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Reviews for Love, Lies & Loneliness

By : harriet
  • From ANON - Anon on September 12, 2009
    I've only read to chapter 6 so far and I think the story has promise but there are a couple of inconsistencies (spelling?). First, it seems like Harry is 6th year (he's 16, he knows Grimmauld Place, and he's had Occumency with Snape) but if so why isn't Sirius dead? What happened 5th year (surely not the whole Umbridge thing and the ministry wouldn't try to suspend him a second time). Also, if he is 6th year the twins wouldn't be in school (they are 7th year when Harry is 5th year). I also don't understand why Harry is safer in the Slytherin dorms. If he is just going to sleep there why can't he sleep in Gryfindor? It isn't like he is sharing Snape's chambers (which might make sense). He could still have lessons with and report to Snape while still keeping his bed in Gryfindor (are they afraid he'll do magic in his sleep and if so why are the Slytherins any safer?) I plan to continue reading but I wanted to let you know that while your story seems like it will be interesting being more precise will help the reader truly get into the story.
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  • From BadGirlgoesworse on September 05, 2009
    A realy good one, I must say!
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  • From on August 06, 2009
    Just got done reading chapter 23 and the flirtation is just
    plain adorable man!
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  • From ANON - Jenifer Winterbine on March 01, 2009
    I am enjoying this fic very much - thank you! I do have one question; what has happened to Hedwig?
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  • From ANON - Becky on October 25, 2008
    I loved this story. You have captured the characters perfectly. I was brought to tears at least two times w/the way you wrote Harry's rejection-first when he caught Snape w/ Malfoy... but mostly at the party when he overheard Snape say the kiss was only to keep Harry focused. I actually had to stop reading and reflex because I could feel Harry's pain so much myself.
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  • From ANON - Fate-Angel on October 10, 2008
    um, I remembered something I should mention
    A couple places you refer to Severus looking into Harry's blue eyes and Snape talked about Harry as being a 'brown-haired boy' to his mother.

    Harry has green eyes and black hair. You probably don't want to change this in your fic.

    Sorry, I know it's kind of picky but...It is HARRY after all

    Still loved the story,
    =^-^=
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  • From ANON - Fate-Angel on October 10, 2008
    Amazing. This is the second story of yours I have read.
    You are an excelent writer. I'm extremely envious!

    mmm..Snarry...can it get any better?
    You even have a plot! (and a good one at that)

    Keep up the good work
    =^-^=
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  • From ANON - Mitch on September 28, 2008
    Amusing: While wearing a Death Eater robe, Harry kicks Peter with his scruffy old trainer. Nobody seems to notice that wearing that shoe might seem a bit out of character Snape.

    Luna blows Draco in the train, but later there's a snide comment about Harry watching Pansy blow Draco.

    Where are you from that in all your stories you use the phrase, "while ever?"

    Absolutely great storyteller. Absolute crap at spelling. Suggestion: Find a 9 year old kid and ask for his spelling and a copy of a Harry Potter book in June some year. Practice the spelling words a few times and you won't continue to drive your readers up the wall with mistakes the 9 year old wouldn't make.
    accept except
    draw drawer
    evolving involving
    apperate Apparate
    Lilly Lily
    bare bear
    Occlumency Legilimency
    disbelieve disbelief
    burry bury
    shitty shirty
    their they're
    grasped gasped
    whether weather
    mattered matted
    stagnant pause, pregnant pause
    snuffled awkwardly around on his feet. [ shuffled]
    leant lent
    slithering Slytherin
    familie's family's
    to too
    sole mate soulmate
    Parceltongue Parseltongue
    than then
    pensive pensieve
    alone along
    instants instance
    wrap rap
    couch cough
    off of
    chocked choked
    loosing losing
    wrapt rapt
    fruistration frustration
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  • From ANON - angela on July 31, 2008
    Teriffic. Definetly in need of a sequel! Please write some more in line with this plot line! Wonderful plot twists and characters.
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  • From ANON - Gloria on June 16, 2008
    Please explain the epiphany that harry has in chapter 27. i don't understand what it is that he realizes.
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  • From ANON - usmcgal on February 02, 2008
    my god i love your stories. i love you!!!!!!!!
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  • From xxlovemepleasexx on November 27, 2007
    my goodness! this was a great piece. (criticism time...) there were a few inconsistincies with plot and little pieces here and there. . .but aside from that. . .WOW!
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  • From xxlovemepleasexx on November 26, 2007
    there have been precious few fan fictions that have litterally brought me to tears, but this is one of them (chapter 33). amazing job!
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  • From DragonMcBaine on September 18, 2007
    That was so funny!!!!!!! Neville running around like that!!!!!!
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  • From queenmorgan23 on August 23, 2007
    Okay, I don't think you could write something I wouldn't love. lol. This is one of the best Harry/Snape stories I've ever encountered. I fell totally in love with this story. Thank you for sharing it.
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