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By : lorettcopeland

From ANON - nnt on April 02, 2005
hey... this is a great story so far... i can't believe i only just found it! the only thing i find is missing is hermione... i think laurel is a great character, but i think i've developed this unhealthy obsession with hermione, and the fact that laurel looks so much like her, and blushes, and is really smart, and is muggle.. well, lets just say that sometimes i forget its really not hermione. it would be great if she could make an appearance in this fic, and hopefully a good one! maybe after laurel and draco hook up, harry will realize his love/desire/lust for his laurel-like friend! ahhh, one can always dream :)

nnt
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From ANON - Alison on April 02, 2005
Hey you!

To be honest, I loovve transitional chapters. Not to write (they're some of the most difficult to write), but to read when they're as dense and fulfilling as yours - it makes for some of the best writing in all fanfics. Ah, what a treat on a stormy night. Makes me all warm and snuggly, sitting here with the fattest, limpest, cutest cat ever on my lap (my neighbors...mine are both skinny), doing just what I should.

Okay, this one will have to be short...I've got so much to do, and I would love to get over to YOU tonight. I'll cross my fingers. I've written Chapter 8 for MASTER, but haven't typed it yet. Sigh. It looks like they don't even have a floppy drive...tsk. Oh well. Right. You time. Well, I have two favorite things in this chapter. The first was the way you presented the whole "I'm Draco, not my older, almost as sexy twin who happens to be my father" conflict. No matter the story, there has to be some section that breaks the tie between them. I thought that yours was particularly well done, and that Harry's defense was really moving. It finally sounds as if the importance of Draco's betrayal has sunk into his thick skull at last.

I'm beginning to really like Maggie. She's strong, willful, and perceptive. I think I remembered that you said that Laurel really is Maggie's girl...I see what you mean. They are a LOT alike. She certainly knows how to take charge. She reminds me of an American version of Mrs. Weasley, except she has no soft spots for Harry. And treats all kids like her own kids; Mrs. Weasley is definitely an old-fashioned, welcoming host.

Ah, and before I go, I cannot forget the foreshadowing. Don't think I've forgotten that dream, lady. I haven't. I noticed how you put Draco right next to Laurel, though why Maggie would put the two together where there's an ADJOINING DOOR and when there's such obvious chemistry between them, I don't know. That room, where the nightmare takes place. Where it WILL take place. Shivers.

Okay, now I've really got to go. I'll talk to you soon, dearie! Hope to have the chapter up middle of the week...can make no promises though!

~Me.
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From on April 02, 2005
hey! sorry for not reviewing earlier. but i love it. yepyep. and update It Had To Be You soooon pleeeeeeeeease. oketays. yea great story, i love it. i bow down to your writing greatness. *bows and cracks back.* ow. yeaaaaaaaaaa. im done.

.tiar.
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From ANON - Jenn (Darlin_Gurl) on April 02, 2005
Well, would you look at that............ I didn't even have time to review one of my fav little harry/laurel moments and you're already on to another chapter! Shame shame I tell you!!!!!!!!! Don't you know you have to wait until I review to post a new chappie??? lol, I'm totally joking by the way. So, this means I get to review two chappies in one big write up and I know you'll love that!!!!

So, about the bathroom chappie. Yes, the shower was already running before I read it. See, this time I was ready! Even had the window open and its HOT IN 'ERE!!!! (yes I stole that from Nelly) Well, my little observations.... not much different from the first time I review this chappie. I love how hot you make it sound even if all they're doing is kissing and feeling eachother up. Honestly, its almost bad for my health... my heart that is. I love how its almost an escape for both of them. I mean, they obviously know Draco is chillin half dead outside, but we have queen bee mum to take care of him so why not explore the sexual release needed after such a rush with death??!! In the long run they know it'll be Draco with her, but Harry seemingly can't make up his mind (as we'll know if future chapters around the kitchen table) so why not? Sometimes I wonder if Harry will just end up as a player.... lol

okay, on to this chappy. I ADORE Ron, honestly he makes everything so much better just by the quirky things he says. I also love how Maggie calls him Red. It suits him so well. So much better than the weasel as Draco so affectionally calls him. I always thought this chapter held alot of good dialog between Laurel, Harry, and Maggie. I love the soul thing, I really hope that comes into play more once you're back on track with brand new chapters. Another part I noticed was the whole Spiderman reference. I don't think I noticed it the first time, but this time around I totally got it. Isn't it a female figure that tells Spidey that in the movies too??? I dunno, just a thought. Now, what I'm really waiting for is whats coming up next. i mean the whole bonding thing of course and I'm totally stoked to see what new readers think about it too. I think last time it didn't get the respect it deserved cause girl, it was a HOT HOT HOT TAMALE chapter!

So there, enough of a review for now since my fingers hurt, lol. I will hopefully be posting some of my other fav stories on the yahoo group soon! luv ya!

