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By : Malfoywhore

From ANON - Hells Angel on June 24, 2003
I loved this!! but I have a request. can you write in a few more Scenes where Lucius has Sex with hermione in more "Exotic" positions? please? if you can't, understandable, but my little smutty mind would like it. thanx!
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From ANON - Some Random Chick on June 24, 2003
I loved this story, and i can't wait for the next chapter!
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From ANON - Karena Elizabeth on June 24, 2003
AARRGGHHHH!! Okay - here it is. Do you know your story is a topic of interest in a group I am in? I kid you not. I ask: Plaything been updated yet? Corazon: Nope - I checked an hour ago. That conversation happened last night. ANd look! You updated! GO YOU!

I love this story. I keep trying to explain it to my (non-fanfic reading) huhsband. He just doesn't understand! Thanks for another chapter and I hope you update very very very soon!

Karena Elizabeth
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From ANON - JJBattleX on June 23, 2003
Wow this is just like that song by Manowar called Pleasure Slave check it out:

She waiting to kiss my hand
But she will wait for my command
My chains collcollar brought her to her knees
She now is free to please

Woman, be my slave
That's your reason to live
Woman, be my slave
The greatest gift I can give
Woman, be my slave

Before her surrender she had no life
Now she's a slave, not a wife
Her only sorrow is for women who live with lies
She's taken off her disguise

Woman, be my slave
Chained unto my bed
Woman, be my slave
Begging to be led

Your body belongs to me
Woman come here
Remove your garments
Kneel before me
Please me

Woman, be my slave
Chained unto my bed
Woman, be my slave
Begging to be led
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From singtoangels on June 18, 2003
This is going to be a running commentary sort of review, so be warned. heh.

*lights a cigarette and starts to read*

Ah, Lucius is completely hooked on having her. It shall be interesting to see just what he and Severus do to keep her. heh. Hmmn. I'm sure that Lucius can come up with some sort of blackmail to make Severus give Hermione to him.

Oooh... the thot plickens, Darles Chickens! Lucius is feeling uneasy in Voldemort's service now. He sees the potential for downfall and he wants to save his own skin. Hmmn. Probably the best reason to leave Voldie high and dry. heh. If I were Lucius, I'd say piss on them all, steal Hermione, and move to Bora Bora.

I think that it would make sense for the Ministry to keep Hermione's location quiet. Or even the fact that she is still alive quiet. Especially from Harry. If Harry knew where she was, he would likely go off half-cocked and get himself killed. The MoM would do anything to keep their hero from dying, even hiding word about his best friend. *nods* Sounds like what they would do to me. heh. Ah, I agree with Lucius. It probably is best to dash her hopes now before they get out of hand. It actually would be kinder. And between Severus and Lucius, I can see Voldemort allowing Hermione to live if Lucius asks because he is the 'faithful' one. heh. Even though now his faith in Voldie is in tatters, it seems. But Lucius is still convinced that the Dark will win the war. But he doesn't say that Voldie will win. No, just that the Light will lose.

Heh. Terrorism. 11th September referrence? lol

I know that Hermione is putting on an act for Lucius, but I wonder sometimes how much of it is an act and how much is really her. In Severus' pov, it simply screams that she's acting. But here, with Lucius, some of it seems genuine. Eurgh. Yes, she's laying it on quite thick for Severus and he's just eating it up. Stupid sot. heh. And here come Severus with the 'oh woe is me, Malfoy's such a prat' routine. Honestly. I can see the man actually saying this to himself, brooding and all. And it's always the same tune. Boo-hoo, Malfoy has what I want. It seems to be his motivating factor in life. To have something that Malfoy can not. Eh. *waves hand dismissively* Hermione doesn't need another brooder. heh.

Ah. The last sentence... double meaning there? The more times I read it, the less I understand. But then again, I'm quite tired and my eyes are blurry so perhaps I'll understand in the morning. It seems to me that Severus only wants Hermione to show up Malfoy. And I do hope that Malfoy isn't poisoned! That would suck. But anyway, once again Malfoy shows actual emotions whilst Severus displays childish 'mine!mine!mine!' behaviour. Hmmn. Also, in the poll you have up at your yahoogroup... the 'herself' option disturbs me. I do hope that you're not going to go for one of those 'and she walks off into the sunset by herself' dealies. That would suck. Yeah, all for feminism and empowerment sort of stuff *can you hear my enthusiasm?* but I think that she'd be very well suited for Lucius. Then again *sighs* one doesn't always get what they want. Grr. Heh.

