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  • From ANON - Anon on October 28, 2004
    and the audience goes "awwwwwwwwwww" that was sooooo....etc sweet. i love it love it love it. cant wait for more!
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  • From ANON - LucKyo on October 27, 2004
    I just have one thing to say to you--you rock!!!! This story rocks! Hell, the pairing definitely rocks. I'm your new #1 fan. ^_^
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  • From ANON - a nonny mouse on October 27, 2004
    Well, I hate to say, but damn I'm glad Ron's out of the way! I enjoy reading Pregnant!Hermione (even when she's a 7th year) and I've enjoyed the few Charlie/Hermione fics that I've read (fanfic goddess Rilla wrote a lovely one). I'm dyslexic too, so I do understand about the spelling challenge--congrats for persevering and expressing yourself...so easy just to listen to people gripe and say, "Screw this" and stop. Good fic, thanks for writing. *waits very impatiently, but politely for updates* *control/refresh* *control/refresh* ;P
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  • From annalumos on October 27, 2004
    Although I adore Ron/Hermione fanfics, this has stolen my heart. Now I'm fanatically searching the net for more Charlie/Hermione stories. Great job.
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  • From ANON - lacey weasley on October 27, 2004
    Wonderful chapter. I didn't notice a single error. It was smooth reading. Please continue to write, you have a definite flair for it.
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  • From ANON - Juri on October 27, 2004
    *Sigh* Charlie is a dreamboat. I adore his character even more seeing how much he loves Hermione and takes care of her. I can't wait for Hermione to figure out (finally) his behavior isn't exactly brotherly. They are so cute together! Wonderful story as alway.
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  • From ANON - Juri on October 24, 2004
    You're literally killing me...and it feels so good. Lol. Wonderfully sad and moving story. Poor Hermione.
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  • From ANON - Juri on October 24, 2004
    You're literally killing ne...and it feels so good. Lol. Wonderfully sad and ng sng story. Poor Hermione.
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  • From ANON - Jamie on October 24, 2004
    I'd be willing to beta for you, but I'm afraid that I have a bad habit of not checking my email every day, sometimes. I'm also a procrastinator. I'm also in Japan at the moment (13 hours ahead of U.S.A. EST), so that would add a couple of hours to my response time as well... I also can't edit while I'm at work. But I do like your story and think it deserves the following that I think it could have, if you had a beta. So... if you are willing to put up with all of that, then I'll do it for you. (And heck, since I'm being generous anyway ;) lol, I'll also re-edit the chapters you've posted--if you send them to me--and then you can do a re-post of everything, beta-ed.) ;) Anyway, it's an offer. :) Good luck with the next chapter.
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  • From ANON - lacey weasley on October 23, 2004
    Great Chapter. The story is really progressing. I'm trying to figure out who she will end up with.

    I wasn't trying to be a witch with the spelling comment. You had said in one chapter that you had a beta. On the internet community you don't always know if you are speaking to a native english speaker. It wasn't so much that the words were spelled wrong but the words that were used were ananyms.

    Anyway Great Story. I hope you will continue.
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  • From ANON - erin kite on October 23, 2004
    hey, this is a pretty good story, ive really enjoyed reading it. i cant wait for the next chapter(s) and dont worry about the dislexia thing. its not too bad, i can still figure out what you meant so dont worry about it. and hey, if you dont mind, email me when you plan on posting some more, that is if you dont mind. thanks...again, really good story i really liked it.
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  • From ANON - Jamie on October 22, 2004
    Well, whaddaya know... Charlie's gonna have his chance to "fix her broken smile"... although it's tragic what you had happen to her (and to Ron and Harry). This is rather well-written; you're doing better. You need spacers between your scene changes, however. Maybe ~~~~~~ or ~o~o~o~o~ or something.... Also, is someone beta-ing for you still? I know you have dyslexia, and so I am not going to comment on your grammatical errors and whatnot. But if you ARE using a beta, then that person needs to try harder before the story is submitted. They are letting even spells be spelled wrong (i.e. "Avada Kedavar", instead of "Kedavra. Ag. Again, I am not going to fault you, because I know you said you have dyslexia, and I still think that the writing has greatly improved since the first chapter. But I thought that, if you are using a beta, you should tell him/her to "shape up or ship out"... :) Keep up the good work.
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  • From ANON - lacey weasley on October 21, 2004
    You have a very interesting story. I can't wait to see who ends up with whom.

    The only thing....spell check will catch obvious misspellings and typos but not the incorrect word usage. I read you have a beta maybe English isn't her first language. It distracts from your wonderful story.
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  • From ANON - LucKyo (2 lazy 2 log in) on October 21, 2004
    This story continues to shock me. Definitely not expecting these turn of events. Poor Hermione...and Ron and Harry. Still, brilliant as always in my humble opinion.
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  • From ANON - abr on October 20, 2004
    This hits home for me on so many levels. ost ost my mother 7 months ago, and alot of the things that you describe are what I am going through... though there is so much more that I know cannot be described in words.
    I just wish that I had someone here with me. Friends and family help, but...
    I like the story alot and cannot wait to read the conclusion.
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