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By : oldwolf

From ANON - gryffindors on May 26, 2005
hey it's your buddy haitham
great work here man, though abit lacking actionwise
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From ANON - wes on May 25, 2005
hey great chapters keep up the good work just one thing can harrys girls get pregnant or dose the sex slave spell stop that from happening
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From sasqch on May 23, 2005
well, i'm going to break tradition and say that this chapter felt a bit odd.

i mean, i liked the character development displayed with the dialogue between cissa and bella. their conversation regarding their feelings about both the humiliations and what harry might be going through was very well done. and it did wonders as to making me care more about these two.

but that was about it. i mean, first, snape was overly nice to harry. i thought he was supposed to be still undercover as a death-eater? i mean, yes, he has declared a truce with harry, and harry did take him to task regarding the treatment of neville, but snape was abnormally gracious to harry. in a classroom full of death-eater spawn.

next, we have harry's two new teachers. and they both just happen to be young nubile hot women, both of whom disregard the dress convention as well as the teacher/student dialogue standards? hell, the runes teacher basically made a come-on to harry with the "accidental" misspelling.

and what is up with cho? she wants to apologise to harry? but narcissa knows that harry is extremely pissed at her. and hermione (who as was explicitly pointed out in this chapter is basically the thralls mistress) despises her. so why would narcissa even begin to listen to cho's request? but then to turn it around into a punishment scenario -- that *could* make sense, but only if harry initiated it and was there to participate in it. since he was not there, in fact was tied up and distracted from it, he gained nothing from it. so it obviously was for nothing but narcissa's enjoyment. the only way this makes sense is if narcissa plans on making cho her personal little pet.

however, my biggest peeve with this chapter came in the last sequence. through the aforementioned flashback, tonks reveals to hermione why she is being referred to as "mistress". i have no problem with that concept. it fits with the manner in which harry has been treating hermione throughout the story. the fault is the last sentence
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From ANON - Prince Charon on May 23, 2005
Thank you, thank you, thank you, thank you! Very glad to see this updated so soon.

I liked the convo between Hermione and Tonks in the flashback, thouHermions's last line (post-
flashback)has interesting implications.

I'm not sure I like the idea of Cho joining the Harem, though. I'd prefer Ginny, or Luna, or
Lavender, or the Patil twins, but I'll keep reading it even if you do add Cho, because its so well
written.

More soon, please.
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From ANON - red_jacobson on May 23, 2005
Yummy! Several things to like; Hermione with a buttplug, Naked, Kneeling Cho (tm); the idea that Bella has to help Neville and Ginny with her punishment, I really can't wait to see what happens next.

red
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From ANON - cj_cold on May 23, 2005
Nice chapter.

Interesting school arrangements. Does Harry have a curfew and can he leave the castle for Hogsmeade say on the weekends.

Dumbledore set Tonks up? Told her the prophecy knowing she would offer her self to Harry as a thrall, why would he do that and why didn't Harry blow a fuse when he foundout.

When is Harry going to sodomize Tonks(as herself), and I hope she enjoys it as much as she is hoping.

The meeting with Cho should be interesting. How is the normal school body responding to Harry's harem?

Do you have any plans to add any more girls to the group.

Update soon.
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From ANON - cj_cold on May 23, 2005
Great chapter.

Hoping Cho will become a thrall or voluntary servant, especially with her submissive reaction to spanking. Wondering about Marissa(what do you mean she taught Cissa, that would make her like 50-60 years old to have been teaching back then) and Elaine or did you just creat two beautiful young(relatively) teachers for no reason. Can't wait to see how you work them into the story.

Thought Harry could have been a little more affectionate or comforting towards Bella after basically telling her that she would probably be tortured(And you should have put a no maiming condition on his deal with Neville, he could always cut off some body parts or cripple her without killing her). Maybe he can use it to fulfill one of the public scenes. If people see her hurt they don't have to know that Harry didn't do it. Maybe he drags her ot the infirmiry afterwards making sure to go by a group of gossiping students.

Harry seems to not be very forward regarding intiating sex. usually the girls grab him and lead. When is he going to ask for something he wants to do sexually.

