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By : Sminty

From ANON - jetby on May 06, 2003
Wow... I read all 18 chapters in one go last night. I'm so so pleased that I found this story. I feel like I've read almost every Harry/Draco fic out there (well maybe not all, but hundreds anyway), and there are quite a few. There are a few notable ones, but oh, this one just floored me. The first chapter... omg.. I'm in love*lust*love with your Draco. He's one of the closest to in character (well how I think he would be by that age at any rate) that I've seen in a fic thus far. Please, please, I beg you to continue with this story. It's so good, dear. I'll be checking back every so often to see!
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From ANON - Loki on May 06, 2003
More chapters! We're craving more! One is never enough. Please...don't abandon this fic. It's far too magnificent for that.
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From ANON - TheBloodDoll on May 06, 2003
Very happy to see a new chapter. The interaction between Lucius and Voldemort was fascinating, esp. Voldemort's grudging respect even though Luci has tried to kill him several times and I loved his obesession with Luci's demon hair. Plus after reading so many stories where Lucius is the ultimate unemotional Ice King, it's delightful to see him completely lose his temper. I mean, Draco had to get it from somewhere, right? ;) I just love the little details you put into the characters that give them such a rich history to draw from. I'm so sorry to hear about your computer crash. A storm recently took out my modem, I was so very grateful it didn't take out anything else, since I'm the worst about backing things up.
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From ANON - Christina on May 06, 2003
You are a god of fanfiction. I was so pissed when they toou oou off ff.net, glad I found this site.
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From ANON - Shuo Ri on May 06, 2003
Ever try 'Claritin'? My allergy problem was almost gone with it^_^(Before, I had runny nose, watery eyes and sneeze a thousand time just barely set foot oft of my house!) A cheap price to pay for getting rid of those damn ALLERGY!
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From ANON - S. Wing on May 05, 2003
*pat, pat* poor girl......nice chapy....do continue, ne?
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From ANON - asaroth69 on May 05, 2003
finally you've updated!!! yeah!...woo hooo! leaps in joy.
hu hu, so there seems to be a GW fan lurking in the background...^.^ love the reference!
I like the way lucius' persona is being depicted, he is much more dynamic than in most fic've 've read.
please update sooooooon!!!!!

ps: you have my sympathy for your computer, even with disks starting over setting everything up again is so painful...
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From ANON - Lady Lance on May 05, 2003
I tried reading this story and while it had an interesting premise, there were four things that kept me from being able to complete it.

1. Over dependence on euphemisms. Harry's raven-haired. Snape's raven-haired. Zabini's raven-haired, Draco's cyrstal gray eyes. Ugh. While it might get tiresome to type "Harry/Snape/Draco" etc over and over again, it's less confusing, and more believable.

2. Logic gaps/continuity issues. In chapter five you mention how Draco has inhereted Lucius' love of revenge. Chapter one was spent going over Draco's revenge on the Gryffindors. Basically, you pointed something out that we already knew. I also think that Draco's power revenge wise is just a little excessive, but I won't dwell on that here. WIPs are nice because they offer the writer encouragment as they go, the problem is things like this crop up. I'd suggest going back and revising to try and fix tings a little.

3. Pro-Slytherin fic are fine; bashing the Gryffindor to all hell because of it isn't. It actually is possible to write a fic that puts the Slytherins in a good light without degrading the Gryffindors. It makes for a more believable and enjoyable fic.

4. Harry's characterization is just....yikes. There are things there that need to be fixed. Really gh, gh, this goes in hand with the Gryffindor bashing. Ease up on one and the other possible would correct itself.

For a first time fic, it really shows a lot of potential and I hope you keep writing. I think a good beta would go a long ways in helping you to polish up your fic to something more enjoyable ^_^
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From ANON - bad-ass-Cinderella on April 30, 2003
Hey, I've been desperately wanting to read that. Why did they take this off ff.net? Anyway, update this soon, PLLLLEEEEAAAAASSSSSSSEEEEEEEE, you will always have my undieing love.
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From ANON - Renee on April 29, 2003
Wow,

This is a really great story ad I cannot wait to see what happenes next. I just started readinrry rry Potter after watching both movies and reading year one - three. I just recieved year four and I just want to say you really bring these characters to life. Keep up the good work.
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From ANON - Jenny on April 28, 2003
I totally am in love with this story. Everyday I'll go to this website (which is in my favorites, under Harry Potter. ^.^) and hope you have updated, and when ever you do, I jump out of my seat and do the happy dance. Then I'll seat down to read the *wonderful* new addition.

