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Reviews for Snape\'s Choice

By : Witchcraft
  • From Teri1211 on April 07, 2017

    Greetings

    You did fine with smut...made me have thughts of my fiance

    :)


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  • From purefaith91 on May 20, 2011
    I thought Draco was dead and that they did not have to worry about Malfoys anymore. And why Hermione would have to ask Harry not to tell Ron is beyond me...I would almost tell anyone other than Ron. Glad that Harry is going to be there for them though. p
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  • From purefaith91 on May 20, 2011
    Snape should not be obliged to duel Malfoy just because they are sore losers. They are married and should be able to tell him to pound sand. That would be too easy though so he surely won't, but when he is done, I hope he throws a few hexes Ron's way. p
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  • From purefaith91 on May 20, 2011
    Fudge is evil, but he is probably being harrassed by the Malfoys to prove that they are living as man and wife and trying for a family. This should be good. I think I feel worse for SS than I do for Hermione. p
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  • From purefaith91 on May 20, 2011
    How sweet that Snape loves Hermione AND is being so nice and gentle with her. Malfoys are probably about to have a kitten over not getting Hermione in their household. p
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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on September 08, 2008
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From Bellakuuipo on June 20, 2008
    I love your story it's one of the best stories I've read in the snape/hermione pairing.
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  • From mamabear52 on May 05, 2008
    Just out of curiosity, how old are you ? At some point in this story it sounds like a grade school kid is writing it. You have a great idea for a story, unfortunately I am convinved that English is not your first language. Apparently someone else has also come to the same conclusion. Your story also has some inconsistencies. First you say that both Malfoys died in a duel then in the next chapter, everyone is worried that they will try and claim her again, so we assume they are still alive. Then they are dead again in the next chapter. Also Percy Weasley should have been in Prison not fathering children. DO get a beta or even a really good spellcheck. But I think a beta would be best. They could not only point out your atrocious spelling mistakes, but they could also correct your grammar, verb conjugation, sentence contruction and you seem to have an aversion to commas. Please stop using the preposition OF instead of the verb HAVE. I am interested in your story The Marriage Law, but I am afraid to, again, spend my time groaning from the mistakes as I read it.
    Please take all this as constructive criticism, as the other readers have done. Your story ideas are very good, just work on the rest. There is no shame in taking an English course. And I don't mean a creative writing course, you seem to have good ideas, just work on getting the whole thing down pat BEFORE you post it. Ask for help, no shame in that either.


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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on June 30, 2007
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From ANON - Amethystique on July 29, 2006
    I find the plot to have real potential for the future. I must ask, do you have a beta reader? Is English your first language? I'm afraid that I've had to stop reading, because I find the spelling errors and lack of proper punctuation rather off putting. Some of the passages don't seem to flow properly and make for a difficult read. If you get a good beta and then maybe correct the works on-line so far I would be willing to give it another try. Good idea for a plot line though.
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  • From ANON - Megan Consoer on June 20, 2006
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters? Or can you write a sequel to this story please?
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  • From ANON - Earwen on December 30, 2005
    Your story's plot was decent and had potential but in all was very rushed. The entire story was too rushed. You should have put more detail into it and kept Snape more into character. This is by no means a flame so please don't take it as so. I just thought i should help you for your next story.

    -Don't rush things so, take your time and make it detailed.
    -Keep the characters in character. Snape was very out of character in your story and more OCC than anything. Snape is very dark and doesn often show emotion, nor does he smile....ever. Think of him as a snake because in all honesty, Snape is very snake-like in personality and in grace.
    -Fightning scenes should always have tons of detail and energy.
    -Your ending was far too rushed and simple. You completely lost me.


    You have great potential in writing, you only have to take your time and do your research. Don't feel pressured to update quickly, your readers will love the chapter even if it takes a month to write...suspense is key anyways.

    I hope i have helped you in some way. Your story was good in all other senses. :D

    Feel free to contact me with any questions you may have: maeg_porter@yahoo.ca


    Earwen
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  • From ANON - i want snapes dick in me on December 24, 2005
    to OOC
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  • From ANON - annie on December 16, 2005
    OMG, CAN YOU JUST STICK THIS STORY UP YOUR A** SO THAT I WON'T HAVE TO LOOK AT IT ANYMORE?? PLEASE, IT SUCKS BEYOND SUCKING!!!
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  • From ANON - me on November 27, 2005
    good story i wasnt to keen on the ending but good none the less
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