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Reviews for Leaving Behind

By : ForcekillMiki
  • From ANON - Laminoid on November 20, 2006
    I am enjoying this so far! I would, however, like to point out that Snipe *do* exist...and people *do* actually hunt them...although I am aware that it is used as a joke in areas that they are not common... http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Snipe

    Just a bit of useless knowledge LOL!...Looking forward to reading more from you...
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 19, 2006
    "Later that evening he heard a car pull up into the drive way. He put
    his books away so his Uncle could not get rid of them because that is what he would do if he found them."
    All of that is not necessary to make the reader understand.
    It should be implied that vernon would destroy the books. When you spell things out so completly for your reader...so simplistic it is often boring. It is unnecessarily redundant.
    Keep writing and improving.
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 19, 2006
    Have someone go over your work to find spelling mistakes. You have a lot of similar words mixed up..like sight and site. Sight means to see..and site is a place. Words like go and get are also mixed up.
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  • From ANON - LordThingy69 on October 28, 2006
    UPDATE!! UPDATE!!! HURRRRYYYY!!! I need to read more of this! *smiles*

    I love HP stories when Harry isn't wimpy or stupid. Yay for Super Harry!!!

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  • From ANON - lin on October 09, 2006
    as i said before i'll comment as i go..ihave a bad memory
    I really liked that he made the cubbard under the stairs a solid wall. it was a very nice touch that was a bit of closure to harry. Also the obliviate..
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  • From ANON - Anon on October 09, 2006
    You asked for constructive critisism so as i read i'll review as i come to things that i either really like or need to be altered.
    this "He now knew all of the Dark Art spells and how to counter them, he did not enjoy doing them one bit but he would need them for the fight."
    Should be changed..there is no way for him to know ALL of the dark art spells there are...and maybe you should explain why he doesn't like them...i mean does it make his body feel diffrent using a dark spell as opposed to a light spell..or does he simply not like it because them ministry deems it dark...is dark magic addictive?
    Also the book titles..you could have used random book authors...i mean after all if dumbledoore had written a book surely he would have given harry a copy during fifth year to help him learn.
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  • From ANON - Saph on September 30, 2006
    Starts good.. jsut keeps getting better - update soon please :D
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  • From ANON - jessica on August 24, 2006
    i really like this story,please update.
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  • From ANON - DedicatedReader on August 23, 2006
    This is definetly one of my favourite stories. Please hurry up and update. I'm dying to know what happens next. Pwetty Pwease. *Puppy-eyes pout*
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  • From ANON - Aeolua on August 14, 2006
    AAAAAHHHHHHHH!!! I REALLY love what you did with harry's apperance. PLEASE Update soon!! ***eats pillow***
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  • From ANON - moonchild on August 10, 2006
    add more or i'll hexed you!
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  • From bloodbunny on August 09, 2006
    Great story! Can't wait to find out what happends next!
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  • From ANON - Donavon. on July 26, 2006
    I love this story. However, I know this is a rewrite or new post. I read a certain amount of chapters on FF. I remember I tried to review and could not because I was not a member. You stopped updating, if I recall. Are you going to finish the story on this site? I hope so. Best wishes,
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  • From ANON - Pilch on July 26, 2006
    this is a really good and interesting story!!!!
    i have enjoyed reading it so far and hope that you update soon!!!!
    keep up the good work:)
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  • From ANON - maria joao on July 25, 2006
    PLEASE CONTINUE...
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