What drew me into this fic was the fact that you shone light on a whole different side of the Gryffindors, Dumbledore, and Slytherin. With the Gryffindors you showed how they could be cruel, and shun there own /hero/ just because he was the only one Draco didn't go after. And I admit I was in the total mind set that Gryffindors were good, but because of this one well written and intriguing story; I'm looking at them a little differently. I mean, maybe they aren't all good and noble.

And I simple love how you kept Draco in character. Most Harry/Draco stories I've read had Draco *so* out of character; that I feel the need to cry. But you hit him right on. (And totally better than I ever could.) It's almost like you had birthed Draco from your imagination, and not J.K. Rowling. (And I'm not just saying that, I mean it.) But to that, you added all this information, Draco's 'skin', to this almost 'skeleton' Draco (Like the comparison?), so you understood were he was coming from. I think a lot of fanfic authors forget that ason son will not just do somng (ng (like hurt someone, or have sex with someone) without any thoughts, and that Harry and Draco had *detested* each other before.

So, I am in total aw of your writing skills and your characterization. And you deserve all the (good) reviews you get. I can't believe you have so many hits, yet only 40 something reviews. So, though I don't have an account here, I shall review, also!

I love your Blaise and Nevile. Blaise is so protective of his "Cherub", and I think anyone that dated Nevile would be. And your Nevile! *Gasp* I'm so use to authors putting Nevile down, or not even talking about him. Yet you brought him into the light, and I positively adore you for it!

Your Harry and Draco is wonderful. I give it mad props! I have to bring out again that I love your Draco. But, I also love your Harry. You show that Harry is rather fragile, but not a pushover. ^.^ Kind of how I imagine he would be if he lost his friends.

I have to admit I've never read a Lucius/Severus/Narcissa, but I find it rather...oh, I don't know; believable, maybe. I could see it happening. Poor Sev, loosing his daughter. (*sad*) And I love when Lucius and Sev are flirting, and Draco say something like, "Whoa, I'm still in the room."

So, I bow to your feet. And offer this: If I say I lurve (love) you, would it help your creative juices?

Jenny

P.S.: Props to your Beta, got to love the Betas!

P.P.S.: I recommend 'Magnetic Attraction' by frizzy. This link is http://www.fanfiction.net/read.php?storyid=1255810 . Enjoy! Oh, the summary is: "Draco Malfoy is a part veela who's just come into his Inheritence he's chosen Harry Potter as his mate. How will Harry cope under Draco's seduction, especially when he begins to fall in love with the softer side to the boy he used to hate?" This Draco is no *your* Draco, but it's cute. Very cute. Almost gag cute, but not quite.

(I know this was a bit long, but I hope you found it a good read, and helpful in anyway possible.)

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From ANON - Alura on April 26, 2003
I love you.

I had a sudden urge to re-read this fic again, but it had disappeared from FF.net, so naturally I went searching for it... and had orgasmic fits of pleasure because there were extra chapters and you've updated it! Thank yYouYou've made my day! I love the L/S/N marriage, I adore the Veelan traits, I worship the H/D-ness, I revel in the inner workings of the Slytherin mind, and I can't wait to read more. Update soon!
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From ANON - ScarletFever on April 25, 2003
BabyChan,

This is a fantastic story. I can't remember now how I found it (someone's suggestion?), but I love it! The way you write Draco and the reasoning behind everyone's behaviors is really good. It selikelike you have so many threads in your plot, but you've kept everything untangled and I don't think you've lost anything yet. Very, very good. Thanks for writing it.

Now, I'm anxiusly awaiting more! S
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From ANON - Shuo Ri on April 25, 2003
You updated!!!! I love this fic! Please update soon!

So is Harry going to become as *bad* as Draco now? I hope he do. and beat the crap out of those Gryffindorks! (I'm a Slytherin and I have to say I found Dumbledore and his *gryffindor-ruled* school to be very sickening.)

PS Please update soon!!!
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From ANON - Victoria Ma on April 25, 2003
PLZ update da story soon! i love it! keep up da good work! :)
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