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From ANON - Hyperbole on July 22, 2003
Page 14: Chapter 13.
Poor Draco, the one misfortune of his bloodline. *Grins*
Really, Pansy did it to herself, shes a vain bitch who is blind to the truth of her relationship with Draco (thinking back to the bit about Draco liking her for her imperfections & going off her when she erased them).
Okay, again a show of how Draco can be a total obnoxious prat with that bit about sitting back & enjoying the show when Pansy tore through his flings.
So Pansy is part Siren?
Well Harry doesn't know much because he was muggle-raised not to mention he was raised by the most anti-wizard muggles under the sun!
Well that bit about not getting tired of insulting people is just more proof of how obnoxious Draco is (I won't say it's a trait of all Slyths in small hopes not are sre such assholes but said hopes are quite small).
So Harry can accept that a minor problem like extra eyes is not as important as other more serious injuries & Draco uses that to bring up the whole "Boy Who Lived" crap? Either he's blind to the fact that Harry hates it or he's being obnoxious as usual!
So Harry loses all sanity because he's horny. Typical male!
Harry *gave* it to him? Geez! Draco has such a biased view on events! HE summoned Harry's wand & used it without permission & then petrified Harry!
Remy dear, you are waaay too hopeful! Draco ISN'T changing his ways! He's still an obnoxious prat!
con connection does Grindlewald have to the bond between Harry & Draco?
Ohhhh! I see! Well I have to say Draco's nastiness towards Harry in the past - not mention the blow of Siri's death - wouldn't help prevent that.
The problem is how much of that anti-muggleborn sentiment is the cause of Grindlewald? How much of it caused Voldemort? If Harry were to become the next Dark Lord what's the bet he would go the other way & strike against purebloods?
The problem with o'so's warnings is when he tries to warn his rivals to stay away from danger his viciousness twists it so said rivals refuse to accept his warning thinking just him being insulting. I think that is exactly what happened on the train at the end of 4th year, he warned them but he did it in a way that it totally offended their beliefs & they saw it as nothing but an insult & reacted. I sit any wonder they hate him? He (in their view) insults them, they react, he systematicly destroys all of them.
Ahh, I'm starting to see the roots of the Shreiking Shack incident. Circumstanses drove Remus & Severus apart, Remus didn't want to lose his closest friends in Hogwarts, somewhere along the line maybe Siri realised what Remus felt about Sev, got jealous & tried to take out the rival for Remus' affection therefore set in motion the near death incident in the Shack irredeemably royiroying any posibility that Remus could at least establish a friendship (if not a romantic relationship) with Sev. Another irreconcilable mess that has been caused by the generations older than them & has been handed down to the next. If there's one thing about this story it's how preceeding generations can cause problems for their decendants & how the divide between Gryffindor & Slytherin (and by proxy the whole pureblood issue) ruins people's lives.
*Roles eyes* Who says they can get Draco one their side? Draco may get Harry on his (but somehow I just can't see that) or they could become the core of a third side that is loyal to neither Voldy or Dumbledore.
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From ANON - Hyperbole on July 22, 2003
Page 13: Chapter 12
Sev has a point, Draco did wrong stealing Harry's wand & his reason for saving Ginny is rather -cen-centred.
Yes, Draco wasn't being very careful, he KNOWS there's an anti-Slyth prejudice but he uses forbidden spells & is uncaring of anyone outside Slytherin *shakes head* a bit silly!
*Sighs over Draco's reaction about healing muggleborns* I'm not even going to say it.
Oh so Lucius is wiseugh ugh to see the use of a book for muggleborns but Draco can't? Just shows Lucius has wisdom Draco doesn't!
Okay, something that isn't critical commentary about racism & udicudice, 'shotty'? I think the word you wanted was 'shoddy'. another reviewer said you needed a beta, you really do. I'd offer but I work best if it is the first time I've read something, second readings I tend to skim & I'd miss details.
*Shakes head at the Twins*
*Snerk* No kid likes the image of their parents having sex! Draco included!
Yeesh! Horny guy Lucius is isn't he?
Lucius the masiochist! *giggle*
And I bet Draco is sitting back cringing at all this!
So somehow Lucius is going to use the bond between Harry & Draco to get rid of Old Moldy? Hmm...

