they would be able to be included in such a move. Even the twins are still basically children now IIRC. Plus since the life-debts have been declared to two bodies, Lupin and House Potter isn't there the potential for confusion on what happens if there was a conflict between those two?


    Glad you found a way to explain the defusing of the sexual element between Jarius and Hari.


    As I say I don't follow the details of the wider and complex universe here but is definitely a fascinating story.


    Don't really know enough about the interactions between the characters to give a meaningful vote in the poll.

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  • From saxman66 on September 30, 2018



    Interesting story and set up although I must admit I'm struggling to keep track of all the relationships and groups. However this last chapter has the potential for a lot of fallout as a result.


    If the assumption about Dumbledore having put loyalty spells on so many people, not just Bill Weasely then its difficult not for the news to come out and he's going to be in deep shit. Which would have some nasty side-effects as it might make Voldamore's revival a bit easier if the light mages are in some disorder as a result.


    Also with the banking seeking to reclaim the money Dumbledore seems to have stolen from the Potter bank accounts and the amount of resources that are being frozen because of Hari's wide ranging ancestry its going to highlight that something big is happening. Even if the goblins don't mention any names the fact that so much is being grouped together suggests that someone has a hell of an inheritance. [I remember reading a description of Charles V, the Hapsburg emperor having half a dozen silver spoons in his mouth because of his vast inheritance but Hari's potentially making him look like a nobody, at least in the wizard's world.] As such a lot of people will be asking questions about who is the inheritor and what it might mean. Even if none of them know about the link with the Deadly Hallows.

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  • From Dragon's Mistress on July 04, 2018

    Interesting story. I find I'm quite curious how all this will pan out. Who all will become lifemates? I think Hermione and Ginny would make wonderful mates...they are portrayed as fiercely loyal and protective of the ones they love. And then there's Luna...she almost seems too natural for the part. :) I also love that Remus is getting a new pack! He deserves that and so much more!! Anyway, can't wait to see what you post next! Thanks for sharing!

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  • From Jazzielady76 on July 02, 2018

    Hello! Will you be updating the story soon? I’m enjoying the story and looking forward for more :)

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  • From Nari-Chan on July 01, 2018

    im soo in love with this story please keep up the great work and update again soon.

    i cheak everyday after work and smile and get excited when i see that you updated :) 

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  • From staar on June 13, 2018

    so in this story , everyone is after Hari to either kill her or use her....great just great ! where is black and snape ???? so Dubbledork is really really bad in this one !!! ok you got me so hope to see an update soon :):):)

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  • From Nari-Chan on June 13, 2018

    im loving this so far please pleaser add more soon :)

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  • From staar on May 21, 2018

    just read your story really good, can't wait for seems Dubbledork is going to be an ass in this one...hope they are all stong to kepp hari safe from the old fart :):):)

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