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By : lorettcopeland

From ANON - Alison on April 16, 2005
(CHAP 28)

Yay!! I'm back, as promised. About time, enh?? And this was such a BRILLIANT chapter...I can't believe I missed it. Oh well. I'm making up for it now, right? Right. Okay, I'll try to keep the review short and compact, seeing as I just sent you a novel for an email two seconds ago. Not to mention that I have another review coming up.

Lots of things here. The thing that I noticed first - and really appreciated - was Draco's reaction to his memories as he woke up. How, as he was reflecting on the deaths and the pain and the events of the previous evening, he felt guilt settle in. How he, like Harry and Laurel before him, felt that it was HIS fault. It's funny how death seems to do that to you, how it brings all the insecurities and darkness to the surface. Even though it really shouldn't be like that - it should be a clean ending, a point where one life stops and others carry on - human nature forces us to remember everything that is terrible about us and places it on the graves of the deceased. It's sad to be honest; it makes grief so much harder to bear.

But not for Draco, I see. I mean, he has that guilt and shame, but he turns it into anger for the Death Eaters - people he knew under their masks - and for his father. Bastard. A sexy one, but still a bastard. I knew it. I KNEW IT WAS HIM!! But that reminds me of another thing you told me when I mentioned that Draco's almost-murderer might be Lucius (and that it meant Draco was exposed to the Death Eaters, as you pointed out this chapter), was that he could probably identify each and every Death Eater by their voices. Doesn't that mean that he probably knows who tried to kill him? I mean, the way you wrote this chapter, he still seemed oblivious, but you never know. I did something similar with Pansy, to hide Hermione's identity in PUPPET MASTER (I used Pansy's name instead of Hermione's...that kind of thing. Not exposing the full truth, covering it with half-lies). And come on, Draco's lived with the man for SEVENTEEN YEARS! He's got to have recognized Lucius' walk and his words and his wand and the shape of his shoulders. I can identify my dad in a crowd of about one hundred people. I can always pick him out by the way he walks; it's nothing special, but just HIM.

Hm, a line I really loved: "His life as he
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From ANON - RahNee on April 16, 2005
Whew! Chapter 29 was a great ride! I'm going to need to brush up on my geometry with all these love quadrangles and hexagons and such going on. That Maggie is a brave woman, inviting teenagers into her home. Especially ones as gorgeous and hormonal as all these guys and girls are. She strikes me as someone very up to the challenge, though.

I loved Harry's reaction to the news that Arthur wanted to speak to him. The Weasleys may not be his legal guardians, but their parental influence on him is strong, and I think deep down Harry fears disappointing them.

Ah, Ginny. So much potential in her character. I can NOT wait to see where you take her. I already like the way you write her, the little minx. Are you going to turn me into a Harry/Ginny shipper? Quite likely, I'd say. And the Ginny/Ron sibling interaction was GREAT! That Ginny, tortures her brother, and enjoys it. I know what it's like to be the youngest and only girl. I have a special place in my heart for Gin. I love how she handled Harry and calmed him down, too.

The Harry/Ron interaction was brilliant all the way through. From the top of the lungs fight, to the silent communication, all of it. I could not get enough! You conveyed the connection between them so well. So well written. Yum.

And speaking of yum, you went and did it. Ron just became an official hottie and contender for my Harry and Draco affections with your description of him through Laurel's eyes. "she just thought he looked so very handsome when he was so angry like this. Dangerous and sexy, with those deep, intense blue eyes challenging and sparkling like cobalt jewels, muscles rippling, taut against his fair skin as he stood, balling and flexing his hands and taking shallow breaths, attempting to calm himself." Sign me up for the muscle-rippling, dangerously sexy, cobalt blue-eyed red-head fan club, like right now, please. Damn, Lorett. You KNOW I have a rather unhealthy fantasy world with the sexy Draco and sexy Harry you write, and now...well now...I've entered a new level in The Gutter, I'm afraid. 3 incredibly HOT teenaged boys roaming around in my head...this cannot be legal...

Laurel, you'd best watch that flip-flopping pitter-patting heart of yours 'cause your hormones are out to cause trouble!

Nice little reveal with the OotP stuff, and about Ron & Hermione's relationship plus Harry's ambiguity about it.

And *shrieks with delight* Draco at the end. And Ginny?! And he'd know that voice anywhere?! Draco, my dear, you've got some 'splainin to do!!! Excellent place to leave off. Well, except that I DESPERATELY want more.

Okay, so let's see, what do we have so far...Harry likes Laurel but is also attracted to Ginny and apparently harbors subconscious feelings for Hermione; Laurel likes Draco but is also attracted to Harry and Ron; Draco wants Laurel, but most likely had something going on with Ginny at some point in the past; Ginny once had a crush on Harry, probably had a fling of some kind with Draco, and now likes Harry again; Ron likes Hermione but is secretive about it with Harry; and Hermione may have feelings for Harry... Have I got it so far? So that makes this story a love octogon perhaps? Ah, what a tangled web of teenaged angst you weave, Lorett.