Well that was a fun chapter!
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From ANON - Hyperbole on July 22, 2003
Page 12: Chapter 11.
Hmm, you would think being 150 would bring some wisdom wouldn't it? He still has adge dge against Slytherin? Like you said, it's just that that makes them all the darker.
Ahh well there is a reason why he has a grudge!
It's a self-replicating cycle, the so-called righteous - Gryffs - consider Syths evil, to survive Slyths become evil, Slyths viciously attack the Gryffs causing the Gryffs to hate them & when Gryffs get into power they try to beat down the one they see as evil which are the Slyths!
To put it simply, yes, the Gryffs treat the Slyths unfairly but the Slyths are just as much to blame for living up to the bad e eve everyone sees them by & being cruel obnoxious prats.
The question is, what did Severus do to the Marauders to make them hate him? There are some Slyths who don't get noticed because they are not the vocal ones therefore what did Sev do to get noticed by the Marauders? If he didn't do anng tng then someone else may have been their prime target. Even in OotP (which I aknowledge wasn't out when this chapter was written) it implied that James & Sirius' cruelty to Snape was not one sided. The coversation Harry had later with Sirius & Remus implied that Snape served up his fair share of retaliation.
The big question is who fired the first shot?
In Harry & Draco's case it was Draco in the wrong because of his pureblood bigotry, did Snape make some insult thatght ght the Marauder's anger? Or was is the Marauders being bullies? (Yes, I can accept they could be bullies)
Ah, here's the truth, again the Slyths were being heartless, bigoted, obnoxious & cruel.
So even Gryffindors can subscribe to the pureblood bigotry.
You have to respect that James did not want his child's life to be dictated, the whole plan for James' marraige & the prospective marraige of his child was completely unfeeling of how James may feel about it. No wonder he rebelled.
And I bet the reason why James was so offended by who his wouldbe daughter would marry was because the wouldbe father of her wouldbe husband was someone who was one of the Slytherins who was viciously cruel to James. Again Slytherin cruelty works against them.
So the purebloods didn't care about James' feelings so it was left to Albus to grant James his wish.
Can anyone see how all this pureblood pride has so ruined Wizarding society? Slyths are pureblood so they are cruel to non-purebloods. Gryffs are kind to non-purebloods so the Slyths despise them & are cruel to them. Society sees this cruelty & sees it as proof of the old 'Slyth = Evil' prejudice. Slyths are forced to BE evil because of this prejudice. Both sides become entrenched in their respective stancesthe the pureblood issue & the whole mess becomes unstoppably self-replicating.
So two boys who hate each other are bound to each other. Can anyone say "Eep"?

I have never believed Gryffindor was all-perfect. I have read plenty of bigoted!Gryffindor fics (I jhavehave a problem here with this fic because Draco appears so irredeemably cruel & obnoxious. As you may be able to see with my rants I do not say that Gryffindor is totally innocent, I just say that the pattern that demonized Slytherin is partly their fault too.)
You know there is nothingcanocanon to say Harry is decendant of Godric.
Godric himself suported muggleborns & somehow I doubt that the Gryffindor line is totally free of muggleborn blood. I mean Hermione is pretty powerful. somewhere in history other muggleborns would have appeared that were powerful & it would not harm a power conious family to allow them to marry into the line. In fact it would be wise for reasons of inbreg. Og. Oh you can say pureblood line breed with non-humans to prevent inbreeding but by this chapter alone even the Malfoy line has alot of incest & what's more I would hardly say the Malfoy family has much claim to the tag "humanity" anymore (not that r imr impressive demon bloodline is something to be sneezed at).
I'm not saying Gryffindors couldn't have just as much pureblood pride but marrying muggleborns is not neccesarily a bad thing for the family line.
Not that you'd ba able to convince bigoted pro-purebloods of that *shrugs*.
So Albus' family does not have a clean slate, the effect of the Slytherin cruelty still had it's impact.

