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From ANON - Catpower on November 19, 2005
The runic buns - what a fabulous idea, Betz. I just have to bake them. If that doesn't create a talking point I don't know what else will. You don't happen to have a recipe, do you? (silly question I know but you've included recipes and research before so maybe it's worth asking).

Still loving the story - almost shag-free though it is. It shows you are a good writer when you don't have to keep your readers interested with constant porn.

(NB: to other writers I'm enjoying - don't give up the porn! It's all good stuff)
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From ANON - Anon on November 17, 2005
When's the rest coming? I love it, please tell me theres more!
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From ANON - Sorceress Black on November 14, 2005
Ok I read the latest chapter a few days ago but I am just now doing my review, I had to pull a read and run as I like to call it lol.
Anyhow I really liked this chapter. I liked the little visit into everyones lives again, you really know how to take our
attention of our lovers and thier budding romance well a little anyway lol. I just absolutely LOVED seeing Severus' pre-
occupation and his lovesick little haze. I was totally picturing the old cliche of some young girl in love wandering about,
plucking petals from a daisy saying "he loves me, he loves me not". And it was sweet and hilarious to see Severus in that sort of
state. Oh and hermione and her dress damn you go girl lol, I just wish Severus could have seen it hehe since Ron did not
seem to appreciate it properly, what a bafoon. To worried about everyone else to see how lovely his wife is. And on top of
it all he has the balls to kick her out AHHH I so would have blasted that door to pieces and kicked his unappreciative arse out
instead LOL. ok ok I shall settle down now ;) just want to say that I can't wait for the next chapter as usual but even more now
because the spa day is coming up. Wonderful writing as usual I praise her majesty on the superb job she hath done. lol yes its bedtime for sure lol. Update soon!!!!!!!
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From ANON - Miki on November 11, 2005
I have been unable to read or review until now. I just love that the sexual tension is so drawn out. It's just like with a Jane Austen book on film...a simple kiss is translated to something so unbearably sensual, just because of all the emotion behind it. I am just dying for that first kiss.

I absolutely loved the "elephant" chapter. I hadn't read the title of that chapter and was thinking to myself "There's no pink elephant in here" She knew he knew she knew...omigod, it was just too funny! Oh, her finally decking Ron was brilliant too. When will she realize the jerk is cheating on her? When, when, when? I want some nasty hexing and...well, I'll leave you to flesh out that scene.

I can't believe Ron has the nerve to kick her out of the bed! Jackass, insensitive clod! I would love for him to overhear her masterbating...crying, "Severus" Yes, that would be very nice indeed. Just thinking about it puts a smile on my face. Or better yet, to find her in a pub with someone cute and famous chatting up to her.

I've fallen for your version of Snape...sigh, sigh, sigh

I do wish Ginny would leave Harry before running off with Draco. That way Harry won't blame Draco.

I have to mention that this story is imbued with such detail that I am awed by either the amount of research you have done, or the amount of knowledge you have. (Hmmmm...a bit of Hermione in you, is there? :)

Anyway, this story is simmering wonderfully and I am most definitely enjoying the aroma.

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From ANON - Jessie Deal on November 10, 2005
You sure weren't kidding when you said Hermione must suffer some more. And poor Severus looses his head as well. There's nothing quite as familiar as the thinking of someone else and wondering if he does the same. Very well done, as always
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From Lunajen on November 10, 2005
Betz, i have a new username and such...JENN.

