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Reviews for The Wizards Breath

By : shaolin

From ANON - gill on January 23, 2004
Holy shit!! Just read some of the other reviews and I cannot believe people actually think the SS/HG pairing is so evil!! Lets face it - in the stories I've read, HG is no little girl but a consenting adult! There's no paedophilia in this story or any of the others I choose to read. Equally, I find it sickening that some psycho wrote about Emma Watson / Alan Rickman in that way- that's just downright offensive to a young actress and a fantastic actor as well as generally disgusting. Keep this story going - it's harmless escapism and brings pleasure to ordinary hardworking people like me who wouldn't hurt the hair on anybody's head.
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From ANON - gill on January 23, 2004
Love it!!!
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From ANON - Looney_Luna on January 23, 2004
I've reread your story as it is a couple of times now. You really know how to write smut. I'm jealous of that ability, do you give lessons? jk

Seriously though, this is a great story. The pairing is one that a lot of people love, and certainly makes people think what if about any handsome teacher they ever had (and we all know that everyone had a crush on a teacher at one point) and what it would be like to meet them later in life.

Don't worry about the people who don't like the pairing. If they were the majority then there wouldn't be so many reviews telling you how sexy this story is. I cannot wait for your next update. The story is really hot and you leave us hanging and wanting more everytime.

Cheers!
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From ANON - bansidh on January 22, 2004
Per your A/N--no special requests. May I say, "Yay" for yummy smut? Thanks very much for writing. By the way, as far as people slamming you for updating to get on the front page, I personally appreciate that you're correcting your piece even after the initial post. I really hate seeing obvious typos in stories that have been up for 11 months and the like.
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From ANON - star on January 22, 2004
I just love this story so much!
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From ANON - rubberduck on January 22, 2004
so, is the friendship between harry, herminoe and ron over? the way you described par parting with her friends, it doesn't look too promising. heavy sigh. that is just so sad. snape is a totally different person when high. lol. who would have thunk it? i like the humour in your story and i look forward to your next installment. and since you always say it to me, i'll say it to you. you can email me if you want. (you never seem to reply to mine. lol)
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From ANON - casi on January 22, 2004
I just love this story. It is one of by bestwritten smutty snape/hermione. I think that most of your readers leave this fic with a great need of a cold shower. :) I admire anyone who can write this ship its amazing but extreamly hard to write. I wouldn't even know where to start on one of these fics and those who can pull them off have loads of talent.

Don't worry about your little ron/hermione basher. They are a little excentric. I have heard of sites dedicated to the ship I also know a person who claims that the kids that played the two in the movie were ment for eachother (which is really disturbing).

I'll take the ss/hg ship over rw/hg any day its so much more fun and its rarely fluffy.
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From ANON - Deb >^..^< . on January 22, 2004
Though I really don't think that I can put it any better than jkrazed, I do want you to know that you have my support!!! There are always those self-indulging few that think they are the saviours of the world & only they know what is right for all. Bottom line to that, BULL SHIT & they always make me think oe lie line from The Wizard Of Oz, If I only had a brain (trust me, they don't use it if they have it!!!)!!! I am 41 years old & am quite capable of choosing what I feel is worth my time, not to mention the fact that I do have the ability to think for myself!!! Enough of my babbling, please know that people like that aren't worth the bother, they are spineless jellyfish, cowards the lot of them!!! I am glad to see that you have the support of jkrazed, Rilla, Zephyr, Talene, Titaas was well as many other fine authors on this site!!! With those names I am in DAMN GREAT company standing in your corner in a show of support!!!

NOW, Chapter 8... I do so like how you mix so many feelings into this, lust of course, but there is also humor, caring, frustration & so much more!!! I LOVE the bit about Draco, "I still don't
know what cretin would allow him to be a Head-boy."
Severus spit out the sip of brandy he had been taking in suprise. Huckluckled at her. She hadn't changed, as loud and opinionated as ever. "Oh, well that cretin would be me."

Waiting for your promised smut with chapter 9, Deb >^..^
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From ANON - Heather on January 22, 2004
OK. First off, THANK YOU FOR THE UPDATE *kisses your feet*. I have really enjoyed this fic for several reasons. There are cultures which use hash etc. on a daily basis, and it isn't considered evil. I have often thought that its ability to loosen inhibitions was freeing toul oul in a way. Second, your Hermione and Severus fit together very nicely, and this story is a very easy read.

