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By : lorettcopeland

From alialdeet on March 24, 2005
Well...Draco finally got out of the house, where he sat around all day, thinking about Lucius and crying. Now he's sitting around for hours, thinking about Harry and even though I'm happy to escape the crying, I sorta miss ol' naked Draco.
Draco is all about subtlety, huh? I know that's not canon...but let's see...I guess when he FIRST went in to talk to Lucius, he was subtle in the way he slunk over to one side of the room so he could be in a better position but after that, he was pretty damn obvious about being t-ed off. But at the same time, it would have been nice, actually, if he were even LESS subtle and had just hauled off and punched Lucius. That would have been good.
Anyway...contemplative Draco is good, yes, but I'm now ready for some action.
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From ANON - Blondhunter on March 23, 2005
Glad to see you got to post this story somewhere. I do not understand FF.net. I swear they are becoming ridiculous on what stories they knock off the site. I think they look for the best stories with the most reviews and smirk evilly and take them off. They are going to start loosing people going to that site if they keep it up.

But at last, I am glad that you are still posting this story, it is so good and I am ready for the next new chapter to see what Lucius does to his son? Poor Draco, I also can't wait to see what other couples come together in the story.

I glad I got your e-mails an I will be trying to review often to get you the credit that you deserve!

Love ya!
A-
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From ANON - HarryLuv2 on March 23, 2005
hurray! we're finally at my fav part of the stroy. i love this story so much and i am so happy you are going on with it. can't wait for the new cahpter, i hope you're working on it....looking at you with narrow eyes!

ok, can't wait for next chapter.

love HL
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From ANON - Silverdragon on March 23, 2005
Iv'e just started to read stuff on this site ( owing to the fact im a draco nutt!) So i stumbled accross your story and thought i'd give it a look at. That was earlier on this afternoon, sat on the patio. I'm now in bed and am still reading it on my laptop, i cant put it down!!!!! Really good stuff, keep it going.

isn't Draco an absolute HONEY.

Silverdragon
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From ANON - mrs_accio_firebolt on March 22, 2005

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From ANON - Ali aka Ginny-rules-the-world on March 22, 2005
OMG I FORGOT TO SAY SOMETHING BEFORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! GASP!!!!!!! haha ur chapters called hate to say i told u so but i LOVE to say i told u so. HAHAHAAHAHAHAHA! ok srz. TTYL!
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From ANON - infamous-writer on March 22, 2005
Chapter 19: What a way to start a night! There's potential danger in the air and all the guys can do is dance! Okay, okay...so Draco is a lil sexoholic but still! He needs to put that away for now and get Harry and Ron out of there. Hehehhe...or my evil, dirty side suggests: Get Laurel in a hotel room PRONTO!

Aight, I'm soo tired, it's the wee hours of the morning and I need to get to bed, but I am so happy that I'm catching up quickly. A few more chapters for me! Whoohooo then I'm gonna cry when I can't click the next chapter button...sigh. I must be bombarding you with reviews...WEll, just wait till I catch up. More, longer in depth, reviews :D.

Bye!
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From ANON - infamous-writer on March 22, 2005
Chapter 18: AHHH! I can't believe this, wow...Draco is soo stressed out! Man, I feel like smacking Harry and putting a duck tape around Ron's mouth. Hehehehe...but then again I understand why they don't believe him. I wouldn't myself, but I wouldn't cause that much hassle after all it's SEXY DRACO!
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From ANON - infamous-writer on March 22, 2005
Okay, wow...I was sooo damn determined to finish this lil ficlet, but the emotions are sooo damn spiral twisting! I just had to take a break to let you know that. :D I'm almost there though. I just had to mention that Draco is the most funniest character. Maybe it's just me but I like sarcastic people, since I tend to be one myself. I due hope Draco forms alliance with Harry and we all live HAPPILY EVER AFTER...okay kidding. But still, something good should come this way for our poor *sarcastic* Draco :D. Back to Reading...
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From ANON - Infamous-Writer on March 22, 2005
Hey! It's me again! Long time no hear! Well I must say that I'm sadly not even CLOSE to catching up. So many horrible things seem to occur this past two weeks. First, I get the freaking CHICKEN POX! Like seriously, I'm a grown woman! Grrr...Anyways, I have no choice but to suffer. Luckily I am on my last stage of this distressing time and as well as exams that I had to postpone will now have to be taken. Another GRRR! Gosh, life can be so awful. Anyways, I don't want to rant and bore you. I might be one of the slowest readers here, only on chapter 15, but I will catch up before this story is done. Hopefully.

