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By : Myk

From ANON - Verdenia on October 12, 2003
ch 3 review:
once again, good story, some of the spelling errors were a bit harsh though, mostly homophones (sound-alikes). Owls soar, sores are those painful things on skin. :P and then, "I settle on my coach with my brandy". Obviously, 'couch' is the word you wanted. Do you have a beta? It is really important, it is difficult for people to edit their own writing since your brain knows what the word is supposed to be. Write me if you need help.
ch 4 :
well, I'm glad you had him invite Sirius to stay; the dragon theme seemed like way too much of a Draco foreshadowing. The letter to Dumbledore also reflects what seems to be an awful lot of transformation in a relatively short period of time. Of course, we 'know' from his communication with Snape and Draco that he is probably just bluffing Dumbledore, and not really planning to go to another school, but the line "Reply with three days or your out of luck and it's good-bye Hogwarts hello another wizarding school" seemed a bit less than totally believeable. Still though, fun story and an interesting read...always fun to watch Harry go shopping... "Surreal Drive" was cute too.
ch 5: I liked it. Seemed a bit more coherent, and less in possesion of far-fetched stuff that I would need suspend my disbelief for.
6: interesting stuff, and I like that you are working on showing people in ways that are different than usual, especially Vincent and Greg :P
7: should be, "Bouts of Insanity" ...and Harry never asked any of his questions from his Transfig. homework...but then, you did say you didn't enjoy writing dialogue.
8: oh, okay, you do have a beta. good chapter story-wise.
9: fascinating.
10: ""There was no since in them tripping over roots and injuring themselves."" should be sense... once again, story line is enjoyabl11:11:""Harry looked at the clock to see that it was already passed lunch."" should be "past lunch"
Pretty good dialogue there at the end--perhaps you have become more comfortable with it?
12: wow. ouchies.
13: ooh la la! dreamy dreams! :P The Blaise comments were funny!
14: ""some famous witch from the mid evil era"" Medieval is the name of the era.
""you should see your face, Ginny. It's beat red."" beet red...like the root vegetable
""because of what happened my first year. You can look passed that."" 'past that'
""Listening to the girls continuous rant, Hermione and Ginny"" should be, "girl's" (the rant belongs to Ginny)
""Guess I'll have to start making sure that my friends now I'm their friends"" 'know I'm their friends'
***I've also noticed that several times, you say, "use to [do something]", like, "Harry wasn't use to that" This should be, "used to"
15: "" You're friend," motioning towards Harry, Madame Pince continued"" Should be, "your friend" the word "you're" is a contraction of "you are" When you are writing and editing, keep this in mind, and if the sentence would work with, "you are", then you should use "you're". I did notice in another chapter that you used, "your" when it should have been "you're" ...I hope this clarification helps you!
*big grin* heh, heh. nah, not tacky, in fact...My boyfriend was a devil and I was an angel last Halloween! :D It's great fun!
cool, fun chapter.
16: ""Harry noticed that their was a large, green snake coiled on the back."" There was... 'their' : adj. possesive form of 'they'
""Guess I should make sure that their isn't something their for my victims to break their backs on."" both cases should be 'there', not 'their'
Overall, good chapter. I like that he does the 'right thing' and goes to Dumbledore.
17: Plotting!Dumbledore, eh? Hmm... seems to be Manipulative!D, too... interesting...
18: Evil!FullOfHatred!Harry? Hmm... Well, his relishing a torture scene was certainly a side of him *I* don't see much...but then I don't read very much stuff at the dark arts. :P Yes, the kissing scene was nice. *claps* good job.
19: good chapter. interesting about Harry casting the spell to cause Sev to have the dream.
20: "" How he did this was a true feet. "" should be, "feat"
""It hadn't melted it, nor caused a whole,"" should be, "nor caused a hole"
Good chappie. the "Gah" was so funny and cute! the lovey ness at the end was nice, too. :)
21: Uh, D'dore dealing *permanently* with Harry? I mean, it is just soooo OOC...I mean, it is in char for the D'dore you've been creating, but...I'm still having a hard time suspending my disbelief on this one.
and what's Dean's problem? ...
22: Um, I don't hate you, but EW. I mean, um...not even any lube? that is so horrid. And, btw, lubed only has one 'b'. 'lubbed' sounds like a mispronounciation of 'loved'
23: good.
24: Hmm...I'm curious as to what D'dore's grand plan/se ise is, but, sheesh, I am finding that I really don't much care for this D'dore...obviously this is way AU... interesting plot stuffs, anyhow. And yes, you are evil....hopefully just in a fictive way. :)
25: pretty good chap, the bond was neat and the comfort nice, but what about the snake venom? No checking Harry's arms for the puncture? Of course, that would be too easy... :P
26: good!
27: Ack! okay, that was really, really, really good...and I need to know what happens!!! How will they deal with D'dore, and what was his evil plan?!?!?!?! So, yes, Puh-lease! update (& complete) SOON!!! And let me know if ya need help. kay! Good writing vibes I send you!
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From ANON - Verdenia on October 12, 2003
Hey, I like the story, some of the wording could use a little work but it doesn't detract too much from the reading. Let me know if you want help with this. Neat concept.
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From ANON - james on October 11, 2003
That was fantastic. Finally, a Harry who takes control and deals with his upbringing. I love his "new" attitude and want more. I hope Harry really comes into his own now. and I can't wait to find out what he did to Dumbledore. More, soon, please???
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From ANON - kitty on September 23, 2003
Please update soon!!!!!!!!!! I love this story and the other one, taken. Please please please update them!!!!!!!!! They are ame sme stories!!!!!!! :)
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From ANON - Winstin on September 06, 2003
Please please please update soon! You are a great writer, and have a wonderful plot going on in this fic. You have to update soon!
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From ANON - Crow21681 on September 04, 2003
Great fic. Just wondering if you have plans on finishing it? :)
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From ANON - leggylover on August 22, 2003
I loved it! wgen do you plan on updating it? i'd love to read the finished thing.
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From ANON - HuntressAngel on July 20, 2003
Hiyas Myk. I'm so glad I found your story again. And I love what you've done so far. Finally Dumbledor gets what's been coming to him and that sex scene was soooo...sweet. Sevvie gets to show Harry that he's loved and needed. Well written, and I can't wait to read more.

