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Reviews for The Wizards Breath

By : shaolin
  • From ANON - SnapeLover on December 16, 2003
    Hi! Only read chapter 1 so far and it's good!! Love the Snape-in-the-bath visuals!

    Hope you don't mind a bit of grammatical criticism...? Instead of 'should of' and 'could of' the correct words are 'should've' (for *should have*) and 'could've'. Sorry, I can't resist, it's a pet peeve of mine. You also might want to check your spelling here and there: 'mearly' should be 'merely', etc. Please don't take these comments as a flame; they're not meant that way. Lots of folks don't care about spelling and grammar but I feel mistakes like these brinbring down the whole tone of the writing, and that's a shame because you're a good writer!

    On to chapter 2!
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  • From jkrazed on December 16, 2003
    Great start!!!!! I totally get the stoned OOC note at the end. Isn't funny seeing people wn'tn't think we want to see... peeking out from behind a newspaper or a book, unable not to look, but not wanting to be seen as well? I really really like the first chapter, can't wait for an update!
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  • From ANON - Danielle on December 16, 2003
    *fans self* Oh holy shit, it just got hotter in here! Whoa. UPDATE SOON!!! That's all I have to say...you just gotta update soon!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Ash Storm on December 16, 2003
    I really do like this story, Its funny....but why is Snape in amsterdam????
    keep on writing
    Luv
    Ash
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  • From ANON - GeekGoddess on December 15, 2003
    I wondered what Snape would be like stoned....LOL....I loved your first chapter....it reminded me of Alice in Wonderland.....ALice and the Cat.....LOL....I can't wait until you update.
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  • From ANON - Arilyn on December 15, 2003
    Dear gods... I fucking love it! I never thought of making Snape stoned in one of my stories! Keep writing!!! I am looking forward to the rest of it... Hmmm Invite Dumbledore for the ride next, I'd love to se him high...
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  • From Lizski on December 15, 2003
    Actually, I sort of like this take on things. I imagine that you're going to get a few people who don't like the gficafication of drugs, but, eh - what can you do? I like this. I'm curious to see where you go with this from here!
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  • From ANON - summer on December 15, 2003
    Hehehe...what a funny twist to the usual Sev/Mione paring. Glad to see that the ol' professor can light up, lossen up and kick back. I have always said that more people should smoke, I guess the natural herb can also cure the wizarding world of snarky, mean potion masters too!
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  • From ANON - summer on December 15, 2003
    Hehehe...what a funny twist to the usual Sev/Mione paring. Glad to see that the ol' professor can light up, lossen up and kick back. I have always said that more people should smoke, I guess the natural herb can also cure the wizarding world of snarky, mean potion masters too!
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  • From ANON - deblovesdragon on December 15, 2003
    Well, I liked it. I think that you should have Hermione be MORE affected by the pot. She still seems far too self-controlled. The only thing that she did in your chapter was call Snape "Severus". I not talking about dancing on the tables or anything stupid. Perhaps a case of the giggles. I hope Harry and Ron see her all messed up.
    I just lovveruverus. Too sexy!
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  • From ANON - rubberduck on December 15, 2003
    hey shaolin. :-) a very interesting story you have here. i've never been in a hash bar before (do they really exist?) so i'll have to take your word that that is how they are. i'm NOT a midnight toker as it were. i liked the interplay between hermione and severus and all the veiled flirting. the only experience i have with being stoned is watching the gang on 'That 70's Show' but HG/SS were acting quite differently then eric, hyde et al. your characters were actually lucid still. lol. no paranoia or munchies. harry and ron seem to be a mite selfish and stupid. how rude is it to invite a friend on vacation and then just leave her? tsk tsk. at least severus is there to keep her company.
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  • From ANON - nessa on December 15, 2003
    Hehehe...Snape and Granger getting stoned in a hash bar...hehehe. I really, really like it. That was great idea,please continue. Can't wait for more. Good work.
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