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Reviews for Secretly Slytherin

By : Veresna

From ANON - Morianna on August 31, 2004
I am very much enjoying this story. I look forward to reading more.
M
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From ANON - Roget on August 24, 2004
After reading "Don't Lie to Me" I was hooked. So for the past two nights I have eagerly come home from school/work and read "Secretly Slytherin" until bedtime. I LOVE it!! Helena is as real to me as any character from the books, even more so than many of them. I HAVE to know how Severus protects her, and their unborn children, from Voldemort. Also, I need to know how they manage to survive after Voldemort is defeated. Please write some more, or at least tell me if you aren't going to finish this. This is definitely one of the best stories I have read so far!

Usually I get very distracted and picky over grammar and spelling errors, but I found that you had so convinced me and 'caught me up' in the story that I just overlooked them. I am worried a bit that you have boxed them in - but you have been cleverly getting them into and out of situations well enough so far, that I have decided to have faith in you that you can accomplish this task through to the end.

I will say, however, that the story has become a bit darker and less humorous as it progressed. I think I might like a bit of humor added in to give it a bit of relief from the sheer intensity. Oh, and BTW, that little foray into the sublime (I think it was after Chapter 4? - Not certain, anymore), was hysterical. You have a natural sense of humor!

At any rate, I am a fan of yours, and really hope you pick up writing again!
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From ANON - Razz on July 30, 2004
I just wanted to say that I adore this story. It's had me giggling since I started reading it.

Never really put Snape into the romance novel hero class, personally, and when I started reading, I have to admit that I had my doubts, but I think you've done an exceptionally believable job of it. Very good. The Death Eater scene was fantastic, too. I don't think I've ever read a Death Eater scene that was so true to the form established in GoF. You caught tood ood so well in that; made it clear it wasn't a game and it wasn't something Helena was ever going to forget she had done.

Incidentally, one thing I keep noticing: You've referred to sherry as a red wine several times. Sherry actually ranges in color from pale almond to deep amber. The most aristocratic is very pale, and very dry, and the sweetest, dessert wine, is very dark, almost caramel colored. The one you might associate with an English aristocrat is a golden color, sweet but not so sweet as a dessert wine. Just FYI. ;)

Best of luck with coming chapters!

Razz
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From ANON - Lydie on July 04, 2004
Awsome! I started reading "Don't lie to me" yesterday, thinking it was going to be one of those really crappy self-insertion thingies but I couldn't keep myself away from the story! I spent 24h straight in front of my computer reading! I barely stopped to eat and go to the loo! Ooh! You just have to keep the story going! I wanna know what's going to happen to them and if they'll have a kid for Voldy... I think you finished in a total cliffhanger. I'm dying to know how it goes on. I don't care if you have to write all night, you neeeeed to keep going with this! If only so I don't lose my sanity :D

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From ANON - Becca on July 04, 2004
I absolutely LOVE this story. as a matter i've read everything you wrote so far and love it all. I'm really hope that you write another part to this story. you finished it off just perfectely for a sequal. please please right another one!!! you're writing style is great!
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From ANON - Miria on July 04, 2004
Well, that's it then. I've decided I'm going to move in with you. So that I can delicatly prod you each and every day untill you start a sequal to this story. *nod nod* I'll start packing today. Just one question, do you have a waffle maker? If not i'll bring mine.
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From ANON - Sarahna on June 27, 2004
Hi,
I had to review it because it surprised me by being so good. Usually I only read slash, because I am tired of all the sobby romance there are, whenever there is a girl involved. I prefere it to a bit rough and the two are as equals. So I was exly ply pleased to read your story, I simply love younninnning little witch who give as good as she gets. Do you know of any stories kind of like yours, becuase then I will consider to begin reading some het as well?
What I also think is great in the way the story is written, is that Snape stays in character, which is something only few people can do. You really seem to understand him, and his reasons for doing the things he does.

Oh a little funny incident while I was reading the story: I had an apointment with a friend I hadn't seen in a long time, but I had such a hard time letting go of the story, because I had just come to the part when Snape had given her the Mark. So I ended up just turning off the computer and running to the car, and having to speed to get there only 10 min late. Because I had had to stop before I got to the end of the scene, I could feel her anger against Snape in my whole system. You had maneged to really get me into the story. I ended up turning on the radio and concentration on what was being said, to expell her anger from me, till I could continue reading when I got home late that night.

Are you planning up continuing the story?
Sna na
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From ANON - wolfwoman on June 23, 2004
I love it, I love it! Well done!!!
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From ANON - mem on June 09, 2004
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE write a sequal. Or better yet, tell me that one has already been published. I stumbled upon this site and upon the first book and I have been hooked.

I have not read too many fan fictions (OK, So I have only ready your stories). However, I LOVE S.S.

You are a very gifted writer. I look forward to more fics from you. I have even joined the potions master group on Yahoo just to see if you have anything new.

Great Book.
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From ANON - Andrea on June 07, 2004
I would just like to echo what everyone else has been saying - 'Secretly Slytherin' (and, of course, 'Don't Lie to Me,' as well), is definitely something special. I honestly loved every part of it, from your perfect portrayal of Snape to your charcharacter creation, Helena, and all the twists and turns you so masterfully guided them through. It's a very intelligent, very alluring, and very sexy story - I'm just sad it's over. Whenever you have time to work on the promised sequel, please do so. Until then, I'm looking forward to reading all your other stories.
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From ANON - eide on April 28, 2004
was looking for snape fiction on this site- found Don't Lie to Me at 10pm. slept that night at 2am. thank you so much for your wonderful work, it was great reading it and you were absolutely brill with your treatment of snape. =D alright enough lavish praise for now but write more!!
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From ANON - oogityboogity on April 23, 2004
oh, that was just delightfully wonderful. i've been reading for the past two and a half days straight. the whole thing. i cannot wait for you to start the sequel, and i hope you do not turn into one of those authors that don't finish a story completely. stories don't really have a complete ending unless everyone in the world is dead and it exploded along with the universe, is there? but hey. most suffice in being one. i cannot wait until this continues. i'll be waiting!
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From ANON - Viva on April 01, 2004
Hahahahaha.... Malfoy!!! That was great! Really enjoying this. Thanks!
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From ANON - Eli on March 15, 2004
I first read your story a year ago and really enjoyed it. I just finished re-reading it and I was happy to find that it was just as good as I remembered. I love your Snape and the way you can make him a "good" person without compromising his snarkyness (Which is why we love him) :) As well, Helena is one of my favorite OCs! She is attractive because she is flawed and very human--unlike so many others.

...Any chance of a sequel? Soon? ::attempts cute puppy dog stare::

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From ANON - Amanda on February 25, 2004
I had passed over this story a few times, unsure as to whether or not I really wanted to read it. I am SOOOO glad I finally did! I love Helena and the way she somehow seems to squirm out of trouble just long enough to find even more. ::chuckles:: And Severus.... seems to me that you have him nailed to a T personality-wise compared to a lot of fanfic writers out there that go from snarky-greasy-git to mushy-lovesick-professor in the space of a single chapter. Anyhow, hope to read more once you get the chance (and the inspiration).
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