:-)
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From ANON - JO_T on July 08, 2003
Wow, you should feel happy that I am reviewing. I never review here. hee hee, j/k i think this is an amazing story and fits in with my likes a lot. Dumbledore is a manipulative little worm who needs taken down and HPxSS is soo my ship it's not funny. I do hope that you write some more. I just can't wait.
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From ANON - Winstin on June 18, 2003
This s one of the best Harry Sev slashes i Have read in a long time. Please update soon. I love the smut chappie. :D Don't ask.
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From ANON - Turtle on June 17, 2003
Myk

This was great. I was unsure at first abut Harry being in Slytherin but I see now why you did it and I hope you continue.

Turtle

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From ANON - BlueEmerald on June 11, 2003
Waiting with anticipation for the next chapters.please post soon.
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From ANON - SerpentFlame on June 10, 2003
What did they do to Dumbledork????? Oh, this was good though I thought Harry took being tied up and spanked a bit too well, but then maybe that was because of his other persona??? (Mr. Red-Eyes??) Anyway I really enjoyed this chapter and I hope you write more soon.
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From ANON - Airmid on May 29, 2003
You mentioned on ff.net that you had a Yahoo group. Could you please send me the addy for it? I'd like to be a member. It would be easier reading Changing Ideals there than checking here randomly! (Randomly being quite often)

Thank you!
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From ANON - Hyperbole on May 28, 2003
Eeee!!! Love uberuber-powerful Harry! Tch tch tch Dumbledore! You've gone & done it now!

Somehow I can really see Harry boarderlining on being the next great dark wizard. All he needs is to get rid of Voldy.

The smut was HOT! LOVED IT! *Huggles Myk* I want more smut. Plot would be good too but smut is the most important.
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