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Reviews for LMinuMinute Crisis

By : Quillusion
  • From ANON - giova on October 07, 2003
    Quill, you are truely wonderfull, as is your story! I can't wait for more of it!
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  • From ANON - aprilgrey on October 07, 2003
    Thank you so much for these lovely chapters! I'm looking forward to your updates.
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  • From ANON - Beeky on October 07, 2003
    Finally chapter two! Don't make us wait too long for chapter 3. You had me hooked from chapter 1. I really liked the extra touch with the chess pieces especially the black king and queen retreating back to the box. Waiting for a graphic account of Snape losing his viginity. Well written, keep up the good work.
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  • From Fish on October 07, 2003
    LMAO! I love the wording in this fic! AND THE CHESS PIECES! i'm in an odd mood... *sigh* loved this chapter! excellent! encore!

    MORE MORE!

    ciao,
    Fish
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  • From ANON - Jenny on October 07, 2003
    Lovely. A very nice continuation of an interesting start. I look forward to more!
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  • From ANON - GlindaTrisstt on October 07, 2003

    This is a very interesting idea and I can't wait for the good stuff. ^_~

    But .........

    Please explain how to have sex with a non-corporeal ghost.

    Glinda
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  • From on October 07, 2003
    Ack...you tease!

    This is a chapter with so many good points, I fear this could become a long, gushy type review, so I'll just try to contain myself.

    The anger, embarrassment, rejection and general snark are well in evidence in Severus. You write him so well and perhaps that's just an observation from someone who sees him in the same light...I'm not sure.

    The tension and pathos of Severus stripped of his secrets is the pivot for the whole chapter and what a chapter.

    I love the way you dis-assemble the bad boy image; the general dig at the idea that whilst bad boys attract us, not many stay the distance in the relationship stakes. It's poignant, tense and true and just opens the way for the more intimate conversation to follow.

    The idea of Moaning Myrtle is a delicious witticism thrown in to stop the whole chapter from descending into more maudlin territory and given the extreme intimacy you've managed to create, it works very, very, well.

    Loved the idea of Ron Weasley unable to function with his fly done up and it's another of those instances where I paint him the same way. (Great minds and all that).

    The chess pieces are wonderful and so well described that not only can I see Albus' admonishment of the king, but also the tennis rally swivel as the conversation heats up.

    I've always thought that the most telling sign of a good writer, versus a so-so writer, was their ability to draw the reader in so completely, that they felt like a voyeur caught in the middle of something they shouldn't be seeing or hearing. It gives you all the more kudor inr inviting Hermione into that position at thginnginning of the chapter.

    You are a dreadful tease though and as cliffhangers go - it's a scream in frustration rating. I do hope you'll update this soon, but in any case I'll be back for more...


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  • From LilyMalfoy on October 07, 2003
    This is absolutely brilliant. I cannot wait for more. Ok, I can, but that's because the anticipation only makes it that much better. I especially loved the end of the second chapter... Those silly randy chess pieces. And Moaning Myrtle, that cracked me up. There's just so much I loved about this I could sit here and recite the entire two chapters and add one of my own by pointing out everything I liked. Sorry that I have nothing really constructive to say. I am a big fan of the constructive review.
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  • From ANON - Corazon on October 07, 2003
    OMG! This is fabulous! Yes - it is definitely
    worth continuing. Your words are so brillantly
    placed: their emotions, their thoughts, their
    actions, their words - wow!

    Hugs,
    Corazon
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  • From ANON - Sam on October 07, 2003
    Brilliant. Simply brilliant. Everyone in character, backstory enough to justify the developing feelings, and a lovely counterpoint with the chess pieces' reactions. I don't think I've ever read such evoce ane and mature dialogue in a fan fiction before this. Please go on!
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  • From ANON - Daya on October 07, 2003
    Gah.

    Am speechless. Mouth is vaguely opening and shug fog forming the word 'more!'. Oh god, I loved this! The chess pieces were inspired, please keep them through the rest of the story...anyway you can! 'I'm a virgin, not an innocent' - promises promises, Professor Snape. I do believe that was one of the sexiest kisses I've read on here, and to say I am jealous is an understatement! How I long to be in hermione's place right now. *wipes trail of drool from chin* Please let them have fun, please!!

    Of course, there is a decent plot line going on as well here, I can't neglect to say that, plus a fabulous writing style that has so much potential!

    You know, for someone who claimed to be speechless at the beginning of this review, I have a lot of positive comments to say! Bravo! *throws roses in general direction of author* Please more, more I beg you!

    daya.
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  • From ANON - Rilla on October 07, 2003
    Beautiful!
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  • From ANON - Estrilda on October 07, 2003
    I absolutely adored your secondary plot line with the chess pieces. Wonderful story.
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  • From ANON - Jade Queen on October 07, 2003
    Amazing! Rarely do you ever see such detail in a fan fiction. You have greatly mastered the art of creation with beautiful, intelligent vocabulary and quite an imagination. Snape is quite an appealing character, and bettered by this writing. Quite alikelikely pair - yes. I do hope this continues!
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  • From ANON - Kiristeen on October 07, 2003
    Oh my!!!! ::fans self to calm down::

    Now *that* was worth the wait. Humor -- adored the chess pieces and nearly died laughing at their antics and the subtle humor laced throughout what *had* to have been a very embarrassing confrontation (and could have been so much worse). And sensual heat!!?? Oh my! ::goes back to fanning self:: It's been awhile since I responded so strongly to something so innocent. All I can say is "Wow" and bow to your skill.

    Oh, that, and plllllllllleeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaasssssssssseeeeeeee donake ake me wait quite so long for the next part. LOL


    Kiri
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