Loved the last chapter, reread it. Still great.
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From ANON - TNgirl on November 10, 2005
Oh, sorry, I forgot to ask... is Lavender having an affair with Kingsley for sure? I was thinking she was having one with Ron. For some reason Ron seems like the more likely suspect. I just can't picture her with Kingsley. The evidence also fits into the Ron/Hermione relationship, not just Kingsley going back to his wife. Then again I could just be crazy! :) Please let me know!
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From ANON - TNgirl on November 10, 2005
Well, here it is. My opinon... Ron is a prick and needs to be punched, again! I appreciate Hermione is trying to save her relationship, but speaking from experience... it's time to give it up before she makes herself sick like I did!! I hope Severus gets to see her in the black dress. He'll be all over her!! Maybe she could take the dress with her to work or somewhere and change into it for the evening with Severus and then change back to go home, if she goes ;) She'll at least be appreciated for it!! I really hope she walks out on her anniversiary dinner with Ron. I can only imagine him being an ass and making her miserable. And then she should go straight to Severus and fall in bed!! I can't wait to see what happens at the spa!! I evidently missed two chapters because I was reading this only on Ashwinder. I don't know it you didn't update there or I'm just stupid and missed it (which is entirely possible), but I'm so glad to see the update!! I've missed reading this wonderful story! I was glad to see in your response to someone else that you are going to continue this story, as in not just end it when they get together! I can't wait to see where all you go! Anyway, I hope to see another update soon!!
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From ANON - Cassandra on November 09, 2005
Loved the new chapter, can't wait to read more. I'm on the edge of my seat.

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From ANON - Jenn on November 09, 2005
You are killing me, you know this right? I mean it; a slow and torturous death only being prolonged by the thought of
some snoging!!! But you know that this torture only fuels the desire for more, you tease! I can't wait for the day that she leaves that
lump of a man!!!! UUHHHGGGGGGHHHHH!!! Ron you bastard; I just want to shove his quidditch cup in his mouh half the time(and I
am not talking about the trophy) I do love this chapter though! Poor Lavendar, Kingsley heading back to his wife. I do hope that you find someone else that Lavendar can give her attentions to? Blaise? Is that how you spell it? I can't remember. Maybe she can
get Serverus to create a "If I can have you then it ain't gonna work" poition! Just for those "I want my cake and eat it too" kind of wizards. Just kidding. Anyway, how much longer till the Anniversary night, so I can watch Hermione go off on Ron even more so than she did tonight. I do think that they will have a pretty good row on that evening and Hrmione will head straight for Severus from the dinner. Ok, wishfull think ing, but if Ron is not going to come home on some nights than she should stay out as well. As long as no one named Moody sees her. You do have a few obstacles in their way don't you? ;) I can't wait!!!!

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From ANON - Laura on November 09, 2005
Yay, an update! I love this story, it's one of the best fics I've read and I've read a lot. This one just wouldn't leave my mind and I so hope you continue updating. The tension is delicious! I know I wou;d've left Ron by now, I sure as hell wouldn't be sleeping on the couch, I'd be in Severus' bed! Ah, but she's got to keep to her plan, I guess.
Looking forward to more....
L
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From ANON - Aragon on November 09, 2005
I adore your story and have reviewed on earlier chapters on several different sites where you publish. I still follow enthuasistically although I don't particularly agree with Severus' attitude since he started to care for Hermione in relation with his escape-plans: it's sloppy, risky, hesitatingly and doesn't seem very much like him imo - as it's his very freedom and basic independence that's on stake. With no second chance if he messes up. I'd find it much more believable if he'd pull through, even perhaps at Hermione's expense somewhat in the repercussions if necessary, gain his life again and THEN go after her and pulling all the stops in the process. It sometimes seems to me as if he's more or less consciously sabotaging his, Draco's and Ginny's escape. And that's something I find difficult to believe: someone as fiercely independent, proud and driven as him (both in canon and in your earlier characterization) has to have no greater wish than gain his freedom and dignity back after enduring this for several years - even truly in love I can't see him compromising on this! Of course you can always use the "tru wuv changes everything!"-expanation but I never bought it on such a basic level of personality. I'm really worried for him on that account ^_^