~Jenn
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From alialdeet on April 02, 2005
My favorite chapter thus far.
Harry is so hot in this chapter. Mmm...green eyes and black hair really IS an excellent combination.
Their making out was really intense. I thought it was great that they said...what...like three words to each other or something? That's great. "Better?" "Much." That's just great. I like the idea of Harry's emotions being so strong that overpower Laurel. Canon Harry does have very strong emotions. But are Draco's emotions strong enough to counter the effect Harry's have? I think they are! I think he's just been good at hiding them so far because that's the way he's lived. But, of course, when Draco opens up, it will be intense.
Hm...how very strange. I started out talking about one hot guy and ended up talking about Draco.
It's like you when it comes to my Snape story, because, of course, Snape is so hot.
I love this Harry. I really, really, really do.
I demand more Harry smut!
Um...if you respond to demands.
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From alialdeet on April 02, 2005
I thought it was both SWEET and incredibly funny when Draco started talking about using himself as a human shield. I especially liked Laurel's reaction. I could HEAR it. "What? NO! Draco, I will most definitely not..." ya, paraphrasing, but that was funny. In a sweet way.
Maybe it wasn't supposed to be funny. I wasn't really tuned into the whole Draco-being-hurt-nearly-to-death thing. I didn't really realize it until he was on the couch and Laurel's mom was having those thoughts. Maybe there needed to be some more drama in the actual part where he got hurt. Inject drama. Maybe make the Death Eater who did it someone we know.
ANYWAY!
Here's a fact for you:
I've gotten about sixty percent of the hits for my A Real Edge story as you've gotten for this one BUT I've gotten LESS than ten percent of the reviews you've gotten.
You have a very review-inspiring story here. Isn't that nice?
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From alialdeet on April 02, 2005
Ya, well I guess that was a nice enough transitional chapter. It left me wanting, however, though I'm sure that doesn't bother YOU as much as it bothers ME. Geez...Draco is so pathetic. Already so into Laurel that her name's the ONLY thing he says. Laurel is so...weird. Being all into Draco when there's Harry there.
I'm sorry.
Did I forget to mention that I'm in love with and rooting for your Harry?
Hahaha...okay, don't worry. I'm okay with Draco too. It's just that he's been asleep for the last few chapters. Harry seems the most normal. He's got all that responsibility, yes, but he's all "I want this girl, I'll take this girl." Draco's all weird and crying all the time in his room. Laurel's all whiny and teenagery and hormonal and looking-into-peoples'-eyes-to-see-their-soul-y.
Why is there so much of Laurel's mom? Does she play an important part later? I guess they do need an adult after that ordeal.
I did like Draco's parents. Where'd they go?
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From ANON - Silverdragon on April 02, 2005
Hey Lorett,

Pleasssssssssssseee tell me darling Draco is going to be ok, he's an absolute honey. Thanks for the well wishes for London, its not that far from us ( takes about 5 hours) I'm sooooo envious of you living in California, I was there last Summer and ADORED it so much so im going back next year for a month. Im in rainy England just by the Lake District, its beautiful place but soooo wet! Ohhh and the wrist is coming along fine, how's the cough? If i manage to find the Leaky Couldron i'll be taking pikkies of it, and going in for a drink. Stay safe and well

thanks for adding me to your emailing list

tons of hugs

Silverdragon
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From ANON - Ali aka ginny-rules-the-world on April 01, 2005
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SMILE! this IS the happy hour!
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From ANON - dragon34 on April 01, 2005
I kept thinking Laurels mom or dad would walk in on her and Harry, I wasn't expecting Ron to interupt them. I know you said there wouldn't be no action between her and Harry, but just one more time , maybe at Hogwarts.

I felt so sorry for Draco. I know it's going to be a Draco/Laurel story, but I honostly thought you were going to write him out. I know it was a goofy thought....punish me later.

Ron and that poor leg of his, I can't remember which leg got hurt in Prisoner of Azkaban, thats what it reminded me of.

Wouldn't it be just like Harry, get in the middle of a big fight, and only come out of it with just scratches.

I love it, can;t wait to read more. I'm your loyal reader forever.
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From ANON - RahNee on April 01, 2005
Hmm Umm Umm *smacks her lips* Chapter 25 (I'm not confused anymore) was so delicious! Lemony good!

Hold on a second, Miss Lorett!!! What makes you think that just because I read the fabulous sexy smut that is chapter 5 of "It Had to Be You" I would not appreciate a wonderfully hot 'n' heavy fantastically juicy makeout session with gorgeous green-eyed Harry as the star stud muffin???!!! Just 'cause things didn't progress as far doesn't mean the Infamous Bathroom Scene wasn't HOT AS HELL! I had to take off my sweatshirt, turn on the ceiling fan and throw an ice pack around my neck, I was so hot and bothered reading this! That first kiss was as sexy as...oh, my brain is short-circuiting and I can't think of an appropriate metaphor...sexy as... aw heck! *throws in the towel, grabs the champagne flute from you, clinks it and tosses it back. Looks around the gutter and notes the fine company she is keeping*

The sound you are hearing is me, running the cold water in preparation...

