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Reviews for Smoke and Fire

By : Skool
  • From ANON - Sandy on April 22, 2004
    OK, I'm a little confused - did you by chance post chapter 2 ahead of chapter 1? or is it a flashback? I like the way it's going other than that.
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  • From ANON - Katie on April 22, 2004
    This is so good, please update soon!
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  • From ANON - sexypink20022 on April 15, 2004
    10 stars baby! very cute. i like the whole snape being shy angle your going with. i don't think i've seen it before...ever. a nice touch tho. can't wait for the next chapter!
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  • From ANON - spaz141 on April 15, 2004
    This is fun. IMHO I don't like Alan Rickman as Snape - I think he's too old for the character. However, I developed a huge crush on him in Sense and Sensibility. Including him in your story made for a good laugh. Thanks, I look forward to more as you have the time.
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  • From ANON - XxphoenixX on April 13, 2004
    I love your use of Shakespeare to bring these two together, it adds something to the story... not quite sure what. Something good. Intellect, maybe? No, they're smart enough. Something classic. Either way, I really like it. I love that Snape refused to respond to the owl, how cute and (above all) Snape-ish! Their jealousy is really amusing, they're so possessive already. Now about this sharing with Mr. Rickman... UPDATE
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  • From ANON - deblovesdragon on April 12, 2004
    Hey this is fun! I loved how she finally broke down and sent an owl. The Shakespeare was cute. You may want to have him be careful with his little games. They may cause him trouble later.
    I love how you have these two socially inept people together.
    Cheers.
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  • From ANON - devsgma on April 12, 2004
    Ah!! No, I got to the end of Chapter Three and there wasn't a Four. I'm really enjoying your story. I really liked Severus being jealous of Mr. Rickman. Just a small critique - if you could put a line between your chapters it would read a lot easier. The character development is really good. I like your Snape and Hermione very much.
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  • From ANON - Shampoo on April 12, 2004
    Amazingly good story! I could go on and on about the fabulous sexual tension, writing and clever plot. Dying to read the next chapter and see what Hermione and Snape do next...they are so adorable together. Update again as soon as humanly possible, please! ^_^
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  • From ANON - Victoria on April 04, 2004
    Lookin good. I like a drunk Severus Snape who isnt violent. But surely he deserves at least a good wank with company!

    Aw man. Passing out in a bed upstairs w/o even so much as a good grope in the morning. Poor dears.

    My only complaint is your punctuation. Once you've established a quotation, and put the question mark (?) or whatever INSIDE the quotes, theresno need for an additional comma. EX: ["In thunder, lightning, or rain?" he said, and smiled.] He doesnt SMILE a quote, and theres no comma after the quotes. {"I am a sexy man," he said.} I placed a comma inside the quotes because theres no ? or !.Or you could {He smiled. He said, "I am a sexy man."} Placing a comma inside the quotes at the beginning is a spanish thing to do. Here, place the comma after the non-quote to indicate that the quote is part of the sentence, and not a typo.

    I like that Hermione shows her other sides in this. Usually she's too sex-kittenish, and not smart enough, or too brainiac, and not sexy enough. Come on- gimme another chapter. Surely she at least gets to SAMPLE the goods!
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  • From ANON - Niceven on April 04, 2004
    Brad Pitt, Tom Cruise, and Antonio Banderas...do I smell Interview with the vampire? You have a humorous idea going on here. I like your little inserts of wit it keeps it interesting. I can't wait to see more.
    ~*Niceven*~
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  • From ANON - XxphenixX on April 04, 2004
    Very nice, my dear. I do love the challenge guidelines that make the characters all the more realistic in their imperfections, and I think you did a very good job of using them to your advantage, The intellectual in me applauds your Shakespeare, as well. The impatient smut-hunter in me glares at you for lack of said smut. I should probably stop detailing the responses of my various personalities, but they're all so different and all begging to review. The logical me, however, realizes I don't have the time at the moment (sorry!). Therefore, I thoroughly enjoyed it and can't wait to read more from you. Ciao!
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