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Reviews for Dark Gods In The Blood

By : Hayseed

From ANON - vblum12 on April 01, 2004
good for severus
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From ANON - amethystangel on April 24, 2004
WOW! Began reading 04-24-04... finished reading 04-24-04. Just couldn't stop once I started.
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From ANON - Delana on April 09, 2004
Brilliant! Fantastic! Utterly riveting! I am so glad I read this story as you had me constantly trying to s whs who the murderer was. I got absolutely NOTHING done the last couple days as I couldn't put it down. Your writing is wonderful. I often see people who put so much description in their stories that I am so bored I can't get past the first chapter. Yours, however, was simply amazing. Any descriptions or inner monologues were perfect. I will definitely be checking out to see what else you've written.
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From ANON - Lorie/LittleMissCantBeWrong on April 07, 2004
Awwwww man! Here I thought I was so smart, and not one of my perdictions came to be. Yes, I thought the killer was going to
be Draco after Nicholas' had the dream of the dragon and the snake. I would have liked to learn why Nicholas was having the
dreams of Hermione...and why wouldnt he know what she looked like, was Harry and Ron so mad at her that all photographs
of them had been thrown out? And I was sure that the killer (before the you used Nick's dream) was going to be an Auror and
using his shoelaces to hold the victims down...why else would they have been mentioned!!! Sometimes I think I'm way more
perceptive than I am!

I'm sorry to see it end....

Lorie/leMileMissCantBeWrong

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From ANON - Kate on April 06, 2004
Wow. having finished Dark Gods, I have a few thoughts rambling around in my skull.
You never disappoint, Hayseed. Never. If Ordinary People floored me, this blew me away. How can I compare you to anything other than to say that you make me weep? I've never read anything so fitting, and I thank you for it.

Why do you have to be so damned good? :)

~Kate~

Post Script: Boy, my assumptions on killers, motive, and pattern were so off. Shucks.
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From ANON - Kate on April 06, 2004
The Pattern: All the victims were survived by wives and children.
The Killer: a mistress?
Motive: Vengeance

LOL, just my two nuts. How far off am I?
~Kate~
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From ANON - Siobhan on April 06, 2004

Wow! I am struggling to find the words to tell you how good I thought this story was, without trivialising it or making it sound as if it isn't as good as I think it is. So instead I will tell you how I howled like a two year old with it's favourite toy taken away, for the first four chapters and the last five, and I haven't cried so hard in a long time indeed at the end I couldn't see the screen, had used up an entire box of hankies, and still my nose was blocked and my head ached cry crying too hard.

This is just a personal thing, but I think that the object of recreational reading is to lose yourself in a story that makes you think and feel. And you have definetly acheived this so in my eyes you've wrote a fantastic story regardless of the fact that you 'borrowed' the characters and their persona's. Don't misunderstand I'm not trying to say that this is an 'alright' story for a fanfic but that it's a brilliant story despite the fact that it's a fanfic.

Lastly I want to know if you were the one that trawled through Joseph Conrads' Heart Of Darkness for the quotes at the beginning of the chapters, because if it was you I applaud the dedication that you have to do this, because me me anyway) that book was one of the worst I've ever had the misfortune to read (High School English Class) and to have waded through all of that crap must have taken you ages.

Anyway just wanted to tell you how much I appreciated the story!

Siobhan
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From ANON - LoveThePotionBoy on April 06, 2004
And it is with sadness that I leave my final review on this story, which I found enjoyable on many fronts.
Your final chapter and Epilogue gave enough closure on the tale...I was relieved that Ron did not form
a relationship with Francoise, and though my romantic soul yearns for Ron to find happiness, I am
assured that weeding with Master Xi will be far more fulfilling for him than to enter into a relationship still
overshadowed by grief and sorrow. Thank you for not writing Ron as a prat (whatever Hermione lovingly
says!). Thank you for not overdoing the sexual side, although I am convinced you are more than
capable of writing a good "lemon". Thank you for your continuous updating (and for the April Fool, which
cheered me up no end).

Blessings...Kait
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From ANON - Midnight Tiger on April 05, 2004
brilliantly done, and i am ... how to put this... at peace? with the ending of this story. many leave so much more to be said, but your summation (via Ron's letter) was the perfect closing to such a wonderful story. i truly love the waycamecame full circle, and that Ron and Mione can both find a comonality in their need to find themselves. i always saw Ron's positions in the books as being a trigger for future issues in the man to come, and love the way you brought that out (the fairy tail was So memorable, as were his comments afterwards). i must say, all in all, that this is one of my favorate stories and thank you so much for putting the time, effort, and tallent into it. ::hugs::
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From ANON - Droxy on April 05, 2004
Dear hayseed-
I downloaded and read most of your story this weekend. Wow, over 400 pages.

The plot is good, and the pacing is good, I didn't get tired of reading the story as I approached the 300 page mark. Extending the characters like Ron into adulthood seemed logical; you could still see hints of the old Ron.

Harry's funeral and the resulting grief was so well done, especially the OCs of the kids. I used several Kleenex on those chapters.

Overall, I liked all the OCs in the story. Well developed and unique, I really liked Cuttrell. Very good.

This is the first SS/HG where there really wasn't a romance in the traditional romance story sense. This story is a mystery and it was good to see SS/HG work together without getting hot and bothered. The rules of mystery fics are you have to resolve the mystery, which you did. Romantically, you only hint at SS/HG being together at some time. Alas, a romance story requires a kiss, and we didn't get one. We only got an embrace, and nice one too..

One mystery remains open in your story in my mind, and that is why did Snape try to commit suicide? What drove him to the edge? Overall, the background work you did on Snape was good and plausible.

I have to give you something other than roses (for romance stories), so here is a virtual bouquet of lilies for this interesting mystery and angsty portrayal of grief. You put in a lot of work in this story and it is well done. Also, a big cheer from me in that you wrote the whole story first, then you posted it. I wish others would emulate this model.

I want to thank the ravers on WIKTT because without them I would not have read this.

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From ANON - Angie on April 05, 2004
It is now 2:30AM and I just finished reading your fic in one fell swoop. I couldn't stop. You kept me at the edge ofseatseat. I was thinking Francoise was the one. You wrapped this quite nicely I must say. Nice job!!!
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From ANON - A Donatien on April 05, 2004
A remarkable story. I can only hope that it was as satisfying for you tote ate as it has been for me (and many others) to read.
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From ANON - nocturnus on April 04, 2004
...and there was me suspecting of Dr, Curthel. je.

Well, let me say that this fic is amezing. I trully don't mind what have you done to the charachters, R/H or whatever, the way you writte and the lovely charachterizations of their relations made, what ever path you used, a good one AND a belivable one.
Your Ron is lovely, not the typical Wealey prat, more mature,so different and so the same, always the loyal.

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From ANON - Deborah on April 04, 2004
I loved reading this story. (I loved Ordinary People, too, for that matter.) It was wonderfully crafted, and at times strikingly poignant. You are, without a doubt, a very talented writer, and I do hope to see more from you before too long.
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From ANON - Bambu on April 04, 2004
This is a spectacular piece of work, and I think that you fulfilled all of your intentions. I'm glad you stuck to the wisdom of resolving the Hermione/Severus romance in the epilogue rather than wrapping it up within the confines of your 30 chapters; it wouldn't have been quite as satisfying. They had too far to go for a satisfying resolve. Congratulations.
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