Reviews for The Unbroken

BY : Desert_Sea


  • From wirewoolly on May 24, 2018

    Oh, blimey! His acts of humanity are completely offset by that final brutish act in this chapter :( I'm so confused, as I'm sure is Hermione! As much as I don't want to know that all will end well for her, for them, there's always a part of me hoping for a HEA with this pairing. 'Obviously' (nice image of Rickman's SS from the film dropped into this chapter, btw :D), I was relieved to learn she wasn't about to suffer at the hands of Lucius because there's he hope that she won't be degraded for the sake of it (nor do I think you'd write that story anyway, plus this is a HG/SS pairing), and all was seemingly on the winding road to fluff until now! Gah!...



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  • From wirewoolly on May 24, 2018

    Oh, blimey! His acts of humanity are completely offset by that final brutish act in this chapter :( I'm so confused, as I'm sure is Hermione! As much as I don't want to know that all will end well for her, for them, there's always a part of me hoping for a HEA with this pairing. 'Obviously' (nice image of Rickman's SS from the film dropped into this chapter, btw :D), I was relieved to learn she wasn't about to suffer at the hands of Lucius because there's he hope that she won't be degraded for the sake of it (nor do I think you'd write that story anyway, plus this is a HG/SS pairing), and all was seemingly on the winding road to fluff until now! Gah!...



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  • From OracleObscured on May 19, 2018

    Hmmmm, Severus has some issues. (But when doesn’t he have issues?) I’m dying to know what’s been going on with him. Living in a world of Death Eaters would turn me into a deranged psycho too. I can’t really blame him for being so volatile. But I’d be nuts if I were Hermione. The mixed signals are maddening, and there’s no one to trust. She all on her own, and that’s a horribly lonely place to be when you’re scared and unsure of your surroundings.

    “Hermione sat on her bed, letting her eyes rove over the landscape of laboratory equipment, burnished by the warm glow of the magical lanterns fluttering around the room.” Loved this. I think it was the burnished that did it for me :) (I also really liked the description of the storeroom, but I don’t think I saved any lines from that bit.)

    “The man of perpetual winter.”—Unh! So good! Especially with Spring comparison. (But even without that, it still would have been brilliant all on it’s own.)

    “But so many things did that she now felt quite separate from it, and could look at it with a curious detachment that seemed like it might, in the long-term, be both helpful and harmful to her.”—I’ve been there, and I feel for her. It’s a slightly horrifying way to live. But sometimes necessary.

    “she was perturbed by how noisily they clacked against the flags. She suspected that it was deliberate, enabling him to keep track her.”—I can see how it would be useful for a strung out spy to know when someone was approaching, but the idea that he did it with clogs just cracked me up. :D She should tell him about flip-flops. Just as loud but without the horse clopping of clogs. Or he could just put a bell on her :) I have a bell anklet somewhere for dancing, but it drives me nuts to just walk around with it on.

    “for the tell-tale signs that she did, in fact, possess a body of indeterminate shape and size.”—This made me laugh too. The droll wording was perfect. (I can’t decide if droll is the adjective I want, but I can’t think of anything better, so I hope that made sense.)

    Can’t wait for the next chapter <3

     



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  • From OracleObscured on May 16, 2018

    Mmmm, things are getting interesting :) Snape is all hardcore and closed off. (And so violent.) I don’t want to say I love it . . . but I do. As a character, he’s difficult and contradictory, which makes him more intriguing to read about. (As a person, however, I wouldn’t go anywhere near him. I like saying thank you, and I prefer my throat remain unbruised.)

    Hermione’s viewpoint is so fucking vivid—I’m in descriptive heaven :) You’ve captured the desolation and torment of her situation wonderfully. I saved it in my favs, but the line about her jaw aching when she went to eat was fucking brilliant. You’ve sucked me into her misery and confusion—and I love it <3

    Fav lines:

    “bare like a neglected child—devoid of innocence, devoid of trust.”—Uuunnnnh! Gorgeous!

    “Somewhere between Victorian era and asylum-ware.”—Bahahaha! This is such a perfect description. I know exactly what you mean, and it’s fucking hilarious. But also creepy and sad. (But I can’t stop laughing.)

    “she chewed slowly, the joints of her jaw feeling like they had rusted over, “—So vivid! Love this detail.

    “Whomever he was, whatever he was trying to do, she would definitely remember not to thank him for it.”—And amidst all the darkness and fear you got me to laugh again. Great ending.

    I’m eager to see what Snape has up his sleeve. He never does what’s expected, so this could go in lots of different directions. And you’re so wonderfully twisted, I’m sure I’ll never guess. I need more!



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  • From OracleObscured on May 15, 2018

    Aaahh! You got up chapter two before I had time to write my review for chapter one. Your muse is outpacing me :)

    I freaking loved this first chapter. The mood and images were so fucking perfect. I loved despicable Lucius. (Well, I hated him, but you know what I mean.) Everything was just so deliciously evil. (Crap, maybe I need to let out my dark side more often. I am so fucking INTO this.)

    I didn’t save any specific favorites because I loved the whole damn thing. I think the opening bit with Lucius was one of my favorite openings ever. The action and attitude were just so spot on.

    The way you presented Severus was brilliant. Indirect. Mysterious. Very canon. Gaaah! I fucking love it <3 And Hermione was disturbingly tough. So disconnected and numb. (I sholdn’t be loving that so much, but I do.)

    And of course I’m wondering what Snape’s really up to, and I’m dying to read the next chapter. (Alas, I must wait till later, as I have to take a shower and eat. Fuck, I’m already late.)

    I’ll be back with another review either tonight or tomorrow.

    Don’t write another chapter before then! :) (Okay, you can. I’ll never complain about rapid chapter releases. I know I’ll just want more when I’m done with the next one :))



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  • From Peahen on May 12, 2018

    A very intriguing start!



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