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Reviews for The Line...Crossed

By : Witchcraft
  • From ANON - Angelina Weasley on November 14, 2003
    Ron's a rat bastard for abusing Hermione! I hope you write more about why he's treating her that way. But I love how Harry is there to pick up the pieces. I adore Harry/Hermione stories. Fabulous job. ^_^
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  • From ANON - lexcel on November 14, 2003
    Just want to say I love your other story The Marriage Law! I don't know what the huge controversy is about this story. If I don't like a story or see mistakes in it I usually just immediately leave. I'm not here to flame at all, I for one support the Harry/Hermione coupling. Pacing the story and such is up to the author, not reviewers. All I want is for you next time you write to have two things next to you. A dictionary and a thesaurus. THIS ISN'T MEANT TO BE A FLAME, HONEST!

    I write HP fics myself and I always keep those two handy. Believe me, writing even just for fun, is an effort. Hell, my stories aren't perfect. I donlwaylways use correct grammer and sentencing structure, but I continue writing because someone out there will take to a story and want to read more.

    I'm sure you're sooooooo sick of suggestions. I just hope you keep writing. Also, any cursing and such you feel the need to send my way if I hoffeoffended, is fine. I hope I didn't. Bye.
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  • From ANON - Perry D. on November 14, 2003
    Unlike everyone else knocking you down, I'll just say interesting story. I hope you continue this.
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  • From ANON - Pixi on November 13, 2003
    For Christ
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  • From ANON - DracosBlueEyedBlonde on November 13, 2003
    Hey, I've only read the first chapter but I think it has potential. Just pace yourself, you've got a lot going on in a short amount of time. Also your grammar and spelling could be better. Do you have a beta? If not, I'm willing to help if you want, just email me. It takes courage to put yourself out there and some people choose to look past that and leave rude and hateful reviews.


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  • From ANON - Macy Gray on November 13, 2003
    Well, I like the story. That's why fanfiction was invented, people! If I wanted to write a story where Snapes sings show toons I could because it's an author's creativity. Loosen up people. If writers can put Harry and Draco together or Snape and Hermione, then this story is the least of my worries. =)
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  • From ANON - Sasami on November 13, 2003
    I'm sorry to say I have to agree with Jo on several points. These characters are so out of character that I can't even imagine them as HP ... they sound like totally random people you just thought up in your head and slapped HP names to. Also, writing is an art. Subtlety and eloquence get your points across much better than just plopping words down on paper, or in this case, on the internet. These are just some things to consider. You're clearly a beginner and will get better with time.
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  • From on November 13, 2003
    Pretty nice start, Potter. Story has a lot of potential.

    But what I really wanted to say was I hope the reviewer Jo didn't stomp on your pride too much. Nasty idiots are a waste of time, so I hope you keep on writing. As for Jo, I would like to say I was shocked and appalled by this malicious review. I'm all for constructive criticism, but this was just plain hateful. I was pissed off on the writers behalf.
    You obviously have real issues if you need to tear down someone in such a way. If you didn't like the story finut gut get some much needed therapy because you seem to think your fucking J.K. Rowlings and know everything about writing! Not by a long shot I'm sure.

    Potter, great story! ^_~
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  • From ANON - Sage on November 13, 2003
    Awesome story. I love Harry/Hermione pairings, although it's hard to see Ron acting in that way. I hope you update soon, I'm completely taken with this fic. ^_^
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  • From ANON - jo on November 12, 2003
    Hello, just wanted to apologize. I made a mistake. It's 'thoroughly,' not 'thuroughly.' My bad.

    -jo
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  • From ANON - jo on November 12, 2003
    Oh. My. God. I'm speechless with rage. It has obviously been my extreme privilege to have thus far spent my time around people who do not possess either a propensity or a blatant desire to thuroughly *butcher* the english language. This is by far the WORST piece of writing I've ever seen, in terms of spelling, grammar, and plot development. You need to subtly introduce plot points, not blare them from the top of the tallest tower. Good Lord, I don't think this flame can even begin to do justice to your maiming of arts that I and many other authors on this site hold dear. Namely: Grammar, spelling, plot development, cliffhangers, and the subtle science and exact art that is REMAINING SOMEWHAT TRUE TO CHARACTER! Where is Simon when you need him? Have you even heard of a beta? How old are you? I've met eight-year-olds who could write better than this.

    Here at aff.net, we are on the honor system to not go skimming through fanfictions when we are *far* too young to be reading even the most mild smut posted here. We are also on the honor system to *not* pepper our fellow authors with inanely bad fanfiction. Go back to Neopets.

    -jo
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