I would like to say that you keep the characters, even Laurel, so realistic. I love that, I sometimes myself get carried away and forget characterization but enough of that. I'm out for now. Take care, until next time.

Bye!
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From ANON - RahNee on March 22, 2005
Chapter 23, which serves to remind us just how bad those Death Eaters are! Why, they even have the nerve to interrupt the fabulous sexual tension going on between Harry and Laurel, and Draco and Laurel, and Draco and RahNee... whoops! Just fantasizing about pressing my hips against Draco like I wanted him...which I do. Since Harry is busy dancing...

Well, I love jealous Draco! Seething with jealousy, he still has the presence of mind to check out Laurel's body language and see that Harry doesn't affect her quite the way Draco does. I'm glad he saw that before he killed Harry, because, well, not only would I miss Harry, but then there wouldn't be any thing for those poor Death Eaters to do, now would there? And a man who reads body language, and really tries to figure out how the girl is feeling...I want one of those!

I like the little scene Draco stages to get them off the dance floor. Being an actress myself (by avocation only, not professionally by any means), I appreciate the presence of mind and quick improvisation. The scene with Harry & Draco trying to figure out what to do with Laurel, then Laurel arguing with Draco was nice and well paced. I could not look away for a second! Very engrossing.

But the "oh yeah" moment for me was when Harry asks "Are you with me or not?" and Draco sees the line drawn in the sand and makes his choice. And they LOCK EYES and the moment of alliance I was waiting for happens! I loved this quote so much that I must repeat it here: "For a moment they locked eyes, clear, fierce and intense, the emotions running between them, sending a silent understanding into their souls that said more than words ever could. In that instant an acceptance and a newfound loyalty was established between them." Brilliant! Absolutely brilliant!

Another favorite quote: "Harry was dangerous when he lost control" (Good thing I read it in context or my mind would have gone straight to the gutter with that one!) And then, in the midst of danger and mayhem, you dish out some quick witty repartee: "I'm just concerned about saving you and me at the moment." Draco snapped. "Thanks a lot!" Ron bellowed. "URGH...YOU as in plural you IDIOT!!!" Ha ha! Loved it.

So...Draco roughed up Tad, huh? And I thought he was scoping the place for danger...But better Tad than Harry, I say! And now Laurel knows the extent to which Draco will go to protect her. And Miss Laurel is one powerful girl! I can't wait to see the expressions on Draco's and Harry's faces when they realize that she is a witch and a damned powerful one at that.

*claps hands and jumps up and down excitedly* Ohhhh, Lorett, I would ABSOLUTELY LOVE to collaborate with you! That would be SO FREAKING AWESOME! *runs around in a dither until she smacks into the door jamb of the office...makes mental note to install French doors now that half the wall is knocked away!* I can't believe you'd like to join forces with li'l ol' me! *blushes* But, if it is as you say, and we were separated at birth, well then it is inevitable. So...which one is the proverbial evil twin? I know *snaps fingers* we can take turns! Hee hee!

Okay...about the 2-furs, or lack thereof...I think I may be able to handle it. IF the chapters ARE going to get as long as you say. (I had to do some deep breathing techniques to get through those last sentences!) It would be very un-IFOLFA-esque of me if I did not inquire as to when one might expect one of these aforementioned LONG chappies, hmmm? And I should warn you that Impatient Fans Of Lorett's Fanfics Anonymous (IFOLFA) is starting a serious scrutiny into the apparant lack of posting of a new chapter for "It Had to Be You" NOT that I am being impatient, mind you, oh no no, not me. I am the picture of patience. Just sitting here, patient as can be... yep. Patiently sitting. Uh huh. That's me.............................