Maybe some skinny dipping down at the Lake, or maybe swim suits. Be interesting what the girls come up with to get their msters attention. Though Tonks would have to hide her Tattoo.

Have you thought about using the Room of Requirements(for non DA activities).

Bring on Cho!!!

Update soon.
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From ANON - Robbie Byrd on May 23, 2005
I enjoyed reading your story. I liked how you had Narssica punish Cho with a spanking. And then had Cho eat her out.
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From ANON - Elizabeth Spiegel on May 23, 2005
wow....I loved it!!!!!!!

I'm so glad you updated tonight!

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From ANON - I am the Wind Master on May 23, 2005
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From ANON - Prince Charon on May 22, 2005
Thank you for the rapid updating, You're on a roll.

Very interesting, hot, and good.

More soon, please.
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From TheDarkBeginning on May 22, 2005
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From ANON - I am the wind master on May 21, 2005
....this should be interesting...Neville and Ginny.....working on tochure.....on Bella.............

can't wait to read it........

also very well written as usual...and thank you for the email with the link to it.
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From sasqch on May 21, 2005
another stellar installment. i liked how harry appears to have decided to use neville and ginny for the next public demonstration. or maybe they are to be the distraction. you are keeping harry in character by being very much concerned for his friends and their well-being. offering neville the chance for a bit of closure was an interesting move. having ginny agree to help works in two ways -- it allows her to bond more with neville, while preventing him from cracking and going too far.

i like the concept of the gang being able to live together in one house (the placement being near the library must please hermione a little). this allows harry to retain his contact with his friends and schoolmates while maintaining the necessary contact with his thralls. i was surprised at how easily the rest of the crew took the news that hermione would be living in harry's quarters. no, not that ron did not explode in a jealous rage -- just that they seemed to blase about the whole thing. i will say that ron's reaction was a fresh change that i was not expecting at all; i guess luna's positive reinforcement techniques are pretty effective. i think your take on luna is pretty good as well -- she really does not care about herself, but an attack upon those she loves riles her up to no end. i also liked herimone's response to harry's comparison of her to luna; very humorous indeed.

two things caught my attention: one was when dumbledore mentioned the fact that harry can apparently add members to this new house. he referred to it a second time, albeit more obliquely, when he mentioned that they could form their own quidditch team if they could find enough players. they currently have only six members in their new house -- they would need seven at a minimum to form a team. are you planning on adding more people to the house? or are you planning on adding more people to harry's immediate grouping?

which leads me to my second point: cho -- dear god no! sorry, had to get it off my chest. why in heaven's name would cho be looking for harry? i mean she could not stand the thought of harry splitting his time between her and hermione, so what would she want with harry now that he has two public thralls? sorry, but i really never liked the character, and you have made it a point to notice her during this chapter with a looming follow-up. this has got me a little frightened.

besides those two points (more the cho event), it was a very well done chapter. there was another round of malfoy bashing. and harry has appeared to finally tapped into his thralls' knowledge base as shown by his use of legilimency. and harry has settled into school with his inner-circle of friends accepting the changes. now we just have to wait and see as to the fall-out for the rest of the school: the star gryffindors are no longer part of the house, snape is now the dada teacher, and harry has yet to face the rest of the student body with both the news of the thralls and his dating of hermione.

chris
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From ANON - fenriswolf on May 21, 2005
This is such an odd story, it's hard to say just how I feel about it. On one hand it's very creative, with a plethora of interesting plot twists and character developments. On the other there are elements of Harry's behavior that are extremely disturbing. Harry's status as a wizard of the light side would seem to preclude the inventiveness and pleasure he embraces as master to his set of thralls. Part of that I'm guessing is due to the spell, but it's a bit jarring at times when he shifts back and forth between the sexually dominant slaveowner that gets a thrill out of shagging Tonks's breasts, and the occasionally shy and insecure young man in love with is best friend (and I don't mean Ron!). Still, all quibbles aside, it's a fun read, and one I'm enjoying quite a bit. And I'm rather looking forward to what might happen to Snape at the hands of Harry's thralls if he starts pulling his usual 'greasy git' tactics.
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