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By : metoo2
  • From ANON - Anon on January 10, 2005
    awesome please update soon

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  • From slygriff21 on January 09, 2005
    Awsome chapter! Update soon! I can't wait to see what happens when she meets Voldemort. What's going to happen when she sees Harry and Ron? I can't wait.

    Tiff
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  • From ANON - LariLee on January 09, 2005
    I don't know if it is system glitch or what, but the spacing of the lines on this make it very difficult to read. Also, there are a number of spelling and grammatical errors. Do you have a beta? It's an interesting thought, though, that Hermione is a Pureblood witch. I hope she realizes that as Voldemort was killing Muggles and Muggleborns at that time, his followers, including her birth father, were on a Ministry target list.

    Very interesting plot.

    ~Lisa
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  • From ANON - Pearle on January 09, 2005
    And as is if to prove my point, the code was picked up and used, instead of remaining an example. I emagine the review is still readable.
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  • From ANON - Pearle on January 09, 2005
    To start, are you writing in notepad? You need to upload the chapters as Microsoft Word or an HTML document to maintain format. The other option, is to format with notepad and include HTML code (i.e.,

    or with closures). Use the spell and grammar function on Word. It will help with some of the capitalization issues. Proof reading two or three times helps to turn up additional errors. Reading a document from end to beginning will help you to see spelling errors.


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  • From ANON - metoo2 on January 09, 2005
    It stupid to reviw my own work but to answer some stuff, i found a beta reader so hopeful that will help, when i upload the chapters the structure gets messed up so there's no indents and stuff, no hermione will not get pregnant, there are some good stories where that works i would find it far to mainstream to do that, Im sorry i moved the characters so fast but hey she going through a very real identity crisis we all make mastakes, and yes they are OOC but i like them better this way and it is my story so they can be who they want here, and Albus is cool and is goign to leave hermione be until later.
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  • From ANON - Innogen on January 09, 2005
    Morning after potion? Please? No cliche pregnant Hermione stories, okay?

    Innogen


    Good Chapter....
    Hope Albus is actually a decent guy in this story, otherwise Hermione may be SOL....

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  • From ANON - Kuronekosama_KK on January 08, 2005
    Yes, I'm reviewing again. But you're rushing a lot, some of the things seem too sudden. Also, you also make Snape and Hermione REALLY OOC. Sure, it's great and all that Hermione went to a brothel and all that, but it's too OOC and too fast. A lot of the description and conversations are shallow, and some of the wording makes the story seem awkward and forced. You might want to consider a beta since they could also look at the first 4 chapters. Even if the updates take longer, the quality will be better and as the saying goes, "Quality over quantity."
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  • From ANON - Avanell on January 08, 2005
    Yes, I think a beta would be good but I love this story. Was shocked Hermione moved in on Sev so fast, but what the heck. Can't wait for more.

    Oh, if you need a beta for the next chapter let me know. I'm going to a conference next weekend, but would be happy to help if its ready by tues night. :) I can always take a break from my dissertation
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  • From ANON - Kuronekosama_KK on January 08, 2005
    I just read the first part and it has a LOT of typos in it... you might want to think about editing it and resubmitting it. The typos make it really hard to read and understand.
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  • From ANON - T on January 08, 2005
    This is okay. Good first fic.
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  • From ANON - Innogen on January 08, 2005
    Interesting so far! Looking forward to chappie 3!

    Innogen

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  • From ANON - dryade on January 06, 2005
    a really good story. and a unique idea. i hope you'll find a beta to improve your style a little. it'd be even more enjoyable if you did.
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  • From slygriff21 on January 06, 2005
    Great story! I love the twist! Please update and soon! I have to know what happens and if Hermione is able to have an audiance with Voldemort! Please update!

    Tiffany
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  • From robin777 on January 05, 2005
    I really like the first chapter. I really want to see what happens when she activates the portkey. I think it will take Severus by surprise. I can't wait for the update.
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