Hugs and extra smooches to you, Lorett love, for once again brightening my life with your story! Hope you have a GREAT week!
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From ANON - Alison on March 21, 2005
Hm. How do I hold onto my hat AND put my arms in the air??? I spose I could take the hat off my head (pink bowler with leopard spots, OF COURSE) and hold it in the air with my arms......ah, yes. I forget I am not alone. Heh heh.....Yes, I COMPLETELY get what you meant by the elipses (conveying hesitation). It's what I was trying to get at, actually, but I didn't quite know how to say it. The hesitation!! Yes!! That's what it's called!! And I looked back over chap. 21, and think it's muy better. Just enough taken out to soften the emphasis a bit.

Ah, as for my update....I was writing the response to your review (it got quite long...lots of info in there) and had no time to acutally post. I hope to get it up tomorrow, but we'll have to see. It was all set though, and I'm feeling much better about this upcoming chapter after a few votes of confidence from you and Ally. It's going to take a little longer to post, that's all, especially since I'm going away for Spring Break this Saturday. Or Friday. Can't remember which.

Now, back to you. The thing I loved most about this particular chapter was the avoidance of the admittance that Laurel was a witch. I had sort of forgotten they didn't know, and it made this whole encounter all the more interesting. What made it even MORE intriguing was that Draco kissed her (sexy, very sexy) even though she was a "Muggle." Like you said in one of your earlier chapters, even he was interested in Muggle women when they were that good-looking, or something along those lines. It was just wierd to think of Draco Malfoy having feelings and promising a relationship with someone from a completely different culture - one that he looks down on. Hell, Malfoy promising ANYTHING is just wierd. But it's what makes HG/DM fics so interesting...they have only utter disgust for each other, though his tends to be rooted in disgust of her background, on top of resentment for her brilliance and morals. To so willingly accept Laurel, though he would usually hold nothing but contempt for her, makes him a bit more human. Well, not human. But different than the Draco we're used to. Not that that's a bad thing, necessarily. It makes him more sincere and selfless in his little "heroic act" to save Harry's ass.

What I also found interesting was Laurel's perception of his thoughts to die alone. Unloved, you said. Unloved? But Narcissa loves him, though I'm sure to a teenage boy her decision seems to contradict that. My best guess is that you're referring to his lack of romantic love. Or maybe his father's disgust. And now, Laurel loves him. Unloved may be the wrong word....he wouldn't be missed. That I could believe in. Draco's never been anyone's favorite person (except himself, naturally), but he isn't unloved. Just his death wouldn't mean very much to that many people.

Okay, I'm rambling here. Ignore the above thoughts if thou so wisheth. Love you, darling!! Update soon soon soon soon soon!! And I will, too. And I will hopefully be able to review faster, too!

~Me.
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From on March 21, 2005
You know for someone who really doesn't want to be a hero, Draco is acting too much like one. I was really hoping he would listen to laurel, but I guess he's too much of a stubborn man. I thought it was cute for both Harry and Draco to fret over laurel. I can't wait for your next chapter, your story is really amazing.
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From alialdeet on March 21, 2005
Yay. So he's finally getting out. He needs it. There's too much crying in his house.
How does he stay "rock hard" when he's stuck in his room all the time?
Do you know what a barn owl looks like? I think I used to write random owls into stories sometimes (or maybe not, I'm not sure) but since REE, I made it my business to know a little more about owls. I used to imagine barn owls as the cute ones, but those are actually screech owls. Barn owls are the David Bowie owls. You've seen The Labyrinth, right? Hmm...if not, I imagine it might be something you like. Maybe. I'm not really sure.
Anyway...finally! He's getting out!
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From alialdeet on March 21, 2005
Ah...I like Narcissa better when she loves Lucius. You know, it HAD been obvious, but somehow I didn't consider the fact that anyone could love someone so icky. Well, I like her better for it. It explains why she's so hot for him and it gives her damn good reason to kill him.
But I do want to see Draco kick his ass! I hope that comes before Narcissa offs him. Oh well, I'm sure it'd be fine even without.
I was wondering...does Draco have any faults? I want to see him at school as well because he really does not seem to have any faults. Unless you count wallowing in misery and self-pity. Maybe I should count that, but really, I wouldn't exactly blame him for it.
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