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From ANON - Lu Ling Qi on March 27, 2005
no no no i need more update quicky, it isso good update quickly!
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From ANON - angua on March 27, 2005
Oh! I loved the last chapter (as every one). I'm looking forward to read more. I think it's fantastic how the characters are developing. Hugs,
Angua

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From ANON - xena on March 20, 2005
Oh, what a cliffhanger! I'm terribly addicted now and it's all your fault. I'm anxious to read what happens with Hermione enxt chapter. Great job on this.
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From ANON - herumal on March 18, 2005
How on earth did you get to this Hermione from the Hermione of the books? How can bright, hardworking, sensible Hermione become this sad, pathetic wreck of a human being? It doesn't make any sense.

Hermione isn't like this. Not at all.
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From ANON - atendoft on March 18, 2005
I have had a discustingly happy childhood without any of the disturbing ideas portrayed here, however, I do have a very dear friend who is not so fortunate and I can understand the mixed feelings and confusing thoughts expressed here. I congratulate you for being able to express all this in such an elegant way - you really should think of a way to publish this.

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From ANON - Lu Ling Qi on March 18, 2005
Hey i am sad at this insatllment and angry that you left such a cliff hanger, put me out of my misery and update soon pls!

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From ANON - nesscafe on March 18, 2005
OMFG! Is this how it's going to end? Is she really going to kill herself. So sad and so very selfish! Doesn't she realize what this will do to Snape? Oh I shudder to think of what you are going to have happen next. She's going to succeed isn't she? She's going to die. :c(
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From innogen on March 18, 2005
When I was as young as Hermione, my environment was far from stable. Overwhelming anxiety in trying to keep everything around me together, and never being able to take care of myself, put me in the position of being dependent at age 17. It's such a strange thing; when I moved into my twenties things only got worse, not better as I had always assumed. My 'boyfriend' was often uncommunicative, as well as about 9 years older, plus he was my Foster Brother when the relationship first started: it was not one I was eager to share with the world. I did not figure out why that was until I moved into my thirties, and learned about dependency, coercion (real or imagined), or just people who take advantage when you are vulnerable. This does not reflect on Snape and Hermione. It's just, I'm trying to explain that the intensity at which Hermione 'drives' herself, Snape, everything around her; the way in which she 'takes care of' Snape, focussing more on him than herself; and the fact that she recognizes her dependency and loathes it, yet unwilling to give it up; all these emotions and thoughts, and this intensity...and that building feeling of unease that you can't quite identify, but ultimately explodes in an act of some kind of self destruction--the fact that simple misspoken word or missinterpretation can create the downward spiral into helplessness and self-hate for *needing* something, even if it just to be needed; is something I relate to all too well. I guess this chapter strikes close to heart.

Very good job with this chapter: I find that the way Hermione views the world; in terms of science, sex, and death; very integrated. I understand her, yet I am glad I was never *her*; our issues are different...except for trying to control that feeling of *anger* when you don't want to be angry, and you don't know where to direct it or even why it exists--and during these times I find I just need to be alone to stop myself from holding useless arguments with my roommate (male) or significant other (ex-boyfriend), because the more I would try to pry communication or understanding from such people, the worse the situation gets...to the point where I've been in the hospital once or twice, where they do the quick patch with the anti-anxiety pill and check that you really are in therapy and such. The medical system is twisted.

I love the language; intense, lyrical, harsh; that you write with, peeling all the layers of Hermione's character away to her inner and exposed core, showing her bleed when she hasn't physically hurt herself, showing her sadness in believing that she is just a pawn with no control over her own life. And that thought, that things are never going to get better so why bother, is one that causes those of depression even to see more thoughts of self destruction--when you are at the point when you imagine taking something sharp and slashing your arms, and don't really want to even *imagine* such things, everything becomes more scary and the anxiety and feeling of no control increases.

Snape is Hermione's comfort food. She can't tolerate the thought she might lose him and so she trys to destroy herself before finding out if he survives.... This way she avoides ultimate rejection--Lily was more whole where she is lacking. She believes, despite what Snape told her, that she can never compete with a memory of 'what should have been'.

I hope things ultimately turn out well in this story, for both our main characters.

Congratulations on the excellent writing and character development! The character development is some of the deepest and unshallow that I've ever read. I guess I love that intensity--something I've been told is simply who I can't help but be. Intense. I guess it wears everyone else around me out, so now I spend more time to myself.