Damn! You found my hiding place behind your monitor. Rats...*goes off to sulk and find another nook in your office to lurk in*

Well, Simpatico-girl, yet another helping of wonderfulness that you have dished up here. I cannot rave enough about it! *hugs you tight* Thanks!

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From ANON - Monkmess on April 16, 2005
Lovely, simply lovely. This was definately an awesome chapter. Your intro. to Ginny was so excellent! Now I can kinda see where things are leading......I think. There's a lot of backstory though, isn't there? Between Ginny and Draco, Harry and Hermione and pretty much everyone else. I love that, not only do we have the current goings on, but everything that happend before too. My mind is spinning with everything. Don't rush it though, I don't care if this story takes forever to finish, I'll stick with it. I like having everythin laid out neatly instead of rushed, which you seem to be great at doing.

Oh, and Ron...WOW. You have a knack for making these heros seem so much better than any other authors I've read. Who do I like best? My mind changes depending on who you're talking about. They're all so loveable. And the girls, so far, are also better than I've read. They're not being dumb or, well, girly. I love it!!!! Can't wait for the next Chapter!!

Hugs and kisses sweets!!
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From ANON - princessgreta on April 16, 2005
Ooooo!!! The introduction of Ginny was great! Laurel and her seem really similar, they like most guys and most guys like them. And that last part with Draco, I cannot wait to find out what that's all about! Sorry but this has to be a short review cos I gotta go out. Just know that the last two chapters were spectacular and so thrilling to read!

xx princessgreta xx
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From on April 16, 2005
I absolutely love that last line of the last chapter. You are really good at letting people use their over active imaginations. Did Draco and Ginny have something, or is it our imaginations ? When Hermione gets there, will Laurel have more competion ?Did Draco have Hermione too ? You are evil, but I love it .

(Draco froze; his pulse quickening and his eyes opening wide for a minute, before regaining his composure and turning around deliberately slow. He knew that voice
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From ANON - Tiarwen on April 16, 2005
yay!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i loved it, i always dooooooooooooooooooooooooooo. lol i just woke up some yea im acting weird.............. lol yepyep you're great *muah*

.tiar.
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From ANON - Anon on April 16, 2005
scratch my last comment! i found "you" (i assume its the story "it had to be you" which is listed alongside this one on your author page :)
its a good one, though i must admit, i enjoy dark, tension-filled draco/hermione stories a little bit more than i do the fluff. still, i
thoroughly enjoyed your fic, and i hope you write more :)

nnt
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From ANON - Anon on April 16, 2005
wow... another great chapter... i really enjoyed that one, particularly the dynamics b/w harry and ron. i like fact that harry is wary over ron's possessiveness of hermione! i hope you can work with this and draw it out to an interesting and exciting conclusion! although i'm not a big fan of ginny, i must admit you certainly livened her up! i can't wait for you to bring hermione into the picture, and i hope you make her as spectacular sounding as everyone else does in this fic :) thanks again for the great chapter, and i'm going to check out "you", although i'm not quite sure where to find it. i'll google it and let you know how it goes.

nnt :)

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From ANON - Alex on April 16, 2005
Draco running his fingertips across his scar in that absent-minded manner was pretty hot. The asides (he's always hot) are getting over the top.
Harry thinking "Hey, I almost got killed too!" was funny. How Harry. Canon Harry, that is.
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From ANON - Ally on April 12, 2005
Hey darling,

another great chapter as per usual. Eagerly awaiting the new one. I read your wee note and noticed you have read God of The Lost. You found the Draco disturbing eh? Well yes he is. That fic is truly my favourite Fan-fiction fic. I have read it numerous times and am pained at how long it takes her to update, but it is worth waiting for. The war at Hogwarts is just so intriguing and I am dieing to see how Draco and Hermione's relationship will progress. You can already begin to see the signs from him. The overprotectiveness and all that is starting to show through. Okay I realize this review is meant to be about your fic so I shall stop! Haven't talked to you in a while. I apologize. Kevin left this morning and I am left to my lonesome for a wee while. I do not know how I will occupy myself, though your yahoo group and my fic should take up some of that. I am alright besides all that. ANYWAY, totally got off topic here didn't I. Ramble ramble ramble! I am taking a page out of your book.

Okay again, great chapter and well because I know what is coming in the next few chapters I am eagerly awaiting your next update my dear! Lots of love,
Ally
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From on April 12, 2005
yayayayayay!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *muah* i
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From ANON - Monkmess on April 12, 2005
Can I just say that you still aren't making it any easier to choose. I mean, Draco is so incredibly awesome, especially since we can see what he's really thinking, but then you turn around and continue to make Harry so, well, yummy! Most Draco stories make Harry seem like a loser, for some reason, but your Harry is so good. But then, so is your Draco. AHHHH! :) I hope something great comes out of this for Harry. Anyway, story is going great, I'm liking Draco's plan of attack. I can't wait till he hears about Laurel and Harry. Is there gonna be a huge blow up? (Hope so:-) ) Well, I will be sitting on the edge of my seat till the next chapter. Bye!
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From ANON - RahNee on April 12, 2005
The thought that is foremost in my mind: even in these chapters like 28 where there is less action and more exposition, you manage to maintain the humor and the darkness and the tension (sexual and otherwise) and you don't let these chapters get boring.

