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By : lorettcopeland

From ANON - Voodoo on July 24, 2006
This is an amazing story! I spent the entire day reading it and am completely glued, you must write more! The latest chapter, 37, was definetly one of the more intense and it`s very impressive how you come up with your own spells and make them sound so authentic!
Out of all the HP stories i have read on AFF this has got to be one of the best. It has an amazing plot and really does make you want to read more, small bits of story pop-up and, like with the real Harry Potter books, you`re not quite sure what will come of it.
Please keep writing, it would be a crime if you didn`t!!
Awesome story,
Voo =)
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From ANON - accio on July 20, 2006
First of all.- CONGRATULATIONS on the update. I know it was quite an achievement for you...and frankly, a delight for us. Overall, I liked it very much.

Lucius is one of my favorite fanfic characters. If you look closely, he is not such an important character in the books.- he doesn't get a lot of "scenes". But fanfic writers always have a picnic with him. And though my ever-dirty brain favours another pairing for him, he is a very "convertible" character. He can be mean... REALLY mean. Or actually sweet (I once read a DM/HP fic that featured a WONDERFUL funny, family-caring Lucius Malfoy). Or totally ambiguous. The spy, the Dark Lord's right hand, the funny guy or even Snape's partner... I love every Lucius.

And that's the main reason why I enjoyed this chapter so much. I know you focus a lot on Draco and Laurel (as you should, for this is their story), but the insight of Lucius was price-less. You've nailed him so nicely... (I can still remember and sigh over him and Narcissa in the second chapter...) He's been terrible so far. But what I specially liked about him in this chapter was that you made him... afraid. The whole time I felt like he was afraid... and I was scared he might do something. You made him REALLY dangerous. I got the feeling that he was getting desperate, that he is starting to really analyse his chances to win... and he's finding out that they aren't too many.

Before I forget and because I am ALWAYS honest enough to tell what I found not 100% to my liking, three comments:
1. Are you sure that Draconous Lucius Malfoy is Draco's real name? I'm only asking because as Ronnie can tell, I don't like inventions of names. But as Ronnie knows too, I may be wrong to think that this is not the correct name.
2. There is a spell in the books to silence a person or creature or animal... it is "silencio". Book 5.
3. The Soul-Freeing Spell was too long for me. The largest "spell" we've seen in the books is "Bone of the Father, unknowingly given"... blah blah blah, right? And it wasn't so long or complex.

All of the above are my personal views. Feel free to nevermind me. They are only things I point out because I personally feel the story would be better without them... But once again, it's just crazy-old me.

OK. Let's move on.

This was a very "important" chapter, I think, because it shapes and determines in a way, the relation between Draco and Lucius. Before, it was only Lucius who had a plan. He knew what he was doing... now Draco knows too. I look forward to a lot more confrontation between the two gorgeous blonds.

It was also important because of the way the whole "goody-bunch" will look at Draco. Laurel and Ginny saw him "eliminate" all of his non-born sisters and brothers... in order to save THEM. I think that's pretty strong, don't you? What will they end up thinking? Will it be the last push they needed to trust him? Or will it make them SCARED of him? I know I'd be.

Finally, I'd like to make a comment on the most significant line of the whole chapter:

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From ANON - darkestdream on July 19, 2006
I am shocked, I am floored. I hope you don't find fault with me for not reviewing ever single chapter, but I found this story so captivating, I couldn't stop between chapters. DracoOC is my favorite pairing of all time, but good stories like that are very difficult to come by. You're doing a marvelous job, this story caught my attention from chp. 1. I wonder, why did you get kicked off this site before? Though that doesn't really matter, what does is that I hope you update this story as soon as possible and if not, maybe you could email me some of it. :) I need to know what happens!!! In reading some of your character's inner thoughts, that they don't actually say, I could almost hear myself in those words.... I think you and I view these characters in very similar ways. This is a great piece of work you have here, and I'll be cheering for Draco and Laurel's happiness right up to the very end. Great job! Please don't abandon this story, never to update it again. I love it too much!
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From ANON - rain on July 16, 2006
Hello sweets. It's occurred to me that I really miss the authors fav stories in the profile section. I used to be able to just click on your name when I wanted to read. Now I had to scroll...I really had to work hard to get here LOL!

