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By : cearrae

From Muggleman on November 24, 2005
keep up the good work i really like this fic
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From ANON - jagqueen2 on November 14, 2005
I teared up a little at the end of that chapter. Poor Phaelen, feeling the green eyed-monster of jealousy. As usual, a wonderful chapter, keep up the good work. (I'm behaving myself tonight, Suprised?)
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From ANON - jagqueen2 on November 07, 2005
Wow! Two chapters in four days! Thankyou thankyou thankyou thankyou. I've managed to control myeself right now. The annual reportcard headcold still has a hold of me. Sev doing self-pity was so sad. YOu capture the reactions of the characters well. Wise decision about limiting the reunion to 25 years. After I thought about it for a while, if it were a reuinion for every alumnus ever for hogwarts, Voldemort would have to be invited. Anyways, thanks for the great chapter, and since I'm fairly coherant right now, I will spare you from the random attack of submitting a horrible paragraph from my nanowrimo novel in this review. Unfortunately, my sister was not so lucky.

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From ANON - jagqueen2 on November 04, 2005
Constant Vigilance! This reviewer has had a headcold, too much Cocacola, a glass of homemade wine from the bottle my friend gave me, and the Red-Green show is on CBC in COLOUR (eight weeks of suffering with an old Black and White TV) and is marvelling on the good deal on chicken I got at the co-op. I laughed myself into a coughing fit when I read the plans for the reuinion. Poor Phaelen! I could just picture the amount of work she'd have to do. What about Hermione when she finds out its BYOE (bring your own Elf)? I smell a revival of SPEW and some more horrid hats! Snape disguised as Kingsley! Oh the images! What would happen if he forgot about the earring and heaven forbid a student saw? Phaelen would have to enter him in the fashion show. Why do the teachers at hogwarts never get sick? I know the students do, but why has there never been a substitute teacher at hogwarts because of a run of the mill illness. Lycanthropy is not exactly a run of the mill illness. Wowee! I used Lycanthropy in a sentence! I mean, why doesn't McGonnigal ever get the flu? Who would be a substitute teacher in the wizard world? As usuall, I digress. Good chapter as usual. I like your use of original characters and interesting situations. It was a relief not to read the usual Sytherins are evil drivel. Many are just misunderstood, like Severus. I still want to see him in an earring. Trying to curtail my own randomness and channel into a constructive outlet. Nanowrimo is hear and I'm at 7200 words and counting, already beating my total from last year.
Keep up the good work.

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From ANON - o.T on November 04, 2005
I've just started reading the first chapter and it's extremely interesting. The problem is i've still got 42.5 chapters to go, Yarghh!!
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From ANON - jagqueen2 on October 26, 2005
Another great chapter. I like the details of Snape's relationship as a father figure to Hermione. Poor Pansy! I'm now considering getting myself a jumprope.

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From ANON - Silver1 on October 26, 2005
yay an update! I have a question though... when are the dreams going to come up? How about the necklace from Phaelan's grandmother and Phaelan's reaction to magic sometimes? Is it going to be explained. So much was made of this that I can't help thinking that they are important to the story. Oh - and update sonnest please!
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From Muggleman on October 26, 2005
Love this story one of my all time favorites but whats up with snape one of the most confusing charecters EVER hes up to something and is being a jerk(restraining my use of words) about getting it some one needs to punch him lol keep up the good work hope you keep writing after this fic
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From ANON - JC on October 22, 2005
o this story is great iv never been much of a reviewer but I'll make the exception for a story this good loved all the chapters really the ones with poor ginny is she ever going to get over her problem its so sad. and ron to if i were him id would have chocked snape most likely whats snape up to i hope someone finds out and gives him what he disserves (hermine or phalean) wink wink
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From ANON - jagqueen2 on October 17, 2005
WARNING: INSANE REVIEW. THE REVIEWER IS NOT RESPONSIBLE FOR ANY DAMAGE OCCURED WHILE TRYING TO FIGURE OUT WHAT IS GOING ON IN THE REVIWER'S MIND. READ AT YOUR OWN RISK.

