Reviews for UntitledBy : DeirdraDomain |
I was really enjoying your story, the sweet romance and the interesting changes and detail you put into characters (making Hermione a Catholic was a nice little note, things like that). I have a tendency to stop reading when a story loses me sadly. The quick jump into sexual relationship with the boys almost did it for me, I would have liked to see a bit more tension grow between them first. You pulled me back in with the interesting scene on valentines day. Unfortunately you lost me completely when Harry learned of Draco though. I just couldn't believe your characters anymore. He didn't show enough anger or loss you would think to have with someone finding out their lover was dead. When Ron made those comments I was waiting for harry to jinks him or somethings (considering he has JUST learned that Lucius had killed him). i pushed on to the rest of the chapter but at the end of 8 I stopped. I hope the rest of the story turns out well. please keep writing, I do like your style, even if the reaction you have your character portray is a little subdued considering the intensity of the plot you chose to use.
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