Anyway I'm on Chapter Twenty two...

A Harry/Draco/OC triangle you naughty girl you! I thought Draco was in Trouble but our little heroine is the one who has bitten off more than she can chew. Talk about between a rock and a hard place. Not that it wouldn't be a nice place to be...hmmmm...wait get back on track here.

I especially loved Harry's inner dialog in this chapter, very clever. Also Laurel's realization of just who she was flirting with was priceless. Malfoy and Potter. I can completely understand her OMG factor. I love that she is smart and dumbed herself down to get out of her slip. Not that it wont be obvious that she is no muggle as soon as she shows up a Hogwarts. That will be quite a shock for our Mr. Malfoy...

Rain
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From ANON - Gabrielle Scott on July 15, 2006
Wow....great story....i couldn't stop reading. I'm really enjoying it so far. I can't wait till the next chapter is up!
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From ANON - Randomized-Data on July 13, 2006
At first i was slightly skeptical, skeptical you say? Yes skeptical. a HP FFict How else could i not be? Wary i was. YET Malfoy, the one and only Draco Malfoy is one of my all time favourite characters! He has such potential don't cha think? That and your intro was so intriguing. I just HAD to know more!! I love the whole love triangle theme. The kiss between Harry and Laurel, the small smoulder of passion between Giny and our beloved Draco. And we must not forget ze strong, passionate love between Laurel and Draco... ((Envious i be!)) The way your Characters have interplayed themselves with the Orginal HP Characters, simply amazing. I could simply gush, on and on and on.... How much i love this FFict!! I started reading this at 8-9pm and now tis 3:40am!! ((Which i'll prolly regret in ze morrow for staying up so late...BUT! It was well worth it!!))And now i'm tired and i think i'll go to bed OR i'll go and see what other goodies are in store for me on your profile page! ((Addicted i be)) Heh, another thing i noticed is your interaction with ze readers/reviewers. throughout the chapters. I like that alot, hence the reson why i'm typing up this reveiw. Please add me to your list. i'd love to get an update of when the next fix of TTK's is up. xXx
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From ANON - dracosdiva on July 03, 2006
I have to say I love it. I gave the story a chance like you said and I'm impressed. Draco is divine and I think I'm already in love with Harry and Ron too. Can't wait for more. DD
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From ANON - PinkTribeChick on June 30, 2006
Okay . . . I am officially impressed . . . this is easily one of the best, most well-thought out stories I've come across in a VERY long time. You are truly a talented writer, and I look forward to seeing where you go next with this piece. Keep up the AMAZING work, and more very soon please! 8~D
~ptc~
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From ANON - wolfs_paw on June 28, 2006
AAAAAAH! UPDATE! ::faints, then jumps back up and starts rereading for a third time::

Lor, this is amazing! Lol, I won't demand that you write more this very second since I know that your schedule is probably about as nuts as mine is right now, but please hurry! You don't know how many times I've used Three Keys as a study break over the past few months. I'm so glad that you're continuing with it!

I was wondering, if you had a spare moment sometime, I started something of an epic (ha ha) Sirius fic on ff.net, and if you wanted to take a look at it, you'd make my day. Not to edit or anything, lol, don't worry, I wouldn't put that burden on you, but I'd really like to know what you think of it. It's called "And All Will Come To Darkness". It's at www.fanfiction.net/~nightshade468. No hurry, but if you ever get a chance, I'd love some feedback from you, mi amiga.

Hope everything's going great! And write more, darnit! Lol.
Luv, Kate
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From ANON - luckyladymalfoy on June 27, 2006
I'm working my way through the story. Don't typically like OC stories, but this is fun and your characters are a hoot. I especially like the Harry/Ron/Draco conversations. It has been my favorite so far. I'm spending way too much time reading when I should be sleeping. Ah well, its summer and I'm on vacation, so who cares, right? lol. I'm at chapter 21 now. Off to read more. Great story so far. LLM
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From ANON - Rain on June 25, 2006
Chapter Twenty One:

It does strike me that Laurel instantly has a good opinion and intrinsic trust of Draco. Certainly not something that he is used to and I can see how quickly it breaks down his defenses. At least he knows he is in trouble. It's kind of different perspective you can do with an OC because everyone else already knows him, but she knows nothing about his history.