*reads review notes*

Steal away! I wouldn't have suggested it if I didn't think you could use it. lol Yes, I think that Lucius will be amused that she's trying to manipulate him as well and it'll probably add even more spice to their 'relationship'. heh And you're welcome about the sperm and all that. Everyone needs a bit of useless knowledge. Oh! And if you're keeping score of Lucius versus Severus... I emphatically vote LUCIUS! And my vote should count three times because... uh, well, er, I'm special or something. hehe Yeah, that's it. Going to sleep now before I fall over.

Cheers,
Sing
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From ANON - andie on June 17, 2003
I thought this chapter was fantastic--all of three main characters read as completely three-dimensional, and there's yet another side of Hermione's cunning. Bravo! I especially enjoyed a further look at Lucius', ahem, "vulnerable" side--and it was interesting to see how both men are so susceptible to her (feigned) wiles. Also enjoyed Hermione's slip during her dialogue with Snape, revealing her innermost thoughts---classic stuff. Carry on!

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From ANON - Fiery Slut on June 17, 2003
I can almost see Lucius and Snape killing each other because of Hermione! (that's what she wants, right?) She
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From ANON - Lady Feylene on June 16, 2003
I'm glad to see that Hermione hasn't lost herself completely throughout this ordeal. She's a strong one, and you portray that, but nice and easily. It sort of slips in, naturally. :-)
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From ANON - StarlitSeaHeart13 on June 16, 2003
EEeeeeek!!! This story is driving me crazy!!! I check up on it atleast three times a day to see if you've updated. I'm totally addicted, and I just can't get enough. This story is perfect. Its th perfect combo of hate, jealousy, rape, sex, and even the starts of romance??? OOOOO.....is Hermione playing them now?? Or does she actually llike Severus?? Omgoodness...you have got to update soon. I am never gonna make it through finals if I don't know what happens next. More power to Hermione!!!!! Mwa hahahaha...girls kick butt. I like Sevy, but thats just a personal thing. Is Harry ever gonna come?? OO you know what i think'd be wacko. If Harry dies right in front of her and shes about to be killed but then one of the guys save her. Iunno. Now i have to make up my own ending untilyou continue, so hurry!!! I'm gonna start dreaming now. This is such a great story...OOh i'm hyper. Weelll...anyway...continue!!! Its great so never give up!!!!! -Pixie
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From ANON - Karena Elizabeth on June 16, 2003
Just wanted to be reviewer 100!! COngrats! Great story and update soon!
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From ANON - deedee on June 16, 2003
I love your story:) It always pu BIG BIG smile on my face when I read it. It's so cunning, evil, and definitely delious! The part about dentists was so funny. It's totally true!Hehehe:) I think Severus might start suspecting something's up if Hermione over does it. I was hoping Lucius would see Hermione as less of a pet and more of a person(lover?). But after he was talking about the leash and collar, my hopes were dashed. By the way, will Harry ever make an appearance? I guess it's for you to know and for me to find out:) Please write more soon.
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From ANON - LadyJet on June 16, 2003
YOU ARE MY (fanfictionwriting) GOD! *worships and grovels*
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From ANON - Anna Marie on June 16, 2003
I love the story and am wishing and hoping for a HG/SS ending. Come on Sev you can do it!
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From ANON - Karena Elizabeth on June 16, 2003
Girl power! Go Hermione! She is going to wrap those two around her little fingers! Great chapter! I can't wait to see what happens next!

Karena Elizabeth
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From ANON - Corazon on June 16, 2003
Wow! I appears that Hermione is getting ready to have
Severus and Lucius destroy each other while she, um -
escapes! *smiles with hope*

But I have such a twisted mind and I am so in love with
Severus that I am forcing myself to believe that
Hermione *loves* (I say this delicately) Severus and
really wants him. *fingers crossed even though he has
been raping her this whole time - but damn, if that is
how Severus rapes, minus the sodomy, I am willing. Okay,
I just gave out too much information.)

Anyway, I am pulling for a HG/SS ending, but this
ich ach a dark story that I am cug myg myself for wanting
her to stay and fall in love with one of her rapists.

I know Lucius is trying to be nice to her but his idea of nice,
excuse me, 'wanting to get her another collar that will
bring out the color of her eyes and get her a matching leash!' I could
strangle him with that damn collar!

Okay, enough said. I loved the chapter!!!!!

Hugs,
Corazon
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