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By : Tygris

From ANON - Tanja on March 26, 2004
I love this chapter ;) don't stop writing! you're great !!!
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From ANON - androgyny on March 24, 2004
HIYAS! i really enjoy reading your story. this was one of my first hp fics in a REALLY long time and u gave me a really great new image of draco. also, i really love laylani, u did a really good job with character design on her.....hmmm.....well....i guese thats all for now.....update really soon! i wanna see harry get the shit beat out of him! LOL!(....so sue me....the whole hero thing annoys me ;P)

Byy byyy!!!!!!!!

androgyny>;p

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From ANON - Dianna on March 20, 2004
Thank you for writing a Draco/OFC. There really aren't that many out there. I can't wait to see Draco's reaction to the news that Lani was taken by Death Eaters. And I can't wait to see if this will cause Lucius to switch loyalties. I hope so. I truly hate Voldemort - more than is normal for a person to hate a fictional character.
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From ANON - Lily Martin on March 11, 2004
It's ok, seems a little Mary-Sueish the whole everyone love her and she loved everyone...classic syndrome of a Mary-Sue, but sometimes a girl needs a good old mary-sue fest...so I'm not really complaining all that much, if I were I could go read another story....

hehe, I think I just saved you all the insults you could use against the "Mary-Sue" screamer that I am...lol...^_^
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From ANON - Tanja on March 11, 2004
hey!I totally love your story !It's great!Please continue writing;)I need to know what will happen to Laylani!I just can't figure out what Snape's doing...
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From ANON - Nequi on February 24, 2004
YOU MUST UPDATE!! YOU MUST UPDATE!! I know that doesn't sound intelligant...but that was the first thing that flew into my mind r rer reading it! It's an awsum fic! Please continue!
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From ANON - The Ultimate Otaku on February 23, 2004
Don't worry, I liked the teeth thing! It was funny! Also, it's always good to put a bit of yourself into characters. It makes them more realistic.
Besides, Flint's teeth WERE bad, in the books it mentioned it, I believe, and in the movie, toe wae was icky. I was afraid, since chapter 12 (still my favorite chapter) was so wonderful, that bad things would happen in this chapter. But nothing did! On the contrary, it was quite the opposite. Draco proposed! YAYAYAYAY! I'm so glad he finally did, and that all is good and they are happy. This fic is at times unbelievably fluffy, but the way you write it, I end up loving the fluff, and it makes it so lovely!
I like the way Draco's proposal wasn't perfect. He said the word well, but yes, he doubted, and yes, he fumbled with the box. Even Malfoys aren't perfect, can be nervous, a bit trembly. The way Laylani reached out to touch his cheek, and gaze with love into his eyes...gosh, that was so sweet! So tender, and loving, that gesture.
I'm glad Draco could see that she was lying, about liking the party, and all that. I'm glad he didn't juske hke her live through it, but rather ditched it for awhile and went to something way more important.
Those reporters sounded absolutely horrible. As did the leering Flint. Poor Laylani! I hope her thoughts about the Dark Robes finding her don't come true! Got me worried, reading that did.
I think it's cool she made friends kinda with um, whatsisname. Adrian Pucey. He actually sounded nice! That's cool that she was able to like a Slytherin other than Draco (since so far she has disliked them all--Flint, Pansy, Snape, etc).
Fabulous chapter. Will continue reading.
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From ANON - The Ultimate Otaku on February 23, 2004
Chapter 12 was absolutely my favorite chapter out of ALL of them! ABSOLUTELY my favorite! Gosh, I loved it! One moment I was grinning, the next I was cracking up, at another time I was teary-eyed, and then again at the end, cracking up laughing so hard, again.
I must compliment the author on the wonderful writing. I get so swept up in this fanfic! It's the first Draco/OC fanfic that I've even read, and I love it SO MUCH! I can't compliment and shower flattery on this fanfic enough. It's so lovely and incredible! It's everything I would ever want a fic to be!

Plus, you're fabulous at writing the het sexual action. Usually that doesn't appeal to me, but in this fic, it does. Also, it's really funny how Lucius, other than the whole Voldemort crap, is so nice, and how he taught Laylani how to dance, that was so sweet, and cute, and funny. The thing about Snape and how Laylani didn't like him..hmm, it was interesting, but I'm not sure whether it was good or bad (since Snape does spy on Dea Death Eaters, after all. Then again, he's Snape!)

I must quote some parts:

She was about to face the ground when she heard Narcissa
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From on February 20, 2004
WOOHO!!! KEEP GOING!!! KAKKOI!!!
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From ANON - The Ultimate Otaku on February 20, 2004
Oh my god, I have missed out on SO much by not having read this fic in so LONG! I'm SO glad I came back to finally catch up and read all the updates! Thanks SO much for emailing me telling me about the udpates! I feel horrid at having not reviewed and read for so long.
Anyway, this chapter...gosh, I loved it beyond belief! This fic has an amazing amount of fluff in it, but somehow, in this fic, and this fic ALONE, I find myself LOVING the fluff! Usually I can barely stand, or only like, oneshot fluff fics. But this one is so wonderful. It makes me grin with happy tears in my eyes at the obvious love in Draco and Laylani for each other. I swear, their love is so beautiful, I wouldn't be surprised if my computer started glowing from it all one day!
So, I will definitely continue reading and reviewing, and mostly consistently, from now on. I will be a faithful fan, as much as I can.
I really loved this line, it made me giggle outrageously:
Little did she know... Draco had his own surprise.

Oh, and the parout out Draco signing the last photo of the photo album "From the boy who loved you, and the man who always will," was so sweet, I almost squealed. Also, I like that Laylani asked him, almost even doubted him, about HIS faithfulness to her even when she's old and grey, because it shows us readers that she is still vulnerable, it reminds us of what she's gone through and that although sweet, everything is not perfect, and it reassures me that Draco really, really loves her, truly, and a lot.
At the samee, Ie, I am perturbed about all this business with Voldemort and his lackeys, and nervous about Harry's infatuation of Laylani. I like how Laylani picked up "Hogwarts: A History," that was a gigglefest, and the way you described the purple and lilac gown Laylani is going to wear to the ball....oh, I could imagine it so easily! She will be drop-dead gorgeous, I know that already.
Oh, and also, a last compliment before I leave (and spend a night and day waiting for when I can read the next chapter), is that, damn, you write the BEST heterosexual action I've ever seen! Usually I am more for the slash snogging, romance, and the like, but the way you write Laylani and Draco's love, AND the sexual action, is mind-blowing. You describe it in such detail, and make it more than just the sexish stuff, but dialogue and feelings as well. You make it appealing, when in other fanfics I've read, it r har has been. I'd like to thank you for that, author. Thank you. I will read more tomorrow!

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From ANON - Demosthenes on February 19, 2004
YES!!! CONTINUE!! Lailani needs to kick some major 'dark robes/shadow man' ass...and then you have to deal with the whole harry issue cuz he has to be happy too! all in all i love your story and i realy hope you keep it going!
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From on February 17, 2004
I WUV IT!!!!XD ehehe
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From on February 17, 2004
KEEP GOING! YOU'RE DOIN GREAT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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From on February 10, 2004
KEEP GOING!!! YOU'R doing GREAT!!!!
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From ANON - Angus Hardie on February 09, 2004
This is an amazing story. It brought tears to my eyes at times in the earlier chapters and the romantic bits are so sweet. :-)

Have you posted this elsewhere by the way? It could definitely pass as non-adult if you cut a few lines here and it might increase audiaudience.
(But I totally respect that you may not want to do this)

Anyway, it's a really wonderful story and I'm really looking forward to reading future chapters.

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