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From ANON - Prince Charon on October 15, 2005
I'm impressed beyond words.
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From ANON - D on October 14, 2005
The story would have been better if you'd have killed Hermione. Ah well.
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From ANON - Sean on October 13, 2005
Good chapter, please post more when you can
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From ANON - sasqch on October 08, 2005
Chapter 39

The discussion with the Grangers really puts into perspective the switch of attitudes from the beginning chapters. When we first met Dave, he seemed to be overly protective of Hermione, to the point of the couple explicitly stating that neither one had put a hand on one another. Yet, in the later chapters, Dave went so far as to quiz Harry as to why he hadn't slept with his daughter yet. This conversation was logical and believable in covering this change in attitude toward Harry and their daughter. Harry remained in character of being shy and reserved, and absolutely terrified of offending Hermione's parents.

As for Cho wanting a beating prior to Harry's planned evening, it obviously would put a crimp in Harry's emotional state. And I like how you had Cho explain how using a surrogate to inflict the pain is not quite the same for the Thrall. This solves two plot points: 1 -- It forces Harry to be the one to who is causing pain to these women, and even though the girls may enjoy it, he does not. 2 -- Why Harry cannot simply delegate the act to another (be it Tonks or Hermione, both of whom seem to have no trouble with the act). Although, as I questioned before, I do wonder if Harry ever does officially enact Hermione as the Thrall's Mistress (using the First Wife spell), will Cho's enjoyment from the beating if given by Hermione be equivalent in reaction to receiving pain from her Master? Or is it simply because it is Harry, and not her "Master" that is inflicting the pain that gives her pleasure? Oh, and it was nice to see that Harry has finally learned that the other Thralls have been considering Hermione their unofficial Mistress for some time now. His reaction was subdued but I guess it shows that he has come to realize his feelings for Hermione are true, especially if his linked Thralls can tell.

Voldemort's plan -- WTF? So we now know why Nagini was near the school. But Susan is a plant? Or is this a double bluff? I mean Snape refers to Voldemort's Spy and to the girl that entered Harry's band in the same sentence, but is he talking about the same person? And even if he is, could he be misleading Voldemort into believing Susan is a true believer rather than a kidnapped victim who reluctantly took the Dark Mark? This little interchange really has me intrigued.

Of course the biggest, and unfortunately, unfinished and most teased part was the advancement of Hermione and Harry's physical relationship. It may be because I like the Hermione character, or because you've been hinting at this step since almost the onset of the story, but I have been anticipating this next step for quite awhile. And you leave it hanging. But you really leave it with a lot of set-up that has so much potential: Harry has Dobby do the set-up. But whatever his plans are, he has completely shocked his friend / house-elf. And this is the former Malfoy house-elf. Think about what he would have seen, and try and imagine what would shock him. Of course it may simply be that Harry is finally moving forward with Hermione that has surprised the little elf, but you never know.

The other big potential shocker for the up-coming (and hopefully soon) scene was given during Harry's conversation with Cissa. Cissa is given orders (and a small reward -- a nice touch, there with Harry being a bit spontaneous) to keep Pansy, Bella, Cho and herself busy. She asks about Tonks. And here's the kicker: Harry needs her for his plan with Hermione. I know that both Harry and Hermione are close to Tonks, and that she has been closely involved with each stage of their relationship, but this really caught me off-guard. I have a few ideas how Harry can use Tonks's aid, but I think I want to be surprised rather than guess.

All in all, for a short installment, you managed to get quite a bit done.

Chris
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From ANON - Sean on October 08, 2005
Can't wait to read more, please try to update this story as soon as you're able to. By the way, why wasn't the story updated on Seaptember 29th?
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From ANON - Prince Charon on October 07, 2005
You're very good at this.

Very good, hot, interesting part. Its interesting to envy Harry, while feeling sdorry for him. The Dursleys really did a number on him, no?

I hope Hermione and the others can help him heal.

More soon, please.
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From ANON - James on October 06, 2005
Intresting chapter. I must say that I like all of the small punishments that Harry has given his slaves, such as walking around naked. Please keep up the good work.
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From ANON - Anon on October 01, 2005
I was so excited for this weeks update... What happened?
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From ANON - yeknottemaster on September 30, 2005
A very impressive work - imaginative and sexy. Like the depictions of the inner conflicts as well.

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From ANON - Sean on September 25, 2005
Can't wait to read more, please post the next chapter as soon as you are able to
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From sasqch on September 23, 2005
Chapter 38 -- This chapter had two distinct salient points

First off, the majority of the chapter dealt with the formerly unknown marked Death Eater in the school. I like the fact that you did not fall into the rut of using another Slytherin character. The dynamics of the dorm would have become a bit too predictable. I found the reasoning for how Susan ended up being the girl in question to be quite an unexpect turn. She was probably the one student I had completely disregarded, just because of the position her aunt holds. So, to have her be forced to take the mark, not only against her will, but physically abducted as well, made her a truly surprise choice.