I do apologize for not reviewing the previous chapter. It's been a wild week and I barely even had the time to read it! As it was, I've fallen back into my old habits of reading this story instead of doing assignments, planning lessons or sleeping. Luckily, I don't have to feel as guilty about the assignments since I'm not officially registered in the course that I'm taking "unofficially". The previous chapter WAS NOT terrible. Real Life got in my way of telling you that it was good, if a little different from what you previously wrote. I loved the flying sequences, and I have a feeling that if Harry were at the controls, he'd pull all the same stunts as a certain Lt./Lt. Cdr./Cdr./Capt. from a certain long running military drama (boy 10 years goes by quickly, especially in reruns!) Cue: JAG March! Here comes my kitty! Hmmm.... Voldie gets hold of a nuclear missle and it's up to Harry to lead it away until it runs out of fuel. Forgive me...long day, involving trying to teach 15 year olds how to write an outline for a geography report, staff meetings, fractions, German vocabulary, potato farmers, crab fishermen, trapping and tuna casserole..

Alright, and now onto this chapter. I loved the poetic language you used. The plot devices were wonderful and Go Albus!!!! I think Dumbledore and McGonagle make a very cute couple. Do you think that when he brings her candy, it's lemon drops in a heart -shaped box? I'm glad that Draco has made a good choice in matters of great importance. I laughed out loud when Goyle needed a translation of what Draco said. Ron and Severus are romantics at heart. Ah, young love.

As I ramble on here, I realize it is time to make a decision: Do I dabble in the realm of fanfiction for NaNoWriMo, or do I attempt something orriginal. (NaNoWriMo...National Novel Writing Month. November 1-30. Goal: 50 000 words in 30 days. Last years attempt: 3000 words + 48 000 words of work related drivel that don't count as a novel. BTW...what do you call fanfiction embedded into an original novel anyway?) On the Nanowrimo website, there was a forum devoted to procrastination. One potential novelist stated that fanfiction was like sweet crack! I'm inclined to agree with this person as I am tapping away a review on a fanfiction website instead of doing many productive things such as doing dishes, working on other hobbies, preparing for work tomorrow or sleeping. Back to this decision...I have a number of plots in my head that can go either way. They're not as well thought out as this story.

Now I shall sign off this review since my cat is giving me dirty looks, and I need to be at work in 8 hours and probably should get a decent amount of sleep. I have 2 meetings tomrrow, plus a brainstorming session for a play that so far involves the Grinch, characters from The Nightmare Before Christmas, rhyme schemes in the style of Dr. Suess, and a local historic site. The challenge is to also include the words " 'twas" and "hither" I will suggest trying to include a unicron named Larry, but he may or may not cooperate as he has a previous engagement at NCIS. Note to self...channel randomness for good or novel-writing purposes. Do people really want to see the contents of my brain left as a review? I propose YES... Better this than no review. Must remember to set alarm tonight. Need sleep I think.

Parting remark: The group Barenaked Ladies are neither Barenaked nor are they Ladies, however they were banned from performing in Toronto in the past. If I had a million dollars... I'd bribe JKR to allow Caerrae to ghostwrite the 7th book and try to correct some of the damage.

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From ANON - MarzBar on October 02, 2005
Is Phaelan ever going to be able to tame Severus enough to get him to behave decently to students who are not snakes? Hope Harry has fun in the jet. More please.
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From ANON - jagqueen2 on October 02, 2005
Another great chapter. That was so funny when Polly misunderstood Phaelan's references to muggle technology. BTW, you may want to check the spelling of Kabala. I've seen it as Kabballah, Kaballah and Qaballah, but not the way you spelled it.

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From ANON - MarzBar on September 26, 2005
Just found this story yesterday and finished reading today. What an epic tale! I am thoroughly enjoying it and hope you keep it strictly AU. After crying over HBP I am happy to read something that might have a more satisfactory ending. More please.
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From ANON - jagqueen2 on September 18, 2005
Another great chapter. Well done with the Newfoundland and Boston accents. I loved the line about the Screech. The old stone buildings are plentiful there. Since I recently moved, it was a nice break from umpacking to read the next installment of my favorite fanfic. Keep up the good work.
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From ANON - jagqueen2 on September 04, 2005
I love it! I love it! I could just picture the Dursley's faces when Phaelen mentioned area 51. I wasn't really aware of swaggar sticks until I read this, so a quick peak at Google Image search confirmed my curiosity about their appearance. I loved the bit with Hermione and the tie. I'm surprised she didn't sit down with Harry on a weekend and insist that he learn to tie it himself, but that would take away the humour of the dormmates asking for her assistance. I can't wait to see how Severus reacts to parenthood (and the girls' reaction to having him as a guardian) and I really would like to see how well Harry's stomach handles the F-14. I loved Phaelen's reation to Aunt Petunia's edict about the towells. Good for her! Keep this up. It's a great source of entertainment for me.

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