Harry and Laurel have a lot in common...like the wallowing in guilt thing they both do. They know that "with great power comes great responsibility" (hee hee, I got to throw a Spider-man quote in...how often does THAT happen?) and of course, great guilt when bad stuff happens. But thank goodness they didn't wallow in guilt too long but were able to progress to the checking each other out with hearts a'thumping and senses a'tingling in a timely manner! I like how you've made Laurel a reader of people's character and soul, but that sure can put one in some awkward situations when one is reading a gorgeous hottie who's got one thing on his mind. The bathroom scene being a good case in point. I like how she get's taken over by Harry's emotions.

The slight digression into Harry's musings about girls' reactions to his scar was very funny.

Damn nipples and their ability to betray a girl! It's not like you can say "Heh, heh...cold in here, no?" when you are blushing and sweating, now can you?

The healing scene was just sensuous and yummy. Aww... the whole thing was sensuous and yummy, and just beautifully written! The exploring tongues, the groping, the hands in the hair...sigh...so damned fantastic.... *kicks back in the gutter for a little while* And the paragraph right before Ron interrupts (someone Avada him!) was just....OH MY! *sips champagne and grins happily at Lorett*

My poor Harry is shot down in the end. I'm glad you mention he will get some other action later on. In the meantime, I gladly volunteer to comfort him! Poor poor raven-haired cutie, you just come here to RahNee and she will make it all better! Just give her a second to get out of Chapter 13 where she is comforting a naked, crying Draco...

Lorett, dearest, I must ask you not to use the words "Draco" "sexy as hell" and "wouldn't that just be the best ride ever?" near each other again. I will NOT be held responsible for my actions...

I am back in good standing with IFOLFA, you will be relieved to know...and I'm getting to work on your jacket cover! I'll be your publicity agent anytime you want, hon. I love reading and reviewing your work: it makes me a happy, happy girl. Hugs and kisses and more hugs to you, and some "get 100% well" wishes to boot! *mwah*

BTW, I hope I made it clear that I LOVED this chapter?! Just checking!

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From ANON - Alison on March 31, 2005
Heya!!

Hmph. You bet you can't forget me on that ride. I've been strapped in since Day 1. Lovely update, my dear. Simply gorgeous. Just enough action to turn me on....which reminds me. It Had to Be You. Don't worry, I went right over there to read it after I reviewed last time, but as I think I mentioned, I have LIMITED COMPUTER TIME (partly due to my mother's paranoia of technology. SHe's afraid it'll turn me into a vegetable. She doesn't realize I'm doing something CONSTRUCTIVE. Hmph), SO I WASN'T ABLE TO FINISH THE CHAPPIE!! HOW UNFAIR IS THAT, EH? I was so mad. But then, I figured I had never really read (soaked in, really) OR reviewed for the other four chapters, so I'm going to go slow and review each one in detail. Heh heh, bear with me. It may take me a couple weeks or so, but it will be well worth the wait. I hope. School does get in the way (oh, and by the way, I'm in ninth grade. Cringes. I know, I know, young, immature, naive....eek. We'll ignore all that though. Hem hem...).

Okay, now onto your ...er... delicious story. I, at least, get to read the smut in the right order. Yay!! Wow, Harry is sooooooooo dreamy. My favorite line in your whole description of him was...hold on...let me find it....ah. Here it is (don't mind the lengthy quote): "This was very unlike Harry; he was anything but forward when it came to women. He
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From ANON - kazhdu on March 31, 2005
Me again!

Just a little P.S. after I read the review about the 'well endowed' part. A tip, actually:

All sex gods do not need to have big penises. I've met regular endowed men who were kings in bed and big guys who needed constant instructions. There is an expression in french about those kinds of guys : 'He's hung like a stallion but he shags like a donkey.'
And often, it's true. Actually, often enough, well endowed men have this misconception that their size alone will drive girls to ecstasy.
And there is also the women's size to consider. Not all women are equipped to accomodate ten inches inside of them. I've met girls who only liked them big, girls who preferred them small and one girl who loved them crooked!
So many fanfics make Draco (and for some reason Ron also, most of the time) huge, that it becomes a boring common fact.

Hope to read you soon, ciao!
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From ANON - kazhdu on March 31, 2005
Hi!

Still in love with the story (and Draco, of course), still reading avidely, still archiving!

Is Laurel's double attraction purely hormonal or has her soul-seeing ability something to do with it?

Hope to see Draco well and snarky soon!

Keep up the good work, I'll be awaiting the updates!

Ciao!
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From on March 30, 2005
*Hugs!* I AM enjoying it this time around! lol, but I do have to say, I'm waiting for some sexified Draco/Laurel action here.. Now THAT would be sexy as all get-out! *grin* I can't wait for some Delectable Drool-Inducing Draco!! *hee hee!*

*HUGE GRIN!* I remember this chapter (25) VERY well!! How could I forget it?! It's the BATHROOM SCENE! That's just something you CAN'T forget.....Mmm, all the Hunky Hottness of Harry... hmm, I may just need a cold shower now, lol!

Hugs! And I hope you get rid of that nasty cough soon! Toodles!
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