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Reviews for The Secret

By : LunaStarbreeze
  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on November 22, 2007
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on July 02, 2007
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on February 28, 2007
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From ANON - Megan Consoer on December 31, 2006
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From ANON - Megan Consoer on June 26, 2006
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From ANON - Maleficent on January 13, 2005
    ...Darling, darling darling. I just...I don't know where to begin.
    How old are you? Like 12, 13 I suppose? You should be playing with barbies, not writing sex scenes, especially when you've never had sex. That is definitely apparent.
    Your grammar is horrible, the plot is ridiculous, and during the whole story, I couldn't help having an internal battle: Should I hang myself or maybe just you?
    Seriously...I urge you not to pick up a pen or a keyboard again until you grasp at least a passing familiarity with the English language, and DO NOT write sex scenes again until you have experienced it or know what you're talking about.
    Have a nice day.
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  • From ANON - Katie on January 11, 2005
    Thsi story was soooooooooooooooooo good!! I don't no why all those other people said it was bad!!! It was very sexxy More MOre More!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 08, 2005
    maybe you should look into a beta reader, or try posting at fanfiction.net
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  • From ANON - anonymoustip on January 07, 2005
    Honey, how old are you?

    If you hadn't noticed, this is an adult site. I'm sorry to say, but your writing shows something less than that. I think it would be best if you worked with a beta-reader because they could help re-format your story into something more appropriate for a website such as this.
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  • From ANON - Veelacity on January 06, 2005
    I'm guessing that the "13" in "Dracos_Girl13" means you're 13 years old. In that case, we'll excuse you for being clueless about sex, and for your horrible spelling.

    But really... this Hermione/Snape sex scene is so ridiculous! And do learn to spell "tongue" - it is not "tounge".
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  • From ANON - HermioneSeverus on January 06, 2005
    This is horrid. How old are you? 6?
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