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Reviews for Not what you thought

By : VirginSuicide
  • From ANON - XxphoenixX on April 12, 2004
    Grrr. You are such a tease. I mean that in the a) best sense possible and b) not in the sexual sense. I mean, there's all this cool stuff laying right there, waiting to go somewhere, and then nothing! I really love the Draco as a half-veela. I've seen it before and I can't wait to see how you use it. The name confusion was very good, too, definitely in-character for Draco. Arthur's crush on Hermione... well not Hermione but you know... is hilarious! I'm somewhat disappointed that her allure has not affected other characters - but maybe it's just because I'm obsessed with Remus? And Snape, for that matter. Loved the line about humor being a form of insanity, very interesting indeed. More witty banter! The paper think sounds dreadful, mainly because I'm supposed to be writing one right now. I am going to write it. I promise. Maybe I'll write it faster if you update? No? How abo wri write your paper (screw mine) and you write more of this darling little fic? What do you think?
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  • From Faithfulrain on April 12, 2004
    Ok done with chappie 2: HMMMMMMMMM hmmmmmm hmmmmm how to put this? (I had a teacher that could say how to 'put it' like 30 times in one seminar.... never mind... quite irrelevant) This is getting more and more weird. Ok Mr W's crush is a little OTT....I love that man and somehow don't see him like that. Plus that is adding a little to my SHE'S TO PERFECT opinion.... hellloooo? Ok now the way she talks to Snape and Weasely is OTT as well, students don't talk like that! at least not in Hogwarts and I don't see it! I mean at some point I though they all worked together and were way out of school by now, pretty disturbing feeling. Your Draco is odd as well 'life mate looking'? ehm, well that's not my Draco, but IT IS YOUR STORY AND YOU CAN DO WHATEVER YOU WANT. Just think its a little well, too sweet and a little too you know not too original, ok getting confused ei? Now I am sorry that I can't be more of help, or tell you that I REALLY LOVE THIS, I like being nice, but more then being nice I like bing honest, and I think I owe all FFtersters honesty as I expect the same from my reviewers. So I will try to read on, it would help if you emialed me when you've updated:D But do this only if you want to more of my reviewing:D I know you t not not agree, and in that case I'll just probably forget about this story, and I'm sure you'll ahve lots of readers that can take my spot, and will love this fic:D

    Wish you LUCK! and keep up the beautiful way you write. I mean the way you write is great, all you need is a little more creativity on a more realistic level, but I guess there's nothing YOU can't do right?

    PS. Try to think of your characters as if they are ppl you know, will make it more reaslitic, elpselps:D

    hugs, Faithful
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  • From Faithfulrain on April 12, 2004
    Hey girl! (I'm in a hey girl mood today) Ok so this is what I think after reading chppie 1: Ok so Hermione or what's her name's past is kind of well, weird, and a littl bit OTT. I mean first of all there is this one thing I absolutely hate, and that's making Hermione American. I know, I know, you're probably American and you that is a good reason to do that, but still I HATE IT! :D sorry! Now the whole Voldemort think.... confusing again... a little, I mean adding such a big change to the theme, as in killing Hermione, and doing body changes, is a great challenge. I hope you can handle, it but you have to remember THIS changes everything. What else. Now I do enjoy a good Mary-S, as long as the character is NOT totally perfect, and you seem to be going that way. I mean she is the SMARTEST and will probably be like the most beautiful, try to avoid that. Make sure she's not too PERFECT!

    What I do like is the way you write. Apart from the small words that sometimes don't match, everything is great. You know your vocabulary, and you seem to know your grammar (We'll I can't write so I just say 'seem' to which mean I think you do). But that's too dry, Grammma, vocabulary, who cares right? The important thing is that you can write in a way that is easy reading and interesting. I'm off to read chappie 2, so I can give you some more feedback. Don't hae :De :D:D:D:D cheers, Faithful
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  • From ANON - Triospleasure on April 12, 2004
    The story is interesting.No matter what her name is,according to her story the friends she made would still be her true friends. They only know this Hermonie.If she has secrek sok so what ,most people do. They would accept that. Harry would be her best supporter .He's been down her road.Ron would be out for blood ,and since he cant get to the Dursleys he would LOVE to visit her "real" mom and Step .I imagine Draco's reaction .I'm thinkin pure fear.. Go for it.


    Trio
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  • From ANON - XxphoenixX on April 11, 2004
    I really like it. Don't worry about it. It's definitely not as terrible as you seem to think. It's VERY creative. And yet I believe it. I mean it seems so strange! But credible. I can't wait to see what happens. Hermione isn't Hermione. She's this incredibly cool other person. Nice. I really want to see what happens in Hogwarts... UPDATE
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