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Reviews for Haunted

By : schnizz
  • From ANON - Luna on February 28, 2005
    I think that you are not a bad writter...but this story seems a bit "choppy" to me. I love "tortured Severus falls in love" stories, and you had a great start with the two of them being Slytherins in school together and both loving potions, and I could really get into depressed Severus at Hogwarts and all, but after that I just felt like you kind of let the plot slip. I think you could really make their meeting in the bar a lot more clear and detailed. It came across as they didn't really even know each other, like two strangers just decided to live together. It felt rushed. I enjoyed the first couple of chapters; I think you could re-write the fourth and make the flow of the story a lot better. Please, keep up the story though, I like where it's going.
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  • From ANON - AU Transmutation on February 07, 2005
    Well, it's not as mary-sueish as I thought it would be, 'nd I like it a lot:)) Even though it's not slash;)
    I really liked your style of describing things, reminds me of cyberpunk a bit)
    Anything disturbing will go on at all?:)
    Write more, plz)
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  • From ANON - Hell on February 05, 2005
    COOL!!

    This story is Fabulous! For once someone writing him as a heterosexual not gay. I mean can anyone see him as a gay? No seriously he isn't the type! Anyway i digress. PLEASE WRITE MORE CHAPTERS!!!!! This story is great Schnizz!
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  • From ANON - Sheriff of nottingham on February 04, 2005
    Where's the sex???? I can't wait for them to get it on, write more, love. Oh and keep your hands off the egg mayo sandwiches!!
    Oh and just in case I didn't make it clear, I love you sweetheart!!!

    Jamie xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

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  • From ANON - Suebob Murphy on February 03, 2005
    I like this story what happens next plz write more and quickly!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Anony on February 02, 2005
    Hey, mate you might want to keep this story in the Harry Potter section!
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  • From ANON - Draco Malfoy on January 31, 2005
    Im liking it Bern tres cool yeah like alot keep it clean Bern
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