I apologize for personal background intruding on this review.

Innogen

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From innogen on March 18, 2005
When I was as young as Hermione, my environment was far from stable. Overwhelming anxiety in trying to keep everything around me together, and never being able to take care of myself, put me in the position of being dependent at age 17. It's such a strange thing; when I moved into my twenties things only got worse, not better as I had always assumed. My 'boyfriend' was often uncommunicative, as well as about 9 years older, plus he was my Foster Brother when the relationship first started: it was not one I was eager to share with the world. I did not figure out why that was until I moved into my thirties, and learned about dependency, coercion (real or imagined), or just people who take advantage when you are vulnerable. This does not reflect on Snape and Hermione. It's just, I'm trying to explain that the intensity at which Hermione 'drives' herself, Snape, everything around her; the way in which she 'takes care of' Snape, focussing more on him than herself; and the fact that she recognizes her dependency and loathes it, yet unwilling to give it up; all these emotions and thoughts, and this intensity...and that building feeling of unease that you can't quite identify, but ultimately explodes in an act of some kind of self destruction--the fact that simple misspoken word or missinterpretation can create the downward spiral into helplessness and self-hate for *needing* something, even if it just to be needed; is something I relate to all too well. I guess this chapter strikes close to heart.

Very good job with this chapter: I find that the way Hermione views the world; in terms of science, sex, and death; very integrated. I understand her, yet I am glad I was never *her*; our issues are different...except for trying to control that feeling of *anger* when you don't want to be angry, and you don't know where to direct it or even why it exists--and during these times I find I just need to be alone to stop myself from holding useless arguments with my roommate (male) or significant other (ex-boyfriend), because the more I would try to pry communication or understanding from such people, the worse the situation gets...to the point where I've been in the hospital once or twice, where they do the quick patch with the anti-anxiety pill and check that you really are in therapy and such. The medical system is twisted.

I love the language; intense, lyrical, harsh; that you write with, peeling all the layers of Hermione's character away to her inner and exposed core, showing her bleed when she hasn't physically hurt herself, showing her sadness in believing that she is just a pawn with no control over her own life. And that thought, that things are never going to get better so why bother, is one that causes those of depression even to see more thoughts of self destruction--when you are at the point when you imagine taking something sharp and slashing your arms, and don't really want to even *imagine* such things, everything becomes more scary and the anxiety and feeling of no control increases.

Snape is Hermione's comfort food. She can't tolerate the thought she might lose him and so she trys to destroy herself before finding out if he survives.... This way she avoides ultimate rejection--Lily was more whole where she is lacking. She believes, despite what Snape told her, that she can never compete with a memory of 'what should have been'.

I hope things ultimately turn out well in this story, for both our main characters.

Congratulations on the excellent writing and character development! The character development is some of the deepest and unshallow that I've ever read. I guess I love that intensity--something I've been told is simply who I can't help but be. Intense. I guess it wears everyone else around me out, so now I spend more time to myself.

I apologize for personal background intruding on this review.

Innogen

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From ANON - nesscafe on March 11, 2005
I can't remember if I've reviewed this story, so I wanted to let you know that I wasn't a fan in the begining, but I kept reading and now I'm totally in love w/ it! I must have been in some kind of stupid mood when I read the first few chapters. I don't know, but this is a great story and I can't wait for the next installment

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From ANON - mimi on March 11, 2005
Sigh, I absolutely can't praise this story enough! You two are two of the best writers I've seen on this site.
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From ANON - Anon on March 11, 2005
Please I want to see what is acurring back at hogwarts
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From innogen on March 01, 2005
I still find this incredibly intense. I still can't believe Dumbledore sacked Severus...but like you said. In real life he would have been sacked. I love this story, and I need to give more detailed feedback on your webpage--this last week or so has been pretty bad depression wise, plus, I have been having migraines. Plus, I'm OCD about editing things I shouldn't: I feel quite pathetic. Is Beta Compulsion an official disease? We'll have to discuss it sometime. ~Innogen

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From ANON - Lu Ling QI on February 23, 2005
as always it is a pleaseure and i hope you update soon for this story is just to much
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From ANON - Lu Ling Qi on February 15, 2005
pls pls update soon you are killing me i must know more:)

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