I also like that Susan chose to be bonded with Neville. It was subtle, but the fact that Harry refused to do it himself pretty much implies that he is currently at his own limits. I do not see him being able to take on any new Thralls any time in the near future. With Susan becoming Neville's Thrall, there will be a balance within the dorm once again. Both sets of Harry's retainers are on an equal standing in status, with each having a Thrall of their own. The fact that Susan has loved Neville for years appears to be quite different from Millie's lustful obsession over Ron. And with Neville's strong moral fiber, her slave status will be very different from Millicent's, I would imagine. I liked how everybody (not just Neville) made sure to check with Ginny to verify whether or not Susan would be allowed to become Neville's Thrall. That, along with Ginny's very aggressive style (as shown by her extreme involvement in preparing Susan), will allow this set of characters to be a completely new territory for the story to explore. I would not expect to see Susan becoming another pain-fetishist; that would cheapen the story too much by making her a clone of the rest of the cast. And with Ginny being shown as being corrupted by her possession in her first year, her baser needs can be better met by Neville and Susan than by Neville alone, if only because of Neville's gentle nature. I am curious to see how you handle this new group's potential.

The other major point of the chapter was the book-end scenes of Hermione and Harry. I found Hermione's approaching Harry about advancing their relationship to be very in-character. Harry's fear of her rejection showed the scarred (and scared) boy who was raised in the cupboard. And his desire to wait to allow Hermione to change her mind reinforces this lack of self-worth. He would (and should) have trouble accepting love from an equal. His very strong moral backbone would also demand that he consult with Hermione's parents before taking that next step. He had pledged that he would not do anything to Hermione in the earlier chapters, so even though Hermione's father later gave his tacit approval for Harry to begin a physical relationship with Hermione, Harry would feel the need to ask for and receive her parents' blessing.

When reviewing the story I was struck by an odd thought: I'm surprised that Harry has been delaying making Hermione the Mistress in fact rather than in spirit only. As was explained by Cissa, the First Wife spell would make Hermione similar to Harry in that Hermione would be able to draw on the Thralls and that the Thralls would be able to better respond to their Mistress' needs, similar to how they can sense their Master's needs. The reason Harry would be better off with Hermione in an official capacity is Bella and Cho. Both of these Thralls want and need to be physically punished. It is their fondest wish. Yet, Harry has trouble doling out this punishment; he does not want to inflict pain onto people he cares for. Yet, as shown by the one scene where Cho was marked by a beating, and Harry asked Hermione why, Hermione's response was that it relaxed her. Ergo, Hermione would be able to take over the giving of the physical "rewards" to these two Thralls for Harry. And as she would be their "actual" Mistress, they should be receiving the same amount of satisfaction as if Harry was giving the pain. And Hermione would be relieving excess stress, as she finds the action to be restful.

As for the future chapters, well the next chapter is hopefully focused on Harry and his talk with the Grangers. And if all goes well, He and Hermione should be able to begin to advance the physical side of their relationship. I am still extremely curious as to what the spells were that Harry imbued on the ring he gave her. And why did he feel so compelled to create a special Portkey for Hermione? Was it merely a safeguard, or does he have some sort of premonition?

We can also probably expect to see Ginny begin to direct the exploration of Neville and their new Thrall's limits. I really expect to see Neville to allow Ginny to be the driving force in their grouping, if only to help her purge her inner demons.

And is Voldemort expecting a public demonstration soon? If so, how will Harry continue to bluff that he is becoming "dark"? He would need to make each successive act more outlandish than the last. But, I would imagine we should have a small interlude before the next demonstration

Chris
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From ANON - Prince Charon on September 23, 2005
Thank you for the update.

I wasn't expecting Susan, but it does fit.

Very, very interesting, and hot.

More soon, please.
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From ANON - Spike of Doom on September 17, 2005
The story remains interesting even after so many chapters... I was wondering when youd you would use that speel on Bella and Cissa... :)
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From sasqch on September 17, 2005
Chapter 37 -- A fairly light chapter this time around, but I had a number of problems with it.

The Halloween costume ball allowed for some interesting moments. I found the concept of Cissa using the opportunity of the costumes to reinforce the difference of Harry and his friends (and Thralls) from the rest of the school to be quite interesting. We have Ron as a Knight with his two women dressed as Knight
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From on September 16, 2005
The one with the Mark is Greengrass, right?
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