Please don't let twits like Peggy or whatever she wants to call herself..pedophile, nitwit, moron...(we can pi nam name for her) affect you whatsoever. A kid with a computer. That's all she is. I have totally enjoyed your writing, and so what if you correct your work several times? Who isn't a perfectionist at something. As my mother would say, tell them to get over it! (Hey, she just fought cancer and won..take her word!!)

I will leave you alone now to write some smut...I don't have any suggestions, because I will take it any way you write it!!!!!

Heather, who gets off her soapbox and passes it to next reviewer *grin*
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From ANON - deblovesdragon on January 22, 2004
I really liked the flirty banter between the two.
Don't have any real requests for the next chapter. I think that you will write some fine smut without anyones help. It has all been excellent so far.
Maybe it is the romantic in me, but I really like these two (your versions) together. You could write this fic for as long as you wish and it would be fine with me.
Cheers!!
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From ANON - Titania on January 22, 2004
Great chapter!!! I am really enjoying the story. As for the idiot Peggy? Meh-I find that ignoring certain people is a better choice. She is a squib.

Can't wait for the next. I do have a suggestion: how about a little levitation.

Titania
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From ANON - Talene on January 22, 2004
The problems I referred to before Peggy's twisted mind went Hades knows where with it were the problems with spelling and spell check. I would like to point out a few things myself. 1) I have a friend from England and unless he was lying to me....can't imagine why he would.....the age of consent there is 16. I am 36 so don't go there Peg. 2) Constructive critism is one thing but....this is out and out targeting of an author. You have a problem with her stories then don't fucking read them! 3) JK Rowling *may* put Ron and Herms together in book seven but, I don't like the pairing. Can't see it. That is my personal opinion but that doesn't mean I'm going to attack ppl who like that pairing. In my little world...which I like very much....it is Harry/Luna, Ron/Lavender, Hermione/Draco and Snape with me! My imagination...I can do it! 4) What in your book, Peggy, makes a pediofile? The age difference?? Sorry but, you're nuts if that is what you think.

It astounds me, the number of people in the world who get their jollies demeaning other people. I am not an idealist by any stretch of the imagination but, I cannot help but wonder what the world would be like if we all tried to be a little nicer to each other and tolerant of different opinions. I have read some stories here that I didn't like and didn't agree with so....I just didn't comment and nor did I go back to read the next chapter. Seemed prudent. Maybe I am just babbliing now but....that would seem to be better than blasting someone for their writing when you have been fairly warned ahead of time. Just don't comment and don't go back. Simple. I glanced over one that depicted Sev and Lucius as true child molesters. I was warned but I was curious so I read. I didn't like so.....I did not go back and I did not comment. Simple.

This has to be the longest I have written on anyone's story as a review. There are harsh bars in the country discussed. How do we really know what Sev is like away from school or Voldemort? Hmm? Truswt me when I say that there are times when I wish I had some 'good herb' to help me deal with my 3 rambuncious children. I don't blame Sev in this story AT ALL! LOL The poor man needs it! *sigh* I am done ranting and Shoalin, forgive me if what I have written here has upset or offended you. That was never my intent but...we all know what the road to hell is paved with. Right? Good intentions. Thank you all for your time. Later.
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From ANON - Caliko on January 22, 2004
^)^ I'm surprised Harry and Ron didn't follow her! Please, keep up the good work, since i really enjoy this fic! There is something so erotic about stonex..ex.. lol.. hazy illusion and confusion about how much time has really passed, maddening arousal, hands everywhere.. and the VOICE..omg... ***blush***
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From ANON - Talene on January 22, 2004
Nevermind people like that. They obviously have never had the problems the rest of us poor peasants have had. *snorts* Your story is excellent and I have been waiting a bit impatiently for the next chappie......and here it is! Weeeeeeeeeeeee! Oh hapay!!ay!! Now....where's the next one? hehe Had to do that. Sorry. I'll be good and wait patiently. (Like I have a choice! LOL) Take care and keep writing. Ok?
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From ANON - Zephyr on January 22, 2004
I like this story.. a nice stone Hermione is kinda funny.. Am looking forward to the next chapter!
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