I am staying with this fic because it is rather fun to write my critical examinations of it's content.
Please don't think I absolutely hate it just because I'm being critical, I acctually do like it, partly because of the mental exercise it's giving me!
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From ANON - Hyperbole on July 22, 2003
Draco always laughs at other's misfortunes doesn't he? Don't you get that that is obnoxious?
Typical Slyth to see what's in it for himself.
And I bet Draco's totally cruel & obnoxious to Ginny over that debt too!
And even when Ginny is acctually trying to help him Draco has to be an obnoxious prat!
Draco really does nothing to endear himself. I've read plenty of fics that are pro-Slyth that don't make him an utter asshole!
Well at least Draco didn't do it deliberately, not that anyone would accept that, certainly not Harry.
So he steals Harry's wand? Harry has a right to be angry, Draco could have asked & when Harry asked why (which I don't doubt he wouldn't do) Draco could have calmly stated he goi going to heal himself but Nooooo! He HAS to do it the nasty way!
And then when Harry is acctually CONCERNED Draco has to be nasty again!
And of course, Sev arrives & imediately believes Harry did something to Draco & believes him to be a liar.
And of course Draco's nastiness comes out again with his total disregard to Harry.
Now THAT's OOC! Lupin would even segest Harry would torture someone? Even Draco? Does the man have no faith in Harry?
And what happened to Harry's wand? And why hasn't Harry even thought about that when he had it stolen from him by Draco? Sure, Draco was trying to heal himself but you would think after having his wand taken WITHOUT permission (no matter what, Draco did STEAL it!) by someone who is not only an obnoxious jerk but also second on Harry's list of people he hates (right after Voldy) Harry would worry about his wand!
Oh, so now he notices!
I think Dumbledore's worries are well founded, Draco has shown alot of suport for Voldy's ideals so him being the Child of the Equinox would be worrying!
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From ANON - Hyperbole on July 22, 2003
You say this fic is pro-Slytherin? Could you have possibly done that without being so racist? It's a factor of the books themselves that this anti-muggle thing is RACISM!
It's just another show of Draco's obnoxiousness that he would come out with something like that comment
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From ANON - Hyperbole on July 22, 2003
Page 9: Chapter 8.
Your point about the selfrightiousness of Gryffindors is quite right. I can't help but feel a bit sour though because Siri has always been a favourite of mine. Snape could not even stand to listen to any proof that Sirius was innocent of the crimes that sent him to Azkaban could he?
As for the first year incident: You have to accept that kids never see all sides of the issue, they are biased. Snape is NASTY to them, they naturally hate him because of THAT. Why was Snape nasty to Harry from the get-go? Because he was James' son. Did Snape ever stop to think that Harry never knew James? NO! He merely acted as though Harry were a carbon copy of James (WHICH HE IS NOT!) & treated him like dirt. Because of that Harry disliked him & was more inclined to think the worst of him. CHILDREN ARE NOT LOGICAL.
Draco was a stuck-up little snot when Harry met him, even before he knew who Harry was, THAT is what turned Harry against him & as a result against Slytherin. Who is to say that even with the information that Voldy was a Slyth Harry would have asked to be put elsewhere if he had a prospective friend in Draco waiting? Draco's racism turned Harry against him & Slytherin.
It was Draco's prejudice that turned Harry rioff off & when Harry stood against that prejudice when D off offered his friendship on the train Draco developed a grudge against Harry instead of trying to figure out why Harry turned him down. True, another case of children being illogical but all the less respectable traits were in Draco at the time.
Draco's grudge against Harry only got worse over the years & his actions against Harry were nasty & cruelrry rry has alot of justification for hating Draco.
Now I don't mind fics that point out the bigotry of Gryffindor but Harry himself has always had plenty of real reasons to hate Slytherins particularly Draco without it being baseless bigotry. In fact Draco & Severus have been guilty of their own bigotry too, just the sort of bigotry you have used in this fics to kill off Sirius.
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From ANON - Genita on July 21, 2003
Absolutely LOVE this fic!!!!!!!!! Eagerly awaiting the new chapter!!!!!! Really wanna knoat'at's going to happen between Harry and Draco....And how Harry overcomes the challenges he faces in Slytherin. Don't ask me why,but I have a gut feeling that Harry's and o'so's powers and skills are supposed to complement each other, and be used together to defeat Voldemort...at least that's what I think. I can't help but wonder if there is a prophecy involved??? (But on the other hand, I'd not be too shocked if I were utterly wrong,though!)
Hope to see the new chapter soon!
Genita
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From ANON - rosa on July 21, 2003
I love your story and cann't wait to read what happens next. Hope you update soon.
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From ANON - Hyperbole on July 21, 2003
I made an error in my last review, it was for chapter 4 but my mistake was because of the discrepancy between the the chapter numbers caused by chapter one being in two parts.

Page 6, chapter 5:
Well you manage to really show the anti slytherin bias, particularly on Dumbledore's part. The old man probably always has a reason.
So who did set the Fire Pixies loose? Hmm...

I'm probably going to have to quit reading for the evening since it's bed time & I have classes tomorrow & if I don't go to bed Mum will harrass me to no end. *Sigh*
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From ANON - Hyperbole on July 21, 2003
Chapter 5:
Heaven only knows how you wouringring them together after that. I would be inclined to think that after everything Draco has done to Harry's friends plus Sirius' murder there would NO way Harry could ever like him. At all.

I carry on in the hopes you have a believable resolution to this.
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From ANON - Hyperbole on July 21, 2003
In the aftermath of OotP a fic like this where Sirius has been brutally murdered does not sit well with me, especially since he is a great favourite of mine. I will try to carry on with it though since I have only read the first chapter of it so far.
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From ANON - Jamie on July 21, 2003
Wow.... i'm speachless... i hope you read these cuz i'm going to tell you if people don't like this story then well they can just go to hell.... cuz this has a great plot and is well written and I can't wait for the next chapter.... Keep going. post soon and i'll be happy. Jamie :)
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From ANON - ergonykos on July 20, 2003
Sorry. wrwordword. I'm not native to English. Not overbearing, overblown. The relations in the story are way too predictable. (Yawn).
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From ANON - ergonykos on July 20, 2003
If Harry weren't so pathetic, I might have thought the story interesting. As is (shrug), what is the point of a conflict between a weakling and an overbearing bafoon?
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From ANON - Ralna on July 20, 2003
HI!

I love your story. It's one of the best stories I've ever read. It's amazing, your ideas, style, everything. Just gorgeous. Ive got a lack of words to describe the way I feel about your stroy. I'm really sorry for that and I can only repeat: I love this story!

Ralna
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