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Reviews for He\'s Come Undone

By : Sim
  • From purefoysgirl on July 15, 2007
    I didn't read your other reviews, but in the chapter about the photos, it should be "compromising" ones--that means they've done something to compromise themselves. Uncompromising is like being escorted somewhere--no trouble at all, no slander, no rumors, no gossip. Sorry, I've read alot of crap historical romances where the beautiful young victim is compromised by a heartless bastard so I'm keen on that word. So far, like your story, very few grammar or tense mistakes. And it's not so hard to follow if you just read it through. Good job!
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  • From ANON - Megan Consoer on November 22, 2006
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From ANON - firewall on August 14, 2006
    Yup, I don't like Lucius in this story. I wonder how you'll manipulate these poor characters next.
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  • From ANON - firewall on August 14, 2006
    Ch 1-6: I guess I must be a little strange but I'm not having any problems following your story. It seems crystal clear to me. I'm thinking I may not like Lucius in a few minutes when I read chapter 7 but right now, I'm not having a problem at all. Your writng in this story reminds me of drabbles that are short and concise and only give you the essential information. I like it a lot.
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  • From ANON - Megan Consoer on July 23, 2006
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From Applekissis on December 11, 2005
    Pretty good so far..Only a few errors but i like the story...I just wish the chapters were longer..they r so short
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  • From ANON - shelly on December 16, 2004
    WO! i love it! really good job!!! ^-^
    can't wait to read the rest
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  • From ANON - Angel # 4 on October 28, 2004
    Hey, I really like the story, just a few bits of advice... You can make your chapters a little longer by adding the flashbacks together. When you write the titles of your chapters, have a little confidence in yourself. If you make your chapter have negative connotations people arent going to want to read them. other than that i really enjoyed it and hope to read more from you... feel free to email me.

    Angel #4
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  • From ANON - sparklingdiamond on May 31, 2004
    this is a good story, was a bit confusing, but now...i see where its going- i think, well update soon
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  • From ANON - Calicat on April 16, 2004
    Hi again, your story is definatly turning into something wonderful, I love all that is going on with the characters, definatly a good story. However, Chap 10 and 11 are the same chapter and they also have nothing to do with HP. The new chapters are all LOTR characters, I really hope this is just a mistake on your part, if not I am beyond confused. But if it was a mistake, just wanted to let you know about it. Anyway, aside from the last two chapters, I really like this story and can't wait for more. Keep up the great work.
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  • From ANON - star on April 11, 2004
    I really like this story! Is there any way the draco and hermione can get together? I really hope she doesn't give up her baby. Anyway keep up the good work! And write for yourself ok
    hugs
    star
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  • From ANON - tab{ on March 27, 2004
    I like...More Please.
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  • From on March 17, 2004
    great story so far. can't wait to see the rest of it.
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  • From ANON - Narc on March 15, 2004
    Hene ane and Draco both totally deserve each other... they're both scanky! Ginny needs to kick both their asses, divorce the Draco-ho and take everything he owns, then move to Bermuda with Oliver Wood--where he waits on her hand and foot. --Leaving Draco and Hermione to live on the street to pimp sex for food. What scum they are!
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  • From ANON - elementaldeity on March 15, 2004
    I love HGDM pairings, I understood where you were going with the plot in the first few chapters, although I do wish they were longer, but I understand. Post more soon. This sounds like it has a good pretense.

    elementaldeity
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