I am liking Laurel more and more. She's very believable as a teenager. I liked the jelousy over the pillow (me, too, sistah, me too!) and her list of things to do. So Harry is still having an effect on her, hmmm? Go Harry! And he turned on the charm, didn't he? I love it. Looking too good, leaning on the doorframe, flexing his muscles *faints* and his husky voice *faints again*. OH MY! That's all I can say... and the "Malfoy look out , you've got competition" line made me growl...grrr Harry, about time you be assertive when it comes to girls! I like alpha-Harry. But it bums me out that he really had no future with Laurel. I hope you provide a nice girl for alpha-Harry. Pretty please?

Side note: I was grateful that Draco was curled up so she couldn't see the trail of blond hair again. I don't think my heart could have withstood another spate of rapid thumping like the last time you mentioned that...yummy...trail...mmmm.....

The Lucius' wand discussion in the hall was excellent. I love cold and dangerous Harry, too! And poor Laurel not being able to wrap her head around the concept that a parent would be willing to murder his or her child. Little does she know, yet, how truly MESSED UP the Malfoy family is, and how many issues dear Draco must have as a result.

Thank you, thank you, thank you for the delicious Draco exposition; I'd missed hearing Draco's musings! The last section and the author note immediately following were perfect! THIS is the Draco I LOVE! The Draco that YOU write. He is just so, so, so swoon-worthy! *swoons* I had to laugh at "so he decided to trust Potter. Draco snorted at the thought and hoped he COULD trust Potter with Laurel" Can you say ironic? And I loved, absolutely loved, Draco's parting line! Brilliant!

And so I find myself wanting MORE! MORE I SAY! I want to hear Harry & Laurel's "the talk" talk, and how Draco schmoozes Maggie into letting him go to Gringotts and, for heaven's sake, Lorett, I want some groping and making out and snogging between Draco & Laurel! (Since I can't have my "It Had to Be You" fix. Which I am completely okay with, mind you, given your reasons) And...*looks around and leans in toward you with a whisper* I really wouldn't mind seeing that trail of dark blond hair again, despite what I said above.

My compliments to you, lovie, on another fine serving of KEYS. Lip-smacking good as usual! Hugs and smooches and the like to you! Have a wonderful week!
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From on April 11, 2005
THUMP! *faints from Draco's hottness* Grr, why can't he BE REAL?! I want your Draco, though, not the Phycho Draco, haha

Golly, I can't get over how ABSO-BLOODY-LUTELY fantastic this story is!

It's great to hear that AFF is still running, for the time being, anyway.. you won't have to uproot and move again. :-)
Keep up the GREAT work, I can't wait for more!
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From ANON - mrs_accio_firebolt on April 11, 2005
Hi there.
I hurried up this time, huh? I'll just say my students really appreciated having a class-free hour. We just had the exam last saturday, and today they started asking me not to teach today. So, I was like "MHH, I could read and review Keys.... OK, NO CLASS TODAY". And such a very good idea it was, too.

This chapter was very very very very very nice. Interesting, well-written (as always), exciting, informative, long enough, had Draco, had Harry... Good!

I just love the way you describe Draco. I just regret that I'll never find him around here. The part when he touches his scar....god! I could just picture him doing so..... and found my finger trailing something in mid-air. Nothing sexier than a nice scar. NICE SCAR, I said, huh?

And Harry! "You're looking at my arms, and I'm flexing them for you"... So cute. It must be kind of weird to him that he usually makes quite an impression without any effort and now, he just has to get to work. Even though he doesn't know Draco is already winning! Will you confront them openly? From one of your A/N, we know Draco will find out about the BATHROOM SCENE... I'm guessing he will not be happy at all. But will Harry take the challenge? I think he will. Damn, damn, damn Laurel.

Have I ever told you that I have a Draco-nephew? He's so damn cute. Can't help but think of Draco when I look at him.. though it's definitely illegal. Howcome he is family???

About Lucius, I'm sorry. I absolutely love how you're handling him but I can't bring myself to think that he would do such a terrible thing to his own son. As for the consequences, Draco has already told us that there will be some for him.... and Lucius as well. BTW, where is Narcissa? What about Draco's bargain? Who was he suppossed to kill? Don't think I have forgotten, lady!

Anyways, great chapter. Great story! Your imagination never ceases to surprise me. Has creado una bellisima historia, sexy, interesante, entretenida... una verdadera joya.

Besos,
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