I just love how he thinks shes a muggle, but she doesn't even think about it. Never wonders in her mind, because to her it's not important, but to him...no matter what he says...it is important. I can't wait until he finds out she's a witch. That should be quite the shock...on to read more my love, no time to review when there is reading to be done :)
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From ANON - Rain on June 25, 2006
OMG! Now that AFF is finally back up and running I can finally read the rest of your story. I've been carefully avoiding any posts at Three Keys about this because I'm only on chapter 20 :( But now I can fiannly get caught up, if they don't shut down again. I am just too excited. So then of course I had lost the general lay of the land and had to skim 19 chapters to finally get here. Whew, busy morning.

Everytime I read this I love Laurel more and more. The sexy seductive devious way she was winning Draco's attention was so Slytherin of her. The jealousy was very well done, from her perspective. I loved her description of Draco, what he was wearing. I also really liked the way everything faded into the background when he touched her. That was adorable. Hot things are happening here. What a vivacious ficcie you have going here.

On to read more...;

Rain

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From ANON - Sunny J on June 23, 2006
Well, last night when I was talking to Ronnie, she said you out did yourself with this one and I am going to have to agree. Really, Lorett, I think you can write it all. You can do humor and comedy, I do remember some great lighter moments earlier in the story that helped to move the plot along but also kept the reader interested. You can do romance for dang sure - I still think Laurel and Harry's bathroom scene was HOT (mistake that it was, hot nonetheless). You can do action and adventure style - fight scene in the club, anyone? You've just got the KNACK for spell creation and your research is quite thorough and really adds to the authenticity of the story, makes it actually feel like it's part of Rowling's universe, not the far fetched versions everyone else comes up with.

And clearly, you can do angsty drama, as this last chapter has proved. And you did it so well. You really delved deep into Draco, bringing to the surface his deepest fears, greatest regrets, his most painful memories . . . his pain made the whole chapter that much more poignant. It really proved to me, as a reader, why he has made some of the decisions he has made - and ultimately, why he didn't kill his father . . . he's not a failure; he has won with compassion. I am sure Lucius is out for Draco's blood now, but really . . . every young man has daddy issues, to some degree.

I am glad that Laurel didn't intervene any more than she did, that she was able to let Draco do his thing. He needed to do this on his own and the little help that she gave him was just right; she didn't do anything to tip the scales, she just made it so that Draco could have the chance to prove himself. She's gonna be good for him, for sure. And he's already envisioning their future family . . . awww . . . that is, as long as Lucius doesn't do the sterilizing spell to Draco in revenge . . .

You did a great job with this one Lorett. You definitely touched on some controversial things and stretched the characters and only good writers can get away with that. And you've definitely gotten away with it, so props to you! :-) I like how Lucius' sperm had souls . . . lol . . . that was funny to me . . . but that aside, the moral dilemma of killing his future children before Lucius can kill them himself is a powerful one . . . and whether it was the right choice or not, Draco had to do what was right by him and as long as it can come to terms with his decisions and himself, then he can only go forward . . .

Honestly L, it was superb . . . and although it was a long time coming and the expectations were high, you soared so high above them, that I need to go back and reread this story just so I can have some more of your awesome talent! :-)

Always,
SJ
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From ANON - N. Cavigliano on June 22, 2006
Amazing, that was worth the long wait. After reading that I feel like it's a whole new day, so refreshed. I'll be looking out for the new chapter!
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From ANON - lilycat on June 22, 2006
YAYE! It was wonderful Lorett! Heartbreaking and gut-wrenching and terrifying but WONDERFUL!

Poor Draco... Might he be getting some consolation snuggles soon? *looks hopeful*

And that spell he used on Lucius - wow. Brutal but brilliant.

I can't wait for more!!!!
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