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By : ElizabethStump

From ANON - Sorceress Black on October 01, 2005
HAHAHA OMG "I've got a lovey bunch of coconuts" HAHA that was utterly fanstastic I was seriously cracking up, hmmm some of that fairy brady sounds pretty damn good actually lol. So sorry I didnt update last time, my job"S" are driving me to madness and I am lucky I can even read a chapter here lol. Anyhow both of your latest installments were wonderful as usual. This inner struggle Hermione is having is so facinating and interesting to read, of course I want her to admit that she wants Snape but that just doesnt happen that fast and I love how you arent letting her rush into anything and having her process all the new developements and feelings. I am also very anxious (of course lol) to see the couciling session, I think this one is going to be the breaking point for her and Ron and being the drama queen that I am, I have to say that I am looking forward to the verbal fireworks. So I will say what everyone including myself says UPDATE SOON!! LOL but seriously please do I am always dying to read your wonderul writing, and I just cant get enough of my favorite fic. :) Til next time.
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From ANON - Cassandra on September 28, 2005
I wanted to tell you that I really debated on reading this story because it wasn't finished yet. But now that I have started it I am hooked and can't wait for your next update. Great story!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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From ANON - Jenn on September 24, 2005
Ooooohhhhh, yes the exquisite torture of that you leave us with. Such bliss. I do so love it. Maybe we should call you mistress? Poor Severus, left to self flaggelation, I do hope he uses some lotion so as not to chaffe. And Hermione, oh do hope she doesn't pounce on Ron at home, and then gets preggers. That would be just cruel. As you can tell, I am really worried someone is going to get caught in all this deceit and be stuck in a hellish life forever or die. Marriage and Pregnancy is scary enough without all the death involved if you can stand the voice of the guy you live with. I know how she feels, dated a guy just like Ron for five years; constanly putting me down, never being there, left me for anothr girl two weeks before the wedding, best fricking thing ever to happen, took all his clothes outside and ground them into the wet and muddy lawn, and messed up his chronically and alphabetized CD collection and put the wrong CD in the wrong case, took his Nintendo....and he took off after a fight and stayed with a "friend" ; his new girlfriend...Still Best thing to ever happen to me!!!!!!....RUN HERMIONE!!!!! RUN!!!!!

Now we know who Ron might be staying with...Rogina....interesting.

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From ANON - cocoachristy on September 23, 2005
LOVED the game of cat and mouse those two were play...But which was which? ;-) I would LOVE to see Hermione singing I've got a lovely bunch of coconuts on the bar. Tee Hee, get someone to draw that! Can't wait for MORE!
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From ANON - Jana on September 23, 2005
hah. I found it before getting the email about it. hehe

Still need more. But I'm okay for now. I can do things to pass the time, like raise my daughter or something...
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From ANON - Vampire_Exotica on September 23, 2005
I want to steal your brain! I need it! lol I wish I had your talent!!!!! What a fantastic chapter! I am holding my breath as I wait for the next Snape/Hermione meeting. Will I faint before then I wonder......*makes mental note to order resusatating equipment just in case* ......don't want to miss the next chapter! Wish I was trained in Legilimency....look into my eyes lol! Keep up the amazing work and if you ever feel like donating a few brain cells then let me know! lol Roger and Freddie need some company up there. :)
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From ANON - Catpower on September 23, 2005
Chapter 41 - "And they didn't shag happily ever after"
Aaagh! If you'd told me before I started this great story that there would be no SS/HG lemon by ch 41 I might never have started reading it. But it doesn't matter - there is plenty to enjoy here. I would never have imagined HG to be an exhibitionist when drunk. Goes to show you never can tell. Hope SS doesn't find out - I don't think it's his sort of thing, somehow. Is Hermione finally cracking under the strain?
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From ANON - Hikity on September 23, 2005
Thanks for posting it so quickly. It was a very nice chapter again - especially Sev's careful thinking and acting (he is learning, too, isnt he?) and, of course, the bathroom scene -BTW- perhaps I will see the Man behind our Severus very soon (just can't believe it until I see him with my own eyes...) but no, I won't drag him in a bathroom
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From ANON - Chrisi on September 23, 2005
GET ON WITH IT WOMAN!!!! You are killing me, literally killing me. I actually squeeled while sitting at me desk at work when I saw the new chapter and then I read the whole thing while holding my breath for most of it and they still don't get down to business! Please Please PLEASE get them together soon or I might not survive and then what would people think? But it is truly the most awsome story I have seen on here - Thanks for sharing it with all of us
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From ShilohDarke on September 23, 2005
I loved it. She tries so hard to convince herself that she can't possibly have feelings for him now, but it is still there. I love how you had Snape come in, sit and hold her even after she tried to keep her grief and pain from him. The Snape you have made him become is such a fantastic person! I like how these emotions they are going through confuse both of them. I look forward to the next chapter. Please update soon!
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From ANON - Pearle on September 23, 2005
First off, wonderful title for the chapter. I've always like the elephant reference. Great chapter, the constant back and forth between the two -she knows, he knows she knows, she knows he knows she knows - was very well done. As much as I would have liked to see Severus seduce Hermione, it would not have followed the pace and tone you've set up. I'm all for lemons, but I prefer them to fit the story and not just jump out at me randomly.

So next up, Hermione with a hang over and arguing with Ron (who I have always thought was an idiot, anyway)? Severus and Hermione meeting again or problems with Moody? If I were to take a guess, I would say we are still two or three chapters from the unmasking, and the same if not one more past that from a kiss or anything else. Great story, I'm definitely enjoying it. Can't wait for more.

Pearle
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From ANON - Jessie Deal on September 23, 2005
wow Betz. First of all, thanks for obliging so quickly. This was certainly better than what I waited for.
I completely agree with you, it couldn't have gone farer - but I was howling in frustration by your perfect descriptions again and again so mission could be considered as accomplished.
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From ANON - D on September 20, 2005
Tension build-up again! Except this one is worry rather than anticipation of more pleasant things. Ah well, you still have me on edge. :)

I am absolutely amazed at how thoroughly you've researched parts of your fic, down to latin and flowers and temperatures! Kudos, Betz, because I doubt I'd ever put so much research into a fanfic. But I really do appreciate your efforts -- it's very nice to know you value your writing and readers so much that you want your story to be as acurate as possible ^_^

As always, I look forward to the next chapter!
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From ANON - Hikity on September 20, 2005
Betz, a very nice chapter again. I so much enjoy your story that I imagine what happens next when I can't fell asleep immediately. (Therefore, I knew it was Lavender - of course I wondered that brilliant Hermione needed such a long time to think of the Moody-infused danger...). You know, I just love Sev, and hasn't he become a sexy man in your fic? I really hope we will have some nice juicy ( right word? :):):) story...sorry for my mistakes - unfortunately I am not a native speaker.
My imaginations of the future: A Lavender-Snape branch in USA (Kentucky, hihi, joking) where they work and brew. Hermione pays flight tickets (rember her credit card (:)) and send them via muggle transport (i.e. plane) abroad. Hermione has a well-paid job in the Lavender company and travels forth and back to her LOVER. Besides, she is working on the defence of Draco and Sev....I am really looking forward to your next chapter!
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From ANON - Snapemistress on September 20, 2005
oh yeah, btw, keep it up, i'm ready for the next chapter!
Much Love!
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