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Reviews for Dead Inside

By : Hel
  • From MythDouglas on July 19, 2008
    Wow this is a very creative story and a rather good cliff hanger. I had problems figuring out who was talking and what was going on when Hermione was getting Snape. I can't wait for the next chapter, that was a cruel place to leave it.

    -Myth
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  • From ANON - Megan Consoer on June 20, 2006
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From ANON - Rakina on August 08, 2005
    I'm really enjoying this story, even though I normally only read slash.
    The concept of the Hollow Man is fascinating...
    I can't wait to find out where Snape's soul is and whether they can get it back (please...)
    Update soon.
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  • From ANON - damselrose on February 08, 2005
    awesome job. I can't wait until they find snapes soul. I like how you protray Hermione that my favorite part, she has the kind of spirit I'd want her to have and that is just fantastic. Thanks you for writing this story.
    Damsel@
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  • From tristar3149 on February 03, 2004
    wow that was a very good chapter and a start to a great fic I love the details you put into it...............Keep up the great work
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  • From ANON - Mila on May 31, 2004
    Excellent job! I love your story... please update!
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  • From ANON - tall oaks on May 04, 2004
    I came across your story reading another persons story in the Hollow Man challenge. It was interesting and wonderful to see where everyone went with the basic premise.
    I truly enjoyed all these stories as well written.
    I think you have given wonderful life to the characters even Severus. It is easy to see and feel Hermione's emotions at puring ing Severus. Her well known dislike of forced servitude with the House Elves must have caused her great pain knowing her former professor was on the block. While she may not have liked him, she certainly respected and admired him.
    Your use of Harry and Draco was well thought through. I feel for Harry and Draco seeing someone so wrongly punished. Interesting you had Harry taking care of Severus' arm with great care. It is easy to feel Hermione's embarassment knowing she has to care for Severus like a child. She must have so many conflicting thoughts running through her head.
    I wonder, will Albus reappear and will Draco be caught up in the maddness too.
    Will you let me know when the next chapter is up?
    Great work!
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  • From ANON - Vanna on April 13, 2004
    Hi, I just found your story today and it's awesome. I can't wait to read more :)
    One comment only: Your use of commas to connect several sentences together
    is a bit distracting. For example, you have "Before he had been gaunt, stretched
    as though to breaking point, but at least he had still been Snape, now he is a
    fragile thing, emaciated and bruised, with yet another brand of ownership
    adorning his person." It would read better, in my opinion, if you had a period after
    "Snape". You probably need a comma after "Before", as well.
    Anyway, other than that it's a great story. I like the pacing and the fact that past
    events are being explained by the characters in a natural way, rather than by the
    narrator.
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  • From ANON - scatteredlogic on April 07, 2004
    Chapter 4 - Again, nicely done. I particularly enjoyed the scene in Hermione's laboratory where she ends up self-consciously chattering to Snape. It was a realistic reaction and I could see that happening very easily. I'm now wondering about Ron and his reasons for avoiding Harry and Here, we, where Dumbledore ended up and, of course, if Snape's soul will end up back in his body. ;)

    I'm looking forward to your next update.
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  • From ANON - scatteredlogic on April 07, 2004
    Chapter 3 - The sentient book is a very clever plot device, and one I've never seen used before; I'm impressed. ;) Hermione's injury was also well done. Too many fics seem to keep the trio of Harry, Ron and Hermione mysteriously intact all the way through. War causes injuries and you've addressed that issue very frankly.

    Now, off to read the next chapter.
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  • From ANON - scatteredlogic on April 07, 2004
    Chapter 2 - I'm sorry that I missed that you'd updated this fic, but I'm pleased that I have more than one chapter to read now. ;) You're bringing the story along nicely. I particularly enjoyed the comment regarding the junk and gym gear in Hermione's basement, it was a particularly nice touch that added to the setting wonderfully.

    Hermione's confusion over just what to do with Snape was very realistically done. Too many authors would have had her be more certain of herself and your approach seems much more reasonable.

    Now, off to read the next chapter.
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  • From ANON - Bambu on April 02, 2004
    The normalizing day-to-day steps of her existence are fascinating, and the relationship she's built with Draco is quite touching. Duelling vomiting sessions -- a whole new bonding experience! I, too, have a soft spot for Draco. Honestly you're crafting this beautifully. The elusiveness of Ron is very intriguing, and I like Hermione's talking to Snape even though he appears to be vacant. The entire mother hen routine suits her character perfectly. You're fleshing out the plot well, and I'm eager for your next steps.
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  • From ANON - crudedly on March 31, 2004
    aaaah, aaaah, go on, please, how awful is it to stop NOW? Great story! :)
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  • From ANON - LadyFlashB on March 29, 2004
    Chapter 4--Morning After

    I am so happy that you updated. But, you left it on such an evil cliffee... *pouts* I ly lly like this story. You descriptions and words make me feel the pain of the characters. What happened to Snape is just unbearable. Hermione and Draco, too. I am going to have to re-read all again, I think, as I don't believe you ever identified the identity of the spy. [was it Ron...?] Just where is darling Ronny-kins, anyway? Hmmmn... Twisted, cruel little tale you've started here (Mwaaa-haaa-haa) and I am glad that you are continuing. Any possibility of an e-mail when you update? LadyFlashB@msn.com
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  • From ANON - Susan on March 29, 2004
    YAY Harry!! I cannot wait to see how they get Snape's soul back. I also got a giggle picturing Draco singing Rammstein. I really love the story and am so glad that you updated!
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