The recent thing I find a bit puzzling is Severus' absolute unwillingness and inability to bed his own clients - even to the point of rising suspicions (Lavender, his other clients who might talk, Moody, the LME in general with the now longer hinted threat of closer observation looming). Why?
As it's an authorial decision from you and not something randomly happening: is it so he remains "pure" now that he realized his love for Hermione? I see no logical reason against and lots of reasons for continuing as usual so to avoid problems. He also has no real moral conflict as they are not together, not even remotely: hell, with the "only after anniversary with my husband I'll decide"-delay she could even have a second try with Ron (we know from reading Hermione's POW it's unlikely but he knows nothing of this)! What'd he'd be doing then? Remain the celibate gigolo until possible escape months away? So even from a purely emotional point I don't find it that huge a problem.
The last chapters I only skimmed the "Severus alone with his other clients"-parts because I honestly wasn't up for another round of "I love her, can't have sex or even snog her, so am really frustrated after years of getting laid but I'm sooo exclusively keyed up on Hermione I can't get it up even with willing, attractive women who come to me explicitly for a round of riskfree, emotionally uncomplicated sex and don't even demand lies or pretenses of closeness I'm not willing to give. After having years of regular intercourse several times a week I'm suddenly quasi-impotent. And that's good as I ONLY love Hermione and so couldn't possibly physically desire another person."
I find that personally pretty unrealistic; both from a general male point (and isn't that a tempting concept: once in love all other women loose their sexual attraction utterly?! Oh yes, very tempting. But realistic?) and from Severus in his position: he doesn't betray her (and that's apparently not even the main problem as you write it - because it's not guilt or ethics that kill his libido for anything not-Hermione but simply the fact that it's NOT Hermione in his bed!), it's been his job for years so he has ample experience to perform at set times not of his choosing with partners he wouldn't pick for himself, it's his job and she knows it too, it could raise suspicions at a very delicate time.... I could understand if you'd go along the lines of "I really want only Hermione right now! It would be such much more fulfilling. But it's impossible. *sigh* Oh well, let's get it over with and to make sure - where's the potency potion? Time to perform and perhaps it helps to take the edge off." And frankly it sounds much more like the wishful thinking of a female teenager in the throes of puberty and the drama of growing up and first love, romance and hysterics than of an adult experienced male who's also quite pragmatic.
I could see him angst a bit about the demands of his job and his cover in contrast with his relationship with Hermione. I would have found it very interesting if he'd for instance enjoyed the hot sex as he had perhaps pre-Mrs. Granger (succumbed to his lesser brain and the routine release so to speak) but afterwards felt guilty or faintly disloyal about.... but this?

One of the things I always loved best about your epic was (and is!) the adult feel of it. The emotions, the relationships with all the glorious points as well as the failings and trappings, the everyday and professional life of the main characters, the regrets and evaluation of their lives so far: it so obviously shows living experience beyond high-school. It's perhaps this high degree of wonderful "matureness" I've gotten used to in your tale that makes the Severus above and the sentiments so weird to me. They don't quite fit imo.

Please don't take this a flame or a harsh critic! I'd feel like a heel if you did. There are as I've stated earlier lots of things I find wonderful about your tale and that you still manage to write such high quality with regular updates and long chapters after this many words is a marvel in itself and not often seen in fandom. That I needed to write such a lengthy comment has more to do with my difficulty to illustrate my thoughts, problems and questions in a way others can understand too and the fact that the subject matter of course is highly subjective. I'm aware that my minor "problems" with the above plot have a lot to do with taste and as such there is no right or wrong. So please don't see this a disapproval of your marvelous tale or your writing skills! In addition I'd never spend so much time and energy on an uninteresting or poorly plotted or characterized fic so you can take the review in itself as a compliment too ^_~
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From ANON - Wicked Witch on November 09, 2005
You're still killing me. *sigh*. i am slowly bleeding to death over here. Maybe Vampire should take over the RPG's, so you can write more on this? LMAO! NAH! You're too good. Well, I guess I will wait with baited breath for the next installment. Please say the next chapter fast forwards 11 days. PLEASE? LOL! I'll see you around the Hideaway. HUGS!
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From ANON - Summer Paige on November 08, 2005
I'm in such suspense!!!!!!! ahhhh. all i do is check this fic all the time, seeing if you've updated. :D
you're the greatest, dear.

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From ANON - azulkan2 on November 08, 2005
Glad to see the update. More soon please.
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