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Reviews for Don't Lie to Me

By : Veresna
  • From Mandragora on August 13, 2007
    I love your Stories and particularly this one!! Just discovered them this weekend and couldn`t get my eyes off them. Your Snape is just the way I think he is (and just the way I want him *g*), not the fluffy, sickeningly OOC kind of guy most female writers try to let him become and your female OC`s are the perfect mixture of being stubborn and having their own mind and sometimes... well, being lack of a better word (no native speaker, y`know), let`s say submissive... ;-)))
    Thanks for your incredible writing!

    Mandragora
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  • From ANON - nakita on December 30, 2005
    Please! Dinish the rest of the story!!!!! I like it!
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  • From ANON - Aileen on November 19, 2005
    First of all, I loved this! It's sexy and clever, and the sex scenes have just the right amount of description to be tasty without being gratuitous or out of character.

    Second, you need not have any worries about a Mary Sue. Although Helena does fit a few of the characteristics-- an unusual name; eyes that change colour-- she's attractive and intelligent without seeming as if she'd be endowed with superpowers, or in any way related to the Veela. Plus, my boyfriend's eyes change from hazel to green, and mine, from ordinary blue to pallid grey or electric blue. Had she possessed irises capable of transforming from dicoloured blue and brown to bright violet, I may have stopped reading immediately...but no such problem there.

    Although I tend not to read fanfictions containing outside characters, not only for fear of encountering a garish self-insertion, but also because I often feel they detract from the canon characters and the canon universe, I thought Helena fit in very well in the Hogwarts environment. A good choice, because while this story might have been a fun read if it had starred Hermione or another female student, it would seem out of character...plus, I don't like stories that force the characters to age unnaturally. In this case, you can make your protagonist any age you like, without having to potentially mis-characterise a younger canon character.

    If I have any criticism at all, it is that the dream sequences are a little difficult to seperate from the rest of the story. At first, this may have been your intention-- to throw the two together, and then have her wake up at the last moment. However, I had a little trouble differentiating between her dreams and reality until I had read a few paragraphs into each segment. I, personally, would find it better if the dream sequences were obvious (the old "oh, thank god, it was only a dream!" ending is a little trite these days), but it's your story, and up to you.

    Snape was excellently written-- perfectly in character for himself. I really loved his smug and sarcastic remarks about her drawing being incorrect, it was a nice touch.

    Overall, it was a great story, and I enjoyed it throughout.
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  • From ANON - IG-88 on October 22, 2005
    Quite clever & most definately very erotic. Your description of Snape was so dead on that I could see & hear him as I read. Yummy job, keep up the good work.
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  • From ANON - Seth on October 14, 2005
    Amazing. Simply amazing. Couldn't stop reading. I felt the words. It made me feel things i forgot i can feel, just vibrate, wow. A caleidoscope made of sensations. And with Snape. What can be better than this? :) Wow.
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  • From ANON - lunggwai on September 22, 2005
    What a marvelous ending!
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  • From ANON - E on August 06, 2005
    best snape fanfiction ever!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 29, 2005
    briliant!
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  • From ANON - jose on July 26, 2005
    That was a magnificient sotry. Snape very recognisable, not all of a sudden talking like a porn actor like in other sexy stories about snape. You can really write and at the same time excite.
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  • From ANON - Alika snape on April 18, 2005
    ohhhhhhh i love them there the freaking best on to the sqeual away great work keep it up !!
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  • From ANON - crystal on April 05, 2005
    I love your stories i read 1-13 in one night and 14 the next day u had me hooked and even as i went to school i still thought of them there really good and dont stop writing these oh so wonderful stories i dont know what would do to get through the night lol anyways im rambling keep up the excellent work and never let the talent u have leave you !
    bye for now crystal
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  • From ANON - Maria on January 20, 2005
    Absolutely fabulous!! Please please write a continuation!!!
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  • From ANON - Dru on December 14, 2004
    Good stuff. Lots of strange typos, repeated words, half words and things but I'm sure you know about those. I love it anyway and can't wait to read more.
    Dru
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  • From ANON - LordLove on December 11, 2004
    I LOVE your story! A true work of art..you captured Snapes Personality very well. And the student...hahaha she reminds me of ME!! Notty girls get all the fun ^^ .. Don't you agree? Anyway I love your work..please tell me when you have written more...I am obsessed with your writing...and well snape *dreams*....Your story helps me sleep and dream ^^ !!!

    ~ Lord Love - God bless you!
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  • From ANON - Roget on November 12, 2004
    Oh, my! That is really, really good! Are you going to be writing more, soon? I hope so! I will be looking for an update!
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