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Reviews for When the Magic's Gone

By : Avrild
  • From ANON - Campy Capybara on May 23, 2003
    That was an unexpected twist in the story. *raises eyebrows*

    The pacing and the interactions made a sudden about turn; also, Severus' "confessions" were spilled out in a rather abrupt-unexplained manner. Was it caused by the hex he received? Or the pain? All that seem to happen was that he was in pain, he closed his eyes and then started speaking as if he were back in Hogwarts. Perhaps this portion could be better formulated. However, I must say that that bit of interaction between them propelled the story into a wholly different plane.

    Don't worry about Rachel though - I'm not naive to think that our dear Professor would not take comfort were it offered to him. Although I must say that the whole experience with Rachel was quite sad in a funny way. heh. Compared to his coupling with Hermione in chapter 1, this affair with Rachel was pretty pathetic - lol at the allusion to scarlet women, the condom experience (and the going soft comment) and Rachel immediately falling asleep after ogasm.

    What about Potter? Is he still somewhere in the background of this story?
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  • From ANON - arcee on May 23, 2003
    Good job I like the sex thing..
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  • From ANON - Giova on May 22, 2003
    Cool chapter, despite rachel. At least he learned better. I can't wait for more!
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  • From ANON - Redone on May 20, 2003
    This is still a very depressing story. Have you read a story by Sushi called Flight? That one, too, dealt with muggles putting an end to the wizardinrld,rld, their culture and their way of life. But at least there were many who did not give up. Severus never gave up. I'm totally devastated to see your Severryinrying so hard to fit in.
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  • From ANON - Tegan on May 19, 2003
    Wow, that was completely different from what I expected; however, it was very good!

    You have an interesting sense of humor. That combined with the smut and angst is really unique! Poor Hermione; she's having a tough time, and Snape with his clear braces and short hair--eek!

    I definitely want to read more.

    --Tegan
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  • From ANON - Giova on May 19, 2003
    I've been a bit behind in my reading here lately. These last two chapters were great! i love how well Snape has adjusted to the muggle world, wereas it seems poor Hermione is having a bit of trouble. Please keep writing- i love this story!
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  • From ANON - Campy Capybara on May 13, 2003
    I like what you did with Severus. Yummy. Procter and Gamble, huh? I can see it now - the new Lux line by Severus Snape! The company should use Snape as spokesman...they'll easily hypnotise the mass market with that soft, silky...voice. heh.

    Noooo to Severus and Rachel! Fix that! Fix that! ;P
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  • From ANON - Ezmerelda on May 11, 2003
    Well, this story just keeps getting more interesting...please let me know when you update, or just post a notice on WIKTT, I'd like to keep up with your story.

    Thanks for writing,

    Ez
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  • From on May 11, 2003
    Oh, that was so lovely so far, what a set-up you've got going! I can't wait to see what sort of trouble these characters are going to get into. And everything so wonderfully British. I'll definitely be checking back for more.
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  • From ANON - Red on May 10, 2003
    LOL! Poor Snapey, all alone in the muggle world in the clutches of an evil Gryffie who won't help him!
    The first chapter was chilling though, noe see sex part but that muggles actually presume to prescribe the wizarding world how they should live. This is really nasty. Who do the muggles think they are, some american democracy-bringing liberation army? Duh. No offence to your story, it was really well written - otherwise it wouldn't provoke such an emotional reaction! I like this story very much, it's just so heart-rending to see Snape away from where he belongs. Please update soon!
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  • From ANON - Campy Capybara on May 10, 2003
    AprilGrey, this is a very cool story! I can't wait to see how Severus cope with mundane muggle life. Added to that, there is the tension that Hermione has living with the man she gave her virginity to. heh.
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  • From ANON - mandi on May 10, 2003
    Excellent start so far. I look forward to seeing more of it!
    Mandi
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  • From ANON - Giova on May 09, 2003
    This is still terribly funny. I loved the line where he threatened to tell her parents and ask for her hand in marriage. Perfectly Snape! I can't wait for more. Side note: you miss haggis?! Ugh! To each their own, i suppose...
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  • From ANON - Salvia on May 09, 2003
    I really liked this. At first I was confused as of why Snape and Hermione would decide to have sex... but you explained it. (not that I find the couple unlikely, but I didn't really get the context at first). Your writing style is very good, you are quite fluent, and don't have spelling mistakes (I didn't notice any). Keep up!
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  • From ANON - excessivelyperky on May 08, 2003
    Oh, this is a splendid first chapter! I've always thought one of the many permanent solutions to Voldemort could so easily involve a daisycutter (I mean, you only have to hit the right time zone with one of those!). Snicker. I am enjoying this a great deal. Please let us jolly WIKKTeers know when there's more.
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