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Reviews for After the Rise

By : PharaohsBeloved
  • From anonymous09 on August 29, 2007
    So far so good, update soon please!
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  • From ANON - Terri on December 30, 2003
    Wondering whats up with Snape? Still reading , still enjoying. Update soon.
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  • From ANON - LiTtLe YeLlOw BiRdIe on December 30, 2003
    I'm gues tha that this is your first fanfiction. Or at least your first R/NC-17 rated one. Not to worry though. We all must startewheewhere. Other than that, yes, I think you may have an *actual* plot. ^_^

    As far as the pairing goes, please do not let this be yet another Severus/Hermione story. There's only about a billion on this site alone as it is. I'd rather see her with Draco, or even Lucius, to Severus. Maybe that's one on the reasons I really don't like it when authors ask the readers what the pairing should be. It's just so *predictable*. I could tell without looking at the reviews that they would nominate Severus. So unless you really want it to be a Severus/Hermione, I would go with the pairing that *you* want. Not only will it probably be more original, but less predicatable.

    Looking forward to the next chapter...

    LiTtLe YeLlOw BiRdIe
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  • From ANON - Zephyr on December 30, 2003
    please update again.. i'd like to see where you are going with this story..

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  • From ANON - Rileywolf133 on December 30, 2003
    As I said before I really do love this story, though the chapters are a bit short. *does happy dance* Umm..Yea, so I can't want until you update again and I will be sitting over here on my arse wag! Kg! Keep up the *great* work!!!

    -Riley-
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  • From Hijja on December 30, 2003
    It's an interesting idea so far, although the execution is a bit shaky. If you *showed* us what is going on a bit more than *telling* us, and worked out the background story in more smoothly at the beginning, it might flow a lot better. You could have Hermione think about what happened, or give her a nightmare, or just something that does look more natural. And having ANs *in* the text is pretty distracting...
    Also, why would a handful of the most powerful Dark wizards run around with *guns*? Even if they were hunting tor the fun of it, I couldn't see them use Muggle contraptions... The shame! :)
    I have no particular preference to who will 'deal' with Hermione, but I'd like to see some more background to the plot :).


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  • From ANON - Terri on December 30, 2003
    Great idea. Looking forward to reading more. And I'm all for Severus/Hermione/Lucius or just Severus.
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  • From ANON - RayeMalum on December 30, 2003
    I really like it so far, and I can't wait to wha what happens next. Definitely have Severus 'check' her, and for an ending pair, would Severus/Hermione/Lucius just be too messed up? It would also be really interesting to see their reactions to Hermione doing basic wandless magic-nothing that would let her escape, of course!
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  • From ANON - Rileywolf133 on December 30, 2003
    I really like this story, I like where it is going. I hope you will continue this and I shall give you my opinions.

    1. Snape should 'check' Hermione.
    2. I think she should be with Severus and Lucius Malfoy, if not, only Severus.

    I hope this helps you and I look forward to the next update.
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