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By : Sminty

From ANON - fushia on August 26, 2005
when you will update.i can't wait to see both of them bond^^!
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From slytherinsexaddict on August 21, 2005
yet another cliffhanger.... WHY MUST YOU TORTURE US!! but it was a really good chappie!

(I'll do your work for you.... WRITE YOU TALANTED CREATURE!!)

~*VIVA~LA~SMUT*~
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From ANON - Emmie on August 20, 2005
Hey. First let me say that though I really do like your story and regularly check back for updates, I do have a few "complaints".

In the books it's easy to get the impression all Slytherins are evil and, while I like that yours is a pro-slytherin fic, I think you've made the same mistake JKR has with the Gryffindors. They clearly have a tendency to be both stupid and reckless, not to mention judgemential, but in your story most of them come across as Evil. It would be bad enough if Ron and a *handful* of Gryffindors turned against Harry and the rest just chose not to take sides. It would still make him feel alone and betrayed, but still be more believable than having the whole House turn against him.
Same with Neville, (I really like your version of Neville btw, he's the best yet) I don't think everyone would suddenly hate him just for dating a snake, they might be colder and *some* might be rude/cruel but again, not the whole House.

Everyone doesn't have to be special. If you want to write a super!draco fic, fine, (better than a lot of the super!harry fics out there) and I think you've done a good job of this, but isn't it enough with the Malfoy's being Veela and having special names? Why couldn't Harry still be himself, he's pretty powerful in his own right after all.

I really wish you hadn't mixed in Voldemort in Harry's family-tree as I think Harry being the heir to 2 of the founders is highly unlikely and kinda cliche. Also I doubt Harry would have squeezed that doll so fast, maybe in a chapter or two if you intend him to get darker, but not right away.

Lastly I would advise you to get a beta to read through your chapters before you post since it's hard to catch all the errors by yourself. I know some readers are impatient but I think most of us could wait an extra day or two for a chapter if it meant getting the edited version.

I hope you don't mind me pointing these things out as I'm really trying to be helpful. /Emmie

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From ANON - HSaiyajin on August 20, 2005
forget the errors, just move on to the next chapter! this fic is awesome! it's the best pro slytherin i've read yet! you've done a superb job in making this work. please update as soon as u have the chance!!
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From ANON - Beachan18 on August 16, 2005
I always thought DUmbledore had a favoritism with the gryffindor house>< The other teachers are hypocrits of acusing snape of playing favorites with the slytherins when he is the only one who protects the slytherin house. grrr

i love your Draco. he's so cool and vengeful and just...cool. and smart. and i'm happy hes not like from other stories where something goes wrong and he begs his father to rectify it. oh no, this draco is smart and COOL. i love him.

Blaise/Neville w00t!! love it love it love THEM. stupid gryffindors and their prejudice.
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From ANON - Miaka Kennyuuki on August 15, 2005
I just wanted to know if I can be emailed updates of this wonderful, epic tale.
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From ANON - somekindofberry on August 11, 2005
OK ...this is FAB ... thank you for sticking with it and returning (however infrequently) to update. It's such a delight to read a long story without starting to detest the characters. I was amazed that almost hardly any of the school year has gone by, you've included so much into your tale. I especially liked the Potter/Malfoy fanclub whisperings and rumours - and Nott's eavesdropping! Funneh! Normally I would be glaring at the screen and crying "where's the smut?" but frankly this story hits the mark without it (though do please include some in the future!!) Congratulations on a well thought out plot, well-rounded characters and providing me with (1) a completely sleepless night and (2) several hours of enjoyment reading your story. I think it was Sarryn's recommendation that I followed to get here, and I cannot thank her enough for doing so - an excellent read!! I've added it to my own recs list, you deserve the accolade!
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From ANON - Slayerq on August 06, 2005
If you don't continue this story all the way to the end, it will be the cruelest thing imaginable. Harry and Draco on the cusp of finding out everything and actually evolving into a lifetime bonding and the chapter ends? Having said that, I fully understand work problems intruding on your personal life. Believe me when I say that I am in the exact same situation in my own life. So, take some time, try and work it out, find a new job, switch jobs or careers or whatever, but PLEASE continue this story when you've gotten to a better place!!! PLEASE!
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From ANON - AngelTalion on August 05, 2005
OMG!!! NO!!! This is like... BAD! He killed Dumbledore!?!?! *shakes head* He's RELATED DIRCETLY to Tom!??!?! EWWW! and HEY! 37 chapters later and STILL not Deraco/Harry snugglies?!?! *whimpers* PLEASEEEEE get mroe of this out! this was so awsome!!! I love this story I have been GLUED to it for like... two days now! I can't take it!! Its so cool!! I really really can't wait for more. I just LOVE Slytherin and Draco... and even Lucius and Snape! WOW!
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From ANON - Azzie on August 03, 2005
VERY cute. Despite it being a little messy and having odd grammar mistakes, this is a very entertainting fic. I can't wait to see how this all unfolds!
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From ANON - Anon on August 01, 2005
Let's get this straight now... Harry's grandma was a squib and his grandpa was Voldemort, who therefore killed his own daughter?
Does that mean Petunia is a squib? surely she wasn't raised by Voldemort. Did the mother have another husband with whom she had Petuna? Did they ever live with Voldie? How come he kills his own daughter? Did I not get something? And is Dumbledore really dead now? Draco said it may not work, because it's a muggle voodoo doll. What does that mean for the following plot? See all this question marks? I'm a little shocked at these revelations and not exactly sure about everything. And I allready read over it twice... So now I'm waiting for the next chapter and(hopefully) some answers. If you have time I'd also be happy about e mail. That Harry wasn't all that afraid of Draco was really cute, especially paired with his denail of the fact. The mention of Snape and Filch was cool. It sounded so absentmided, like Filch was an absolutely minor problem. I'm imaganing the conversation.
Snape: Draco, sweety. what happened to Filch?
Draco: Oh, him? I obliviated his mind. Can you be quite please, Harry's asleep.
Snape:*wispers* Sorry hon. Don't worry, I'll take care of the Filch thing.
Draco:Yeah, whatever.

One more question. This muse bond, that tried to activate - did it work? And is Harry's power what he allways had or is it because of his bond to Draco?..Or maybe the new stress level?

cheeries
~ la nue sorci
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From ANON - Bella on July 30, 2005
I don
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From ANON - Saske\'s Iris on July 29, 2005
wow, I mean wow, this story is amazing, firstly you are a good writer and i couldn't care less about errors cuz i horde updates like no other:) secondly cool plot i love the draco you have created and the fact that he is demon as well as angel. every character has a side story that is irrisitable and harry related to voldie (go figure) but i sure would like to know more about muses i mean is harry going ot have to go through something special like being someones muse or will he have special powers besides visible aura when he is pissed cuz so far the poor guy seems to be quite a mess... seems like he will be absolutly overshadowed by draco too, since so far Draco is more powerful, brave, intellegent and successful. So i guess i hope harry gets thrown something that will keep him at least a little even with draco. and won't the chase be fun when draco really decides he wants harry ooooohh i need an update!!!!!
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From ANON - trustingfriendship on July 27, 2005
This is awesome; I actually recently entered this fandom, and it's works like this that make me wonder what took me so long; anyway, I initially found this fic in an archive and went looking for it elsewhere to see if there were more updates; I'm so happy to have found if here, and just wanted you to know how much it's caught my interest; look forward to more:-)
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From ANON - Sminty on July 22, 2005
Draco being creeped out by Harry pulling out his hair, does that have something to do with his Shin heritage? I remember reading about Lucius and Lucifer being very tempermental about their hair. I love this fic. The relationship is progressing nicely. More realistic. I'm not sure if I want some kind of magical shift in their personality so they can get their groove on or continue to watch them growing into their affections for each other. Either way, I can't wait to see how they are going to get out of this mess. I find it ironic that Harry was chastiing Draco for the Voodoo doll then did excatly what he feared. Good for Dumbledore. I hope he suffered. Can't wait for the next chapter!!!!
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