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By : Templar
  • From ANON - WendyNat on December 29, 2003
    Wow - what a great beginning to this challenge! A truly original approach... I can't wait to read more!
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  • From ANON - elementaldeity on December 29, 2003
    A lot happens in the first chapter and i love it, I can't wait to see what Snape's reaction will be, I also appreciate the fact that Hermione isn't infatuated with Snape beforehand, I also like the diary style entry.
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  • From ANON - Ox King on December 29, 2003
    This is a great first chapter. I love it. Usually I skip a few paragraphs and go to the meat of the story, but i was stuck to each word like glue. Please, please write a new chapter soon.
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  • From ANON - GEmory on December 29, 2003
    I really like the prologue. You've taken the time to give the history of what everyone went through and how they've changed before jumping into the marriage. That will make it easier to explain how their relationship could develop at all given their history in the books. Please continue.
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  • From ANON - Arwenmia on December 29, 2003
    While I enjoy the general premise and diary style construct, I must point out that there are major inconsistencies in this story. Hogwarts generally does not finish until later in June, not in May, and if Snape is the same age as Harry's parents would have been, how can the age difference be only 16 years? I doubt Lily and James Potter had Harry whilst still in school. The time turner may have added a few months to Hermionege, ge, but not 2-3 years. I do recommend also that you do a little more showing and a little less telling; this will improve the quality of the story. Cheers.
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  • From ANON - Nileregwen on December 29, 2003
    Brilliant! Fantastic! Bravo! I'm not a fan of diaries but I love the plot and format . so when are you going to have the next chapter up? next week? tommorow? today? five minutes?
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  • From ANON - carol on December 29, 2003
    hey, this is a great start! i'm looking forward to more chapters REALLY soon!
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  • From Kait on December 29, 2003
    thanks for removing the italics - i didnt have to squint once...did hope for a new chapter though...hint hint K xxx
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  • From ANON - MadAboutHarry on December 29, 2003
    Interesting take on the challenge....I don't think I've seen any others from a diary perspective like this. You will want to check this back through more carefully though. Your dates aren't completely chronological; I'm sure through simple typographical errors as you wrote (possibly at different times). It can be a bit confusing. I'll be interested to see Severus' take on all of this as well......
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  • From ANON - SarahS. on December 29, 2003
    This is absolutely wonderful so far. I do hope that you are going to continue it. If so, i cant wait to find out how Snape is going to react when he finds out. Am i right in guessing he will be most flabbergasted at first? Please do consider continuing if you werent at first.
    Sincerely,
    Sarah S.

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  • From ANON - Lady Anne on December 29, 2003
    WOW! COOL FIC! I hope you update it soon. The only problem I see is a mistake with the diary entry dates- you have September, then August, then October.
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  • From ANON - LovesThePotionBoy on December 29, 2003
    You know, I think this could be the best Marriage Challenge fic ever! What a brilliant prologue! You've certainly got me on the edge of my seat. Loved the Hermione becoming a Potter bit, too! Keep this up please - I start reading so many fics that just peter out after a few chapters. Blessings, Kait
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