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By : oldwolf

From ANON - Elizabeth Spiegel on May 30, 2005
YAY another chapter!!!!!

*Does happy dance*

that was good....a little surprised no one mentioned that first wife spell sooner though...

and Hermione with a dick...that IS interesting...

*giggles*

anyway can't wait for more!!!

Elizabeth
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From ANON - Prince Charon on May 29, 2005
Thank you for continueing this so fast.

Very, very hot, good, and interesting.

I have a lot of respect for this version of Ron.

More soon, please.
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From ANON - cj_cold on May 28, 2005
I absolutely loved this chapter...

The Tonks sodomy scene was so hot, the wait was well worth it and I think that Tonks would agree. Her Tattoo is definitely true now. Although I have noticed that a lot of the sex scenes lately have been kind of short with Harry having a lack of stamina or the thralls telling him to relax and let go that it is for his pleasure, well sometimes the build-up to climax makes it more pleasureable. Maybe you should consider a bit more foreplay and maybe some sexy strip tease acts to get Harry wound up?

I am concerned about Harry's continued passivity towards the girls, he never initiates the sex, they do and he goes along with it, even when they ask him what he would like to do he usually says whatever they want to do. Maybe one of the ladies(probably Hermione or Tonks) should bring the matter up with him, I can see Harry with no previous experience with women not wanting to push himself on the girls knowing they are unable to say no to him. Maybe a talk from them will make him understand that within reason they would enjoy a more aggresive and dominant Harry. Maybe Hermione gives him some reading material to study on how to handle his thralls.

Kind of surprised Hermione hasn't found some books on Dom/sub or bondage or at least the Kama Sutra to go over or give to Harry to study.

Like the idea you have about the first wife spell as a counterpart to the sex slave spell. Could definely see Harry using it but not until they are married, also the spell should create a link between the two that either can close-off. The spell should also have some down sides, this spell is meant for your wife during a time when the only difference between you wife and slave maybe the wife had more rights, wouldn't be surprising if the spell gave Harry some powers over Hermione, something to prevent your wife form cheating on you, lieing to you, or harming you, without actually making her your slave sounds about right. Also Narcissa should probably be punished for telling Hermione about the spell becuase to believe that the wife of a Death-Eater and a slytherin would be careless enough to let something like that slip accidently, I don't think so.

Loved the Hermione exploring her kinky side as well as maybe her submissive side if that slip of the tongue in a previous chapter wasn't a typo(master?). Her use of the magical strap-on was great and opens up some possibilities for if Cho joins the Harem. Although her using it to Sodomize Bella or Tonks should not be allowed, Bella voiced her opinion that her arse belonged to the master and wouldn't be touched without his permission and Tonks tattoo and recent experience would probably make her feel the same way. And after that scene I would think that Harry would be a little possessive of Tonks arse too.

Maybe you should have Hermione decide that she should pay Tonks back for her kindness in helping her. I know that she is the mistress but Hermione would probably start to feel bad about Tonks satifying her and she doing little in return during these sex ed lessons.

A little concerned about Cho upsetting the balance of the Harem, at the moment everyone has their own strength or position.

Hermione --
Mistress/consort to Harry/future wife?/Harry's right hand

N. Tonks --
Bodyguard/Security/Confidant ...Probably most loyal, Harry seems to trust her and confide in her more than just about anyone, Harry's left hand

Narcissa --
Personal Assistant ...... Handles his social calender and business with the Ministry/Press/Public

Bellatrix --
Personal Bitch... most devoted slave(remember Sirius description), enjoys being punished/acts as outlet for Harry's violent impulses, the one he can be aggressive with without feeling as guilty as the others

What role will Cho play? Maybe her test should be to act as his thrall of her own free will for a while without the spell. The spell will increse his power somewhat and allow him to postpone another public demonstration but what other purpose will she serve, what skill does she bring to the table?

Maybe Harry should ask McGonagel about animgus training for his favor(she is a lot old for it to be a sexual favor)

Nice scene with Ron and Luna, surprised Ron is that mature though..

Is anything going to happen with the new teachers...If so reference above concerns about Cho..but if you can work out roles for them the more the merrier

What about a meeting between Narcissa and Draco?

Definitely think Harry should teach Dumbles a lesson, the idea to bring in the twins sounds fun. Speaking of the prophecy has Harry explained it tot the other thralls and hermione yet?

Maybe you should think of adding more clothing options, while the maid uniform is nice it is getting a little old, maybe Harem girl outfits, or some kind of lingere.

Have you thought about having a costume ball on Halloween, it would give the girls a chance to wear some outrageous things in public.

Update soon.....
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From ANON - Zero on May 28, 2005
Is it my imagination, or have you been writing like mad?

No matter. I love the way things are going at Hogwarts.

Write more.
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From ANON - alkeria7089 on May 28, 2005
Excellent! Both on speed and content. Thank you!!
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From ANON - Robbir Byrd on May 27, 2005
I liked where Hermione was having anal sex with Narssica.
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From ANON - DigitalFeonix on May 27, 2005
I like the story so far. But I'm concerned about Cho being added to the mix. The reasons she gives are logically (befiiting a Ravenclaw). But the emotional ramifications are huge. I think Harry wouldn't do anything to hurt his relationship with Hermione (you've laid the mistress groundwork) and adding Cho to his thralls could severly strain it. I don't think that Hermione would easily step into a dominate role (at least in this story) over Cho to prove eaches place with Harry, nor do I think she'll be pleased with him adding ANOTHER to the mix to compete against, especially Cho.

That aside, when you do add Cho, i would suggest you utilize something you had layed into place in the early chapters, have Cho cast the spell. It would have the same effect if she really wanted it, and it would leave Harry with a much cleaner conscience (and less grumblings from Hermione).
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From on May 27, 2005
very nice, two of my friends told me about this story....I did not think it would really be that good...I was wrong, anyway great story, made it through in one sitting...that is unusual for me.

But you can thank the wind master and Elizabeth Spiegel for putting me onto your story, I like it and now I intend to read it all the way through to the end. I may not ALWAYS review it, but for this one, I will try to.

great job

Please update soon

Storm
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From ANON - I am the Wind Master on May 27, 2005
Sorry I don't have much time to review...gotta get to my sister's house soon, but great chapter...shit, I'm late....um can't wait til the next one..thanks for the email.

bye!
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From ANON - Elizabeth Spiegel on May 27, 2005
*SQUEALS*
an UPDATE!!!
YAY!!!!

love the story so far....I'm like a very very bed addict....to bad there's no FFA....fanfiction anonymous

*giggles* don't mind me..I had a migraine earlier...and now..I'm a little out of it thanks to some REALLY strong medicine...

now...please type more.......and soon!!!!!
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From ANON - Prince Charon on May 26, 2005
Very, very interesting, and not quite what I was expecting.

Thank you for updating so quickly.

More soon, please.
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From ANON - David M. Potter on May 26, 2005
This is an awesome fic. I so look forward to it.
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From ANON - lilywood on May 26, 2005
Ok, there has to be a chapter missing after Chapter 1. At the end of 1, Narcissa and Bellatrix are having their way with Harry and then in 2 four people show up at Privit Drive? Huh? Their already bound, who knows how. Is Voldemort dead? No one mentions him. Harry is acting like a leader. Why? This story is too confusing.
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From ANON - Robbie Byrd on May 26, 2005
I liked how you have Harry considering adding Cho to his harem. Please update soon.
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From ANON - red jacobson on May 26, 2005
love it! can't wait to see the audition.
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