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Reviews for Stone Angels

By : StarlightSoul
  • From ANON - nondescriptone on February 13, 2005
    Great story, I'm really enjoying how you've got the interplay between all the characters going. Hope to see more of the story soon please!
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  • From ANON - magicalwonder on February 06, 2005
    This is a complex story, beautifully written. It is a wonderful idea give everyone a way to get over their own preconceive ideas of others that they will have to learn to trust and in some cases even love. I like the slow build between Hermione and Severus. I also assume that Draco and Harry will end up together, although I don't really understand the desire to make Harry and Draco gay (it is such a waste of good looking men), they are the two that I would put together. It is also really nice to give depth to Neville and Luna. And to make people see themselves in others. Can't wait for more.
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  • From ANON - Rhylahna on January 28, 2005
    Please email me at Isnt.my.email.address.creative@gmail.com when you update. i'm really enjoying your fic.
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  • From ANON - Lu LIng Qi on January 24, 2005
    pls update soon this is sad but good story i want more chapters soon!
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  • From ANON - tracy on January 20, 2005
    keepa goin'! love it and wants to hear more
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  • From ANON - dragonelf on January 19, 2005
    yourstor is awesome.i'm so enthralled and i can't wit to see what happens next! Bravo!!!!
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  • From ANON - Josh Cohen on January 19, 2005
    To be honest, I really didn't expect a whole lot when I opened this one up, but it went from a hurt/comfort story to a full-blown ensemble tale that I would like to see more of. I like the characterizations of the characters in general, although Harry is a little too assertive and Draco is a little too unlike the self he used to be (the explanation as to why is sound, but it somehow doesn't quite work in my head). I especially liked it when they sic'd Molly on Dumbledore. Overall, good stuff, and I'd like to know how it ends.
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  • From ANON - me. on January 19, 2005
    Yay! thankyou! I love this fic, its the best on on the web! I always lok out for updates.

    Best wishes and good work.
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  • From ANON - Mysticdarkraven on January 18, 2005
    Great post, hope you post again soon. Thanks.
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  • From ANON - Gwen on January 04, 2005
    If you need a beta...please email me...if not for betaing, email me when you update your story!

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  • From ANON - Sunflower on January 04, 2005
    Amazing story line...PLEASE UPDATE!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - tina on December 26, 2004
    i love your story so far. please please update again soon!!
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  • From ANON - curly on December 21, 2004
    Of course, after all that,there I go and make a mistake in the very first sentence. Should be others.Oops!
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  • From ANON - curly on December 21, 2004
    Sad but wonderful start to your story-only read ch1. so far and can't wait to read the rest. Like other's have noted, you need a beta to help you with grammar and spelling,but I noticed no one has actually given you any details. The most glaring mistakes I've seen involved your puntuation when setting off direct quotes from other text, such as when to use a comma to set it off vs. just using a period and then starting a new sentence. Quickly, use the comma when the following or preceding text describes how the quoted material is being said or if you are connecting two parts of a quote that are being separated by descriptive text. "Our mother hurt us," she coughed out. ( describing how she said it) "Relax, you are safe." He couldn't believe his voice soothed her. ( used period as the next part is not describing the quoted material. Also,be careful with using proper punctuation for possessives. I noticed you leave out the apostrophes ie the girls cloaks should be girls'.By the way,I am making up sentences for examples not pulling actual quotes from the story. Snape comes out of his room with a blanket but when he puts it around the girls, you made it plural. He put them on the girls-something like that. Also,be careful with the forms of to and too. Hope some of this helps. I don't know what writing resources are available on this site, but sycophanthex.com and other fanfiction sites provide great reviews of grammar and writing tips. Also, bits of the story just seem off or have I not read enough? If they were down in the basement for a week or more, wouldn't their mother have removed the dead body and have found the wand? Why were their trunks already packed if H had only been out of school for three weeks-wouldn't there still be about two months before school restarted? I hope you don't find all of this too nitpicky,but I know that there are many stories that get overlooked after one or two chapters due to bad grammar and unfortunately a great story is missed and I have a feeling that this is one story that should be read by all.
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  • From ANON - Shiro Ryu on December 17, 2004
    Great chapter! I was very happy to see your update. ^_^
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