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Reviews for Pasicor Lex

By : solisflos
  • From ANON - Nic on December 05, 2004
    The idea of the story is actually great but it tends to sound to dry at times. Sometimes I have the same problem when writing, though I have to say I am not brave enough to let another person read my phantasies then, wich might be a pitty because as I said the idea of your story is great and a great deal different from what the others made out of the "Marriage Law". I found that this dryness allways appears when I am trying to hard to explain what every single person feels. Sometimes it is just important to leave some emotions to the person reading and a long story does not necessarily mean to be a good one. Though, I have to repeat that, not that you get me wrong, this story has great potential - if it would have been slightly different formulated.

    Keep going

    Nic
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  • From ANON - Greenbean on December 05, 2004
    Wow that was really good.
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  • From FairlightMuse on December 05, 2004
    I like it. I love all of the marriage law challenges, but this one was unique in that you said everything that neede to be said in such a short amount of space...and still had plot. Good work!
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  • From ANON - Stephanie Sears on December 05, 2004
    i loved the story so far it sounds like it will be a great one iespecially love the part were the almighty potions professor was being so shy i cant wait to read more


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  • From ANON - June on December 04, 2004
    I like it! I hate stories that have Hermione all emotional and irrational, blaming Severus for the Law, etc., but your story is much more realistic. She speaks up instead of mincing her words, and they quickly get down to the real issues; she takes the initiative in bed, and has a good attitude to him. Since they're both authorities on potions and DADA stuff, perhaps they could share teaching duties so that he finally gets to teach a little DADA and she gets to teach potions too. This is a partnership and marriage that could really wori. Thanks for the story!
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  • From ANON - Florentia on December 04, 2004
    awwwwwwwww.... such a sweet ending!! it started off a little awkward but it worked out very well for severus and hermione. :) any more or was that the end of it?

    @--->--->--->--- ~*Florentia*~
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  • From ANON - Avanell on December 04, 2004
    Well, I know I just LOVED that Hermione got to be the one to be in control and teach sev something. That was awesome. I really enjoyed the story...and their passion was just right.
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