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Reviews for Be Mine

By : Muzicgurl76
  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on July 02, 2007
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on February 28, 2007
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From ANON - Megan Consoer on June 25, 2006
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From ANON - Annie on October 14, 2005
    This story sucks... sorry, but it does...
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 26, 2005
    This story really sucks.....grow up before you right anymore....how old are you anyway?
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  • From ANON - Nicole on September 12, 2004
    good story
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  • From WriterLady1031 on September 12, 2004
    Nice try, but this is horrid. If you listen to what that one reviewer was telling you, he or she doesn't know whhe hhe hell they're talking about either. Please work on the formatting, grammar and spelling in this story. It's horrid and juvenile due to the way it's set up now--it gives the reader the impression that you are sloppy and lazy; completely un-professional.
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  • From ANON - Dark Angel on September 02, 2004
    Ok, just so you know.. You don't 'go' lesbian. That's so weard of you to even think. If someone is with both girls and boys shes bi. (Although I belive that everyone is Bi from the beginning, and just choses his or her preferences after who they fall in love with first... But that just my teori...)
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  • From ANON - Dark Angel on September 02, 2004
    You re hat hate writing, don't you? All those &'s is slowly making me go mad...
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  • From ANON - Anon on April 04, 2004
    cool
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  • From ANON - Max on April 04, 2004
    P.S. P.S. And don't listen to those other idiots I understand ya just fine. I have a friend who's the same way about the story she is writing, and I am the one who does the final editing.
    Well uuuummmm... post again soon!
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  • From ANON - Max on April 04, 2004
    I just finished reading, and it was AWESOME! Please continue. I want to find out what happens between Hermione and Snape.
    Well keep up the good work!

    P.S. Post again soon please! please! please!
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  • From ANON - iola_83 on March 27, 2004
    ummmm... okay.... your story really confuses me 'cause it keeps switching POVs and it's all bunched up and stuff. This isn't meant to be a flame or anything but I really think you should try to organize your ideas mso yso your story isn't jumping all over the place. I like your ideas and every thing but your story is hard to follow. To tell you the truth trying to read the story gave me a head ache (please don't hurt me!! *_*)

    iola_83
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  • From ANON - Aoibheann on March 27, 2004
    I give up. Between the formatting issues, the juvenile style, the grammatical errors, and the personal comments interjected throughout, I can't read anymore. Please do yourself a HUGE favor and get a beta. Your basic ideas are OK, but the presentation lacks. And to be honest, the chapters appear very short - not sure if that's a byproduct of the formatting. This isn't meant to be a flame, just some concrit. I would love to actually read your fic, but until it's fixed, it's frankly too difficult.
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  • From ANON - Snapeaholic on March 27, 2004
    Okay, I had to quit reading. First, I'm glad that you decided to express yourself so creatively and that you decided to share it with us. Unfortunately there are a few things that must be addressed:

    1) Seperate your paragraphs. It makes it easier to read that way.
    2) Quit interjecting your comments/thoughts into the midst of the story. Save it for the author's notes. It throws readers for a loop and also annoys the hell out of them.
    3) Take your time and make your story the best it can be. Your story would be pretty good if you hadn't made it so rushed and scattered. Develop your characters and make your plot orderly. Sudden twists and turns are great, but right now it's looking pretty schizophrenic itself. It's barely readable.
    4) GET A BETA. Just having someone to bounce ideas and to let you know when you are getting off course can be a fantastic help and make the story more enjoyable for you and your readers.

    I'm not trying to be a flamer here, but you really do need some help. No, I'm not available to beta for you at the moment, but if you ask, I'm sure you'll have plenty of people who'll volunteer to help you. :)

    Don't get discouraged and don't give up!
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