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Reviews for The Subjugation of Hermione Granger

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From ANON - traydr vic on February 27, 2004
C'mon Duckie, don't give up. Y. You can wrap this up in a few chapters without doing major damage to the story. I don't think you have to worry about the Ron issue - I don't see it as an integral part of the story. You can just let it lie and pick it up in another story. The only thing that will cause a problem is dealing with the Voldemort issue. My suggestion would be to just take it out of the story, then you won't have to deal with it. If I remember correctly you only brought it up in one chapter, when Harry had his dream. Should be easy enough to cut out. As to continuing the story, if you don't want it to go on forever all you have to do is get out of the middle. Wrap up the Hermoine/Draco thing tonight by having him do something so disgusting even Hermoine can't continue with this "experimentation" (although I can't imagine anything more debasing than licking semen off a dirtyor).or). Have Hermoine reconcile with Harry and Ron. Have her confess to Harry about her experimentation with the Imperius curse. She doesn't have to go into all the details. Draco can't say anything or he'll end up in Azkaban. As far as I can gather, someone allowing one to do the curse doesn't excuse doing it. I would then have Harry beat the shit out of Draco, but that's just me. A couple of chapters should be enough to have Harry and Ron forgive her - you have a fertile imagination, I'm sure you can work out a believable scenario. One more scene where Harry and Hermoine fall in love and have beautiful loving sex and voila! I don't have your imagination or writing skills so I could never pull this off, but I know you can. This may not be the way you want to go, but you did ask for suggestions. Thanks for everything so far - please don't give it up!
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From ANON - observer on February 27, 2004
I think you are onto a great idea with the Harry and Hermoine thing. While Harry is looking for love in a way so is Hermoine whether or not she realize this or even believe she deserves to be love. Maybe that why she finds pure ure in someone abusing her. I mean she did question her self once abut it. Maybe you can tie that concept in where each of them is seeking the same thing then come to the realization that what they are seeking might be discovered with each other. Maybe Harry first giving her what she want the way she wants it but eventually teaches her how it can be. Just an idea. However which way you take it this is a challenge but I think you can do it. h/hr forever
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From ANON - joe on February 27, 2004
i think if your breaking it up then have harry have a part on his own. Let Hermione do her thing with Draco and Ron do his thing with all the others. While Ron is geg pog popular Harry is the boy who lived so he should be sought after at least as much as Ron. Maybe have him start dating someone like Parvarti or one of the Hufflepuff girls or maybe even a slytherin maybe a female Blaise Zambini or something like that. Harry is more a relationship type but that doesnt mean he cant have multiple relationships after the one he is in doesnt work out. You could also put Hermione seperate and Harry and Rons stories together and make a competition out of it between Harry and Ron on who can hook up with more people. That would be an interesting story as they make their way through the hogwarts rank and files. Maybe even extra points for female teachers. Just a thought but it would be an interesting read and keep the stories at 2, one hermione the other harry vs ron for king player of hogwarts.
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From ANON - Kim on February 27, 2004
I must say that I really like this story. I can see spliting Ron's story off. As for Harry and Hermione, I guess it depends on how you want this to end....is Harry going to find out what Hermione's doing, they fight, then make up/fall in love? or are they never going to have a romantic relationship? If they're never going to get together again, then split it. If they will get together, then keep it together. I hope this makes sense. Please write more soon.
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From ANON - Hanna DelaZ on February 26, 2004
I don't know what to tell you. I never advise an author to go against the flow of their own story. However Rons exploits are of the least importance in this fic so if you take them out to shorten it that would be fine. You write marvellously and I would hate to see this fic stop. Take your time order your thoughts and let the story carry you through.
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From ANON - mockingbird917 on February 26, 2004
I feel like they should be turned into three stories. It'll be really messy if Harry ends up dealing with the whole Draco/Hermione thing, and I'd actually like to see her deal with it on her own. Take as long as you need; I hope you get things figured out.
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From ANON - star on February 26, 2004
Hi, I was just wondering if the reason you are really splitting the stories up is because of what Mirta wrote. It looks to me like she is a jealous 12 year old. I was just wondering. I fully understand the whole story, and I'm enjoying it very much, but if you want to spilt them I'm cool with it. I think Draco is getting fluffy on hermione, and it would be interesting if harry found them doing something Naughty! lol :}
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From ANON - sharono on February 26, 2004
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From ANON - Hermione Cosplayer on February 26, 2004
I'll give it some thought and give you a longer response another time. I'm glad you are pulling the stories apart. It's kind of why I never reviewed. I always felt like I was reading a mish-mash of a bunch of really good chapters thrown together, but it didn't seem to come together as a whole and I wasn't sure how to say that. It's a lot easier to word it once you know that the author agrees.
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From ANON - Amaya on February 26, 2004
Well, the most I can say here is that if you really need to separate the plots into different stories to make it possible to finish then do it. Since I am hoping for an H/Hr ending I think you should put Harry and Hermione's story together to have it tie together in the end with Harry looking for love and finding it with Hermione and Hermione looking for sexual satisfaction and finding it with Harry, hopefully without him having to put an Unforgiveable on her.

Anyways, I hope you get advice that will be more helpful than mine and be able to finish the story soon.

~Amaya
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From ANON - Vmarc9 on February 25, 2004
Hi, great writings must I say, but all this sexual madness of Hermione makes me feel "sick".
What does she want ?
I still can't understand her or you.
I truelly believe I would like this to end as a HHr pairing for it seems that only Harry really cares for her: no forcing, no magic involved but love.
Hermione seems too wise to fall only for power, neither Dumbledore, nor Draco should be match for her but a caring sweetheart like Harry
That's what I believe.
Marc
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From ANON - brittni on February 25, 2004
mmmmmmmmmm, i love!!! keep going, and bring back the sex!! lol!!

harry beat mcgonagall, harry beat mcgonagall!!! ^_^
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From ANON - Mirta on February 24, 2004
Hi, first at all, let's introduce my self. My name is Mirta . I live in Buenos Aires.

As a professional reader, I spent the most part of my time reading.ead ead every
little peace that I receive. At the present, I am working in a paper about Fan fics.
I choose Harry Potter books, because it became in a literary boom worldwide.

I don't usually post my opinion on the sites, but with all my respect, your work
was really offensive to me. I know that these site is for adult reader. I know the
game rules, but your work have not a plot, is bore and totally incredible. When I
was reading it, I thought that I am watching a cheaper porno movie; because
situations are completing unbelievable.

The weak in your work, is that you don't respect the character's personalities.
Because, Harry Potter never could sleep with Ginny in the Wesley's backyard,
just because they were alone. Ginny is not that kind of girl, and most important
Harry is not that kind of man.

But the really incredible was "Hermione
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From ANON - cdog21 on February 22, 2004
I suppose it can't be too easy but this chapter was just screaming for
them to get back together but that damn Malfoy got in the way again.
Well whar har happens i know i will enjoy it completly so update soon k
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From ANON - spaz141 on February 22, 2004
and things become slight more clear. Here's to Hermione eventually finding a healthier